Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is very well written and the dialogue helps to move the story along. There is a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.

You were na?ve (Evil Eddie) and an unscrupulous male

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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011

My computer automatically puts in the accent on naive and I forgot to change it. I know better because Evil Eddie hates it. Thank you for your kind review.

reply by c_lucas on 09-Jan-2011

You're welcome,Barbara. Charlie

Comment from georgehandy

Excellent

This is great I read mostly poetry and this is refreshing. YOu have good words, not just a good story that makes the difference for me. OK ducks it will be, yea.
I like that it makes me think. If you like, please see my work , Last Letter From Grandfather, I feel a kindred.

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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011

I will check it out. Thank you for the invite.