The Sea
A dog represents the moods of the sea.18 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
Definitely different you!! What a metaphor this is. Can picture it now and love the comparisons you make. Sweet write poet. Wonderfully penned.
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Definitely different you!! What a metaphor this is. Can picture it now and love the comparisons you make. Sweet write poet. Wonderfully penned.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Just so long as the dog doesn't eat PAL dogfood - we might end up with a cyclone! Thanks mate. Cheers, Kay.
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LOL hope not you!!!
Comment from Adam C. Glasier
A very interesting comparison you have here, but you pulled it off artistically. I almost feel as if my senses have been more opened to the sea by using the analogy. good job.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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A very interesting comparison you have here, but you pulled it off artistically. I almost feel as if my senses have been more opened to the sea by using the analogy. good job.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Thank you Adam, for reading and reviewing; glad you liked the comparison. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from acajudy
You had a clever idea and I enjoyed the read. The sea can be either a giant or a minx depending on it's own whim. Thank for sharing your thoughts.
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You had a clever idea and I enjoyed the read. The sea can be either a giant or a minx depending on it's own whim. Thank for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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acajudy, Thanks so much for reading and reviewing; glad you liked the poem. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from dportwood
Aussie,
This is excellent writing. Lovely rhyming and a great idea using the dog to describe the sea. Licking greasy paws, gnawing, sniffing, howling. Excellent descriptors. Well done.
Duane
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Aussie,
This is excellent writing. Lovely rhyming and a great idea using the dog to describe the sea. Licking greasy paws, gnawing, sniffing, howling. Excellent descriptors. Well done.
Duane
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Duane, A long way from the cattle country! Thanks so much for reading and glad you enjoyed the comparisons. Just glad the dog doesn't eat PAL dogfood, end up with a cyclone! Blessings, Kay.
Comment from juliaSjames
This is a well composed poem in which the extended metaphor undoubtedly succeeds in conveying the varying moods of the sea. I couldn't quite work out the rhyme scheme, and there is an uneven break between the second and third stanzas that may be linked with rhyming. However, it is an intensely evocative piece of work.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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This is a well composed poem in which the extended metaphor undoubtedly succeeds in conveying the varying moods of the sea. I couldn't quite work out the rhyme scheme, and there is an uneven break between the second and third stanzas that may be linked with rhyming. However, it is an intensely evocative piece of work.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Thank you my learned friend; glad you liked the poem and the comparison. Cheers, Kay.
Did come over a bit ponderous, didn't it? Sorry about that..please, don't sic the dog on me!!! I promise I won't do it again... julia
Comment from swosugrad09
Creative approach! I like this analogy of dog and sea. Your imagery very well executed. The poem flows nicely and is easy to follow. Props to you.
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Creative approach! I like this analogy of dog and sea. Your imagery very well executed. The poem flows nicely and is easy to follow. Props to you.
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, glad you liked the comparisons. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from RebelRose
I have never, and probably would never have thought about comparing the dog to the sea but I see where you're coming from with this and it makes sense. Well done.
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I have never, and probably would never have thought about comparing the dog to the sea but I see where you're coming from with this and it makes sense. Well done.
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
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Haven't you ever heard of the term 'old sea dog?' Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed the poem. Cheers, Kay.
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Yes, I have that expression all my life but I thought it was referring to the old sailor, not the sea. It's a good comparison, though.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Kay,
This is a great metaphorical poem. I love to write about the sea (as you know) Your descriptive words of an angry sea are wonderful and I wish I had thought of them! Your fist line of the second verse and the first line of your third verse are creative and depict the sea so well. Love this....bravo....blessings, chey
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Hi Kay,
This is a great metaphorical poem. I love to write about the sea (as you know) Your descriptive words of an angry sea are wonderful and I wish I had thought of them! Your fist line of the second verse and the first line of your third verse are creative and depict the sea so well. Love this....bravo....blessings, chey
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Mazza, Thank you for reading and the excellent rating; anything to do with the sea captures me! Just hope the dog doesn't eat PAL dogfood, might end up with a cyclone! LOL, Kay.
