Daisies and Dragonflies
A young cowboy goes for a ride22 total reviews
Comment from psalmist
What a delightful little story. I could just see that little boy trying so hard, then the pride and joy on his face when he finally succeeded. This could easily be made into a children's book. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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What a delightful little story. I could just see that little boy trying so hard, then the pride and joy on his face when he finally succeeded. This could easily be made into a children's book. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Hi there! I am thrilled you liked this! I appreciate your idea that this could be a book? I will think about that. HUGS for this kind review and the idea too! Happy week to you! Suse
Comment from adewpearl
This is just too adorable, and that picture is too die for :-) What a warm story to tell within the severe word restrictions of this contest :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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This is just too adorable, and that picture is too die for :-) What a warm story to tell within the severe word restrictions of this contest :-) Brooke
Comment Written 09-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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Hi Brooke, Thank you for reading this! I like it too, seldom do I like my own, but this one I do. Because this was my son at a young age...not quite as small as this photo, but around six or so...? I'm just so happy you liked this one...thank you!! Susan
Comment from E.P. Thomas
This is a cute story that meets the criterion of the contest. You have created some nice imagery in few words. best of luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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This is a cute story that meets the criterion of the contest. You have created some nice imagery in few words. best of luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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Hi G! Thank you! I really cut this one. It was fun to try! My son was like this as a youngster...still is deep down, but at 22, and no job, just a grouch. I am glad to hear from you my friend.! S.
Comment from warbler
This little story meets all of the contest requirements. It's a sweet story and I love the illustration that you chose. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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This little story meets all of the contest requirements. It's a sweet story and I love the illustration that you chose. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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Hi Warbler! I love your screen name! Thank you little bird! I sure appreciate your taking time to review for me!! I hope you'll keep in touch! ") Susan
Comment from Paradox Tremors
A great little write my friend. Just too sweet for words. The littlest cowboy got the job done and presented his mom with the most beautiful of all birthday gifts--Love. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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A great little write my friend. Just too sweet for words. The littlest cowboy got the job done and presented his mom with the most beautiful of all birthday gifts--Love. Best of luck.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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Hi there! Thank you, thank you! You are the first to mention LOVE! Great review...I am very happy to see such enthusiasm. It makes writing fun. Thank you again!!
Comment from sasil
Cute and heart-warming approach to this writing challenge. You developed believeable characters with a clear conflict and resolution--Great!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Cute and heart-warming approach to this writing challenge. You developed believeable characters with a clear conflict and resolution--Great!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi Sasil! Thank you very much! I am thrilled that you liked this! What a fun contest. ")
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It was certainy fun to read--wish I'd entered myself! Good reads to inspire some of my own writing...may have to experiment with this tight format!
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It's a contest that they sponser often, just wait, it'll be back real soon!! ") Thanks again!!
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*rubbing my hands together in anticipation*
Comment from bowls
What a lovely little story. You've managed to pack a great deal into those one hundred words. The main character is appealing and even the horse has a personality of its own. There's a pleasant little plot with a very happy ending. Bravo!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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What a lovely little story. You've managed to pack a great deal into those one hundred words. The main character is appealing and even the horse has a personality of its own. There's a pleasant little plot with a very happy ending. Bravo!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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HI there! Thank you!! What a kind and encouraging review! I am so happy you enjoyed this little tale Fausto! It's fun to see such enthusiasm...hug!
Comment from Helen Tan
This is one of those stories where I have to say, "SO ADORABLE.", yup it's short and sweet like the cowboy in the story.
I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
She carried him to the fields where the wildflowers grew and the dragonflies danced,
For flash fiction, avoid as many of the so called "invisible words" where possible. In this case, consider deleting "the" from "wildflowers" and "dragonflies". It makes your writing more vibrant.-
She carried him to the fields where wildflowers grew and dragonflies danced,
This last sentence is on the long side. Consider breaking it into two.-
Daisy carried him to the fields where the wildflowers grew and the dragonflies danced. And when they got home....
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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This is one of those stories where I have to say, "SO ADORABLE.", yup it's short and sweet like the cowboy in the story.
I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
She carried him to the fields where the wildflowers grew and the dragonflies danced,
For flash fiction, avoid as many of the so called "invisible words" where possible. In this case, consider deleting "the" from "wildflowers" and "dragonflies". It makes your writing more vibrant.-
She carried him to the fields where wildflowers grew and dragonflies danced,
This last sentence is on the long side. Consider breaking it into two.-
Daisy carried him to the fields where the wildflowers grew and the dragonflies danced. And when they got home....
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Oh, okay! I will check this Helen! Thank you!! I see what you mean too. Great help and very kind rating. I really appreciate this! ") I am honored ...
Comment from Terra Dane
I love this. Maybe because my girl of twelve is finally getting lessons with her very stubborn mare of several years now, and because you captured both the spirit of old mares, small children, the influence of daddys, and how much we love of our moms when we are small. All in a hundred words or less. You rocked it!!!
"....when they returned home...." cost one word.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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I love this. Maybe because my girl of twelve is finally getting lessons with her very stubborn mare of several years now, and because you captured both the spirit of old mares, small children, the influence of daddys, and how much we love of our moms when we are small. All in a hundred words or less. You rocked it!!!
"....when they returned home...." cost one word.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi again, one more thank you for this great review! Did I miss the count? I have removed two words? I sure appreciate this kind and encouraging reveiw! So neat!! ") HUGS!
Comment from missy98writer
Mystery Writer,
you story is cleverly written. Your picture is better than 1,000 words. . In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I'm a sucker for cowboys and little ones are precious. Your flash fiction story is an awesome entry in the contest. I wish you good luck in the contest. Keep on writing this, my friend. I know who wrote this.
Melissa.
glitter-graphics.com
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Mystery Writer,
you story is cleverly written. Your picture is better than 1,000 words. . In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I'm a sucker for cowboys and little ones are precious. Your flash fiction story is an awesome entry in the contest. I wish you good luck in the contest. Keep on writing this, my friend. I know who wrote this.
Melissa.
glitter-graphics.com
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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I am grinning ear to ear...you know me, and my efforts all too well. Bless your heart, thank you sweet friend. I LOVE THESE DANCING BOOTS! WHAT FUN! HUGS!! oops, almost signed...geez.
