Comment from JeJo

Excellent

hello jan,

how sweet that this is for Lexi!

a couple small suggestion: about my legs - around my legs (just a thought)

'love' is said two time very close together; how about 'pure, uncompromising depths' or a different word than 'love' Otherwise, it feels a bit redundant, and I think you are trying to express the vibrancy and liveliness of your granddaughter...

Your poem is in perfect Whitney form.. This captures the sweetness and purity, as well as trust, of a young child in an adult. Their appreciation for life and their need for love and their need to give love is shown here..

Great write.. All the best, Jen

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011

thanks for your suggestions, Jen -- I will consider them -- love, jan

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Hello Jan. Aren't grandchildren such a blessing?
Hey, I have a new one coming in September from my baby daughter.
I enjoyed you poem. Loyd

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011

congratulations -- my daughter was born September 5th and I was born on September 10th -- thanks for sharing -- love, jan

reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 14-Jan-2011

Well, good for you ! Loyd

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is a very well written poem with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Life becomes eternal when our young carries on. Good job.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011

for sure, Charlie -- love, jan

Comment from Aski

Excellent

The best love comes from youngsters. They seem to express their feelings freely and without hesitation. They are so accepting of everyone. Would that we were all like little children. A beautiful picture that you were able to recreate here with your words.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011

thanks, Aski -- closest thing we get to unconditional love we ever get from humans, for sure -- love, jan

Comment from the blue pixel

Excellent

I love the way little people hug the legs, the part they can reach, of someone they love and that's you Nanny. i have yet to try this form of poetry but it seems that many people are liking it so I think it's time for me. This was a very sweet and touching poem and I am assuming that your pic is of grandmother and grand daughter. It's lovely, Lucky you. The Blue Pixel

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011

unfortunately not of Lexi and me but yes it is of a grandmother and granddaughter -- I am so blessed that Lexi lives next door to me -- I took a series of pictures of her this morning so I can write more poetry about her - love, jan

reply by the blue pixel on 14-Jan-2011

Right next door must be a grandmother's AND daughter's AND a grand daughter's dream. i have married a man with 11 grand children and one on the way but my own daughter has not, as yet given me this particular thrill. It is a thrill very obvious in you. xx Carol

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

A great Whitney here you and the content is priceless. Just love the pic and the love I feel in your words here for Lexi!!! Beautifully done!!!

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011

thanks, Gungalo -- she's a mess and a great love, for sure -- love, jan

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Jan, your poem is in perfect Whitney form - I'm so glad to see you wrote one :-) And I'm delighted you wrote about that special bond you and Lexi share - I love your poems about her no matter what the form :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011

thanks, Brooke -- I've tried to vary the types I've written for her because she is so multi-dimensional -- love, jan

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Jan, wonderful. I'm sure Lexi will like them; especially
when she gets older. Those sweet little girls do know
how to melt our hearts.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011

oh yes they do, Judy -- love, jan

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

What a wonderful way to start this series Jan! Love the introduction of Lexi and Nanny in this first of what I hope will become a series. You've got the form down my friend! The picture is a classic. Hugs, Sue

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011

thanks, Sue -- one down and ..... to go -- am also going to try the cameo -- love, jan

Comment from IrisD

Excellent

I like your choice of a Whitney for this poem. I think it goes very well with the artwork and it flows together into a very nice read. Good luck. Iris

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011

thanks, Iris, but I did not enter the contest -- love, jan