Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Sara and Dani talk."Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I'm glad Dani talked to Sara. She needs someone to shake some sense in to her. Joe is a wonderful man. Chapter thirty-one is satisfying and very well written. Your dialogue is excellent. I love the art work of the rainbow. I hope Dani's talk brought Sara to her senses. I look forward to reading more. I hope your doing better. I pay for you. Have a blessed 2011.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Barbara,
I'm glad Dani talked to Sara. She needs someone to shake some sense in to her. Joe is a wonderful man. Chapter thirty-one is satisfying and very well written. Your dialogue is excellent. I love the art work of the rainbow. I hope Dani's talk brought Sara to her senses. I look forward to reading more. I hope your doing better. I pay for you. Have a blessed 2011.
Melissa.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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I love you little pink ribbon. You are so good with the artwork. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara, wonderful chapter. Dani has made me understand how Sara felt -- afraid to let herself fall in love, which she already did, actually. Now let me just hope Joe would not be too upset with Sara ... :)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Hi, Barbara, wonderful chapter. Dani has made me understand how Sara felt -- afraid to let herself fall in love, which she already did, actually. Now let me just hope Joe would not be too upset with Sara ... :)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Joe was around with Dani and Matt went through this. He understands. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, I know sometimes it is hard to separate how the heart feels and how the mind feels. Which is the better feeling? I guess each situation is different. I hope Sara makes this decision from her heart.
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Barbara, I know sometimes it is hard to separate how the heart feels and how the mind feels. Which is the better feeling? I guess each situation is different. I hope Sara makes this decision from her heart.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
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I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from dmjones
Hi Barbara, this is a wonderful chapter. I felt like crying at Dani's kind and thoughtful words.
A couple of things to check:
then he came to Cassie('s) softball game early the next morning
"You're concentrating on the dangers of his job and the distant(distance) you live apart."
Before she sat (in) the car, she turned toward the house
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Hi Barbara, this is a wonderful chapter. I felt like crying at Dani's kind and thoughtful words.
A couple of things to check:
then he came to Cassie('s) softball game early the next morning
"You're concentrating on the dangers of his job and the distant(distance) you live apart."
Before she sat (in) the car, she turned toward the house
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Thank you for catching those for me. I apprecaite it.
Comment from joannesnow
Another well written and easy to follow chapter. Your unique ability to bring your characters and their environment to life makes your writing sincerely enjoyable. Very dramatic and leaves the reader anxious in regard to Sara's decision.
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Another well written and easy to follow chapter. Your unique ability to bring your characters and their environment to life makes your writing sincerely enjoyable. Very dramatic and leaves the reader anxious in regard to Sara's decision.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from adewpearl
He came to Cassie softball game early - Cassie's
brought these incidences up - incidents
Besides, even if we were getting along - add comma
She'd better that that look - all these people are being far more patient with her and kind to her than I would be at the moment! LOL Good dialogue. Now, if she hesitates any longer past this, I give up on her :-) Brooke
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He came to Cassie softball game early - Cassie's
brought these incidences up - incidents
Besides, even if we were getting along - add comma
She'd better that that look - all these people are being far more patient with her and kind to her than I would be at the moment! LOL Good dialogue. Now, if she hesitates any longer past this, I give up on her :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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I don't think she will. I think she sees the light. I will make those corrections.
Comment from L.lora
A very well written addition,
your character studies and
scenes around them are well
crafted as is your discriptions.
The dialogues are very realistic
in tone and verbiage which makes this
a delight to read. Looking forward
to your next post. Lora
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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A very well written addition,
your character studies and
scenes around them are well
crafted as is your discriptions.
The dialogues are very realistic
in tone and verbiage which makes this
a delight to read. Looking forward
to your next post. Lora
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
Another great chapter. That Dani is a smart woman and a caring friend to Joe and to Sara. I am anxiously awaiting the next chapter.
I hope you are feeling well. Happy New Year.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Another great chapter. That Dani is a smart woman and a caring friend to Joe and to Sara. I am anxiously awaiting the next chapter.
I hope you are feeling well. Happy New Year.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from teacherdub
The chapter build up is just right. Dealing with "affairs of the heart" isn't something to rush, even on paper. The characters are still holding strong, and the storyline is still holding my interest. Good job. (one small suggestion found...very insignificant.)
he came to Cassie's softball game
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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The chapter build up is just right. Dealing with "affairs of the heart" isn't something to rush, even on paper. The characters are still holding strong, and the storyline is still holding my interest. Good job. (one small suggestion found...very insignificant.)
he came to Cassie's softball game
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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I will take care of the 's. I can't believe as often as I read it, I missed it.
Comment from RKagan
Another beautiful chapter. I hope Sara follows her heart. I have a feeling she will. I love the way that you built the relationship to have a wonderful climax when they finally do decide to be together forever. Just a little error, In the begining you say "would you some ice tea?" I think you mean would you like some ice tea." just a little typo otherwise a great read.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Another beautiful chapter. I hope Sara follows her heart. I have a feeling she will. I love the way that you built the relationship to have a wonderful climax when they finally do decide to be together forever. Just a little error, In the begining you say "would you some ice tea?" I think you mean would you like some ice tea." just a little typo otherwise a great read.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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I must have been fixing that error as you read it. Thank you for your kind review.
