Spring Cleaning
A deep dark woods in May29 total reviews
Comment from TLMcCallan
My original feedback got canned for being too short (Do you SEE the irony? :) So I'm rewriting this post. As I was saying, I am new to flash fiction. The ending gave me chills. As a cop for the better part of a decade, I can relate to the way humans mistreat their own.
Very nicely written.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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My original feedback got canned for being too short (Do you SEE the irony? :) So I'm rewriting this post. As I was saying, I am new to flash fiction. The ending gave me chills. As a cop for the better part of a decade, I can relate to the way humans mistreat their own.
Very nicely written.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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") I do that all the time! It's frustrating too! Thank you! I am happy to hear from you and I'll read some of your work too! Thank you again! I appreciate your time for me too!! Susan
Comment from Espresso momma
Oh dear, some spring cleaning, huh? I don't see any corrections that need to be made. It makes an interesting mystery.Thanks for the read.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Oh dear, some spring cleaning, huh? I don't see any corrections that need to be made. It makes an interesting mystery.Thanks for the read.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Hi there! Thank YOU! And I am really glad you found this interesting. Just part of how the world is, in reality. SO many go missing, and never found. It's just sad. I am honored to have you review this for me! Susan
Comment from ImJLAD
Wow...
Dark and incredibly enjoyable.
You have a lot of skill.
This would be perfect for one of the flash fiction contests.
In few words, just like some poetry, your prose has left a lot to think about.
Sad and dark, but beautifully written.
Well done! And thanks for sharing your thoughts.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Wow...
Dark and incredibly enjoyable.
You have a lot of skill.
This would be perfect for one of the flash fiction contests.
In few words, just like some poetry, your prose has left a lot to think about.
Sad and dark, but beautifully written.
Well done! And thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Hi ImJLAD!! What a great reveiw! Thank you!! I love these little bit stories! Such fun. And when someone really enjoys, it is even better! I am honored to have this really nice review !! Susan
Comment from Dave Sargeant
Must admit it did have me wondering what, who was out there. The ending caught me by suprise. your poem brings in the insects devouring flesh, your flesh. As you say there must me many unsolved crimes. Dave.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Must admit it did have me wondering what, who was out there. The ending caught me by suprise. your poem brings in the insects devouring flesh, your flesh. As you say there must me many unsolved crimes. Dave.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Hi again Dave! Thank you! See? I watch the news too much! "/ There are way too many things so very wrong in this world. But, at least we have the freedom to write about them?? I am honored to have another great review from you! Thanks again Dave! Susan
Comment from sizemore0409
I greatly enjoyed reading this exceptionally well-crafted story. It flows silky-smooth; with superb imagery very well-woven into the fabric of the narrative, throughout. The reader's imagination and heart try to push away the image and the all-too-real possibilities --- but resistance is futile. Great work! Andy
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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I greatly enjoyed reading this exceptionally well-crafted story. It flows silky-smooth; with superb imagery very well-woven into the fabric of the narrative, throughout. The reader's imagination and heart try to push away the image and the all-too-real possibilities --- but resistance is futile. Great work! Andy
Comment Written 14-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Hi there Andy~ Thanks! I am honored to have such a great review for this. I often wonder how many are sadly left like this? And no one knows where. IT's just awful. I do watch the news too much! Thank you again Andy!! Susan
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
your flash fiction is spine tingling and extremely well written. . In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Your art work is perfect for the scare theme. I've been watching Discover ID and it's shocking how many folks are murdered by someone they know and are dumped in the woods. I had a friend who went missing and they never found Pam to this day and she disappeared in July of 1984. I went to school with her. We think a serial killer murdered her.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Susan,
your flash fiction is spine tingling and extremely well written. . In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Your art work is perfect for the scare theme. I've been watching Discover ID and it's shocking how many folks are murdered by someone they know and are dumped in the woods. I had a friend who went missing and they never found Pam to this day and she disappeared in July of 1984. I went to school with her. We think a serial killer murdered her.
Melissa.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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OH my God...see?? I worry about these things...I watch those same shows Melissa. I had a man in an old pickup truck follow me around when I was in art school, in '84. I was in Columbus Indiana. He would follow me to lunch and tried to grab me as I jogged thru an old covered bridge in a park. I darted down under the bridge and jumped across the dry creekbed to get away...I am so sorry about your friend. How sad and frightening. Were there any other people gone around at that time? Of course, those killers move around I suppose. Who knows. But, thanks for another great reveiw...BTW! HOW did I get your cold clear thru this internet????????? LOL! ") I am miserable now too. ! ") Susan
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Thanks for sharing with me your lovely script a good write with good flow . Isn't it good to see the buds in the trees again. Spring around the corner.Mary
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Thanks for sharing with me your lovely script a good write with good flow . Isn't it good to see the buds in the trees again. Spring around the corner.Mary
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi Mary! Thanks! I wish it were a bit closer! It will be three months yet for us. NOT good? I thank you so much! Great to hear from you!! Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have never wondered about bodies left in the woods never to be found, but my husband, a retired forensic science experert for the Army, does wonder about that. I would hope somebody would list the person as missing and they would search for that person.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2011
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I have never wondered about bodies left in the woods never to be found, but my husband, a retired forensic science experert for the Army, does wonder about that. I would hope somebody would list the person as missing and they would search for that person.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2011
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Oh I watch too much Nancy Grace...there are murders so often and so many movies and on the news that I am just jaded. Seems like the gorier it is, the more famous the killer becomes. I feel just plain sad when I see or hear of people killing babies, their grandparents, a friend. It's just not necessary. Self defense, yes...but it's usually over a boyfriend, money or something just wrong. God help us. Thank you for reading this too, I appreciate it a lot too!! Luv, Susan
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Susan,
This is something to ponder for sure..
Great descriptions.
Interesting.
Good title.
Good image too.
Interesting ending too.
Katie
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Susan,
This is something to ponder for sure..
Great descriptions.
Interesting.
Good title.
Good image too.
Interesting ending too.
Katie
Comment Written 07-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi again Katie! Thanks...I watch too much television! ") So sad at times...all the mean and hatefulness. But it's part of our so called "great" society...America the Violent! ") Thanks again!! HUG! Susan
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Susan, you're welcome.
hugs,
katie
Comment from sugardog
Dark and creepy-love it!! You are getting really good at these micros, Susan! I love your beginning sentence-really draws the reader in. Very suspenseful and you tease us with terror all the way through. Wouldn't want to find out how this feels... Nice job. Dana
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Dark and creepy-love it!! You are getting really good at these micros, Susan! I love your beginning sentence-really draws the reader in. Very suspenseful and you tease us with terror all the way through. Wouldn't want to find out how this feels... Nice job. Dana
Comment Written 06-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi Dana! Thank you! I keep trying, it's all we can do? It' fun to write about different things. I have so many ideas, but probably need to think quality, not quantity? HA! KEEP safe and warm Dana! I sent your card....I am SOoo sorry...I thought we had sent it! ") Susan
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You're welcome! LOVED the card!! Thank you so much my sweet friend. You're so pretty and so is your horse. XO Dana
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It made it then? I am glad...and you are so welcome...I thank you too for the kind compliment, tho I sure don't feel pretty anymore. YOU are the one!! ") Model material! ") I prefer the farm girl who tends her trees and horses! ") You know what I mean. I blubber when embarrassed. ") xoxo , Susan
