The Sea
A dog represents the moods of the sea.18 total reviews
Comment from jlsavell
aussie, I love this. your use metaphorical imagery is just astounding. The ending quite superb, making the overall piece have such a light spirit to it. well done..now you go take on the day.jlsavell
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2011
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aussie, I love this. your use metaphorical imagery is just astounding. The ending quite superb, making the overall piece have such a light spirit to it. well done..now you go take on the day.jlsavell
Comment Written 24-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2011
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Hello my dear friend; thanks for reading and the rating. Glad you enjoyed the ocean. Love, Kay.
Comment from adewpearl
I love this extended metaphor, Kay - your poetry just keeps getting better and better
Great internal rhyming and end-line rhyming and flow
Wonderful visuals and sensory appeal
strong use of alliteration and repetition that enhances the flow
This is totally deserving of a six, but I have no six. Just know how very much I admire this and enjoyed reading it :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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I love this extended metaphor, Kay - your poetry just keeps getting better and better
Great internal rhyming and end-line rhyming and flow
Wonderful visuals and sensory appeal
strong use of alliteration and repetition that enhances the flow
This is totally deserving of a six, but I have no six. Just know how very much I admire this and enjoyed reading it :-) Brooke
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Bless you my learned friend; glad you liked the comparison between dog and sea. Just glad dog doesn't eat PAL dogfood, might end up with a cyclone! LOL, Kay.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Kay ....
I think this is a truly beautiful piece of free-thought writing which I really enjoyed reading. Your descriptions are so vivid and I am wondering if you did the lovely painting at the top. For these reasons, I have no hesitation in awarding you the 6th star.
Of course, there is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Hullo Kay ....
I think this is a truly beautiful piece of free-thought writing which I really enjoyed reading. Your descriptions are so vivid and I am wondering if you did the lovely painting at the top. For these reasons, I have no hesitation in awarding you the 6th star.
Of course, there is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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NM, Thanks so much for your in-depth review; so glad you liked the poem and thanks so much for the six stars. Love, Kay.
Comment from Jean Lutz
A different take on the sea and one that is sure to resonate with those who know the characteristic of dogs. My prayers are with the people who are not facing the raging river -- perhaps a rabid dog?
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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A different take on the sea and one that is sure to resonate with those who know the characteristic of dogs. My prayers are with the people who are not facing the raging river -- perhaps a rabid dog?
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Jean, Thank you for reviewing; glad you liked the poem. The floods are receding here in Queensland; moved down to Melbourne. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from Matoshka
I loved this and how you used the dog to represent the sea. It fit so well. All the moods and actions parallel one another. Loved it with the dog (sea) was quiet with his head in his paws. This was just excellent. Blessings.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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I loved this and how you used the dog to represent the sea. It fit so well. All the moods and actions parallel one another. Loved it with the dog (sea) was quiet with his head in his paws. This was just excellent. Blessings.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Matoshka, thanks so much for reviewing; glad you enjoyed the poem. Blessings, Kay.
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You are so welcome. It was a joy. Blessings Kay.
Comment from rlonsdale
Very interesting comparing the ocean & a dog. I liked it all along but thought the rhythm might have been off in the last stanza a bit (i'm certainly not knowledgeable enough to be critiquing lol just what i was thinking while reading). I really liked imagery and liked the tides, moods references.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Very interesting comparing the ocean & a dog. I liked it all along but thought the rhythm might have been off in the last stanza a bit (i'm certainly not knowledgeable enough to be critiquing lol just what i was thinking while reading). I really liked imagery and liked the tides, moods references.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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rionsdale, thanks so much for reviewing; glad you liked the poem. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from fionageorge
Hi, Kay. I love the comparison of the dog and the sea, and the roaring and snoring. Excellent poem which creates a visual impact on the reader. Not only visual, but I could hear the waves, the rumbles. Thanks for sharing, my friend, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Hi, Kay. I love the comparison of the dog and the sea, and the roaring and snoring. Excellent poem which creates a visual impact on the reader. Not only visual, but I could hear the waves, the rumbles. Thanks for sharing, my friend, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Marijke, Thanks for reading my friend; glad you liked the comparison. I hope the dog didn't eat any Japanese whalers! Tongue in cheek. Love, Kay.
Comment from misscookie
Nice artwork you pick the right artwork for your poem's love the idea of picking a dog for the sea.
You told it like it is my belated husband was a surf fisherman and he would tell how the sea moods change at a certain time that when certain fish were biting.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Nice artwork you pick the right artwork for your poem's love the idea of picking a dog for the sea.
You told it like it is my belated husband was a surf fisherman and he would tell how the sea moods change at a certain time that when certain fish were biting.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Yes, indeed the moods of the sea changes constantly; done a lot of fishing in my younger days. Glad you liked the poem. Thanks for reading. Old fishermen don't die, they just smell that way! LOL, Kay.
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Ha, ha yoiur right! take care.
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good evening Kay and thanks for this post. I had not thought of the sea being like a dog, but you write it out so vividly. I enjoyed, Loyd
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Good evening Kay and thanks for this post. I had not thought of the sea being like a dog, but you write it out so vividly. I enjoyed, Loyd
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Hullo Mr. Pumpkinhead, Thanks for reading and glad you liked the tale. Bless you, Kay.
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Hey, I like that and you are welcome. Loyd
Comment from Mithma
This is a very unique poem you've got here. I love the rhymes and the immagery you have created with this poem. A wonderful poem well done!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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This is a very unique poem you've got here. I love the rhymes and the immagery you have created with this poem. A wonderful poem well done!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Mithma, Thanks for reading and glad you liked the comparisons. Bless you, Kay.
