Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Sara and Dani talk."Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is such an interesting story. Your characters came to life as I read and kept my interest until the end. I really enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read. I hope you are feeling okay. You're in my prayers. God bless you!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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This is such an interesting story. Your characters came to life as I read and kept my interest until the end. I really enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read. I hope you are feeling okay. You're in my prayers. God bless you!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're very welcome. I hope you have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from Tellis
I guess I don't blame her for being scared of taking a chance. I take back my last statement. I enjoyed this excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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I guess I don't blame her for being scared of taking a chance. I take back my last statement. I enjoyed this excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I understand. I had some one ask me if Sara and Joe are ever going to get together.
Comment from lisasolorio1
Being in that predictament about a man and the pros and cons when you already do have a family I know from experience is a very hard one to make. Cant wait to see the decision. Happy new years
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Being in that predictament about a man and the pros and cons when you already do have a family I know from experience is a very hard one to make. Cant wait to see the decision. Happy new years
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh I'm so pleased to read this chapter. You have written it so well and now I wait for a happy ending - I hope I get it!
Whatever happens - it's a great story -I enjoy it a lot.
Giddy
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Oh I'm so pleased to read this chapter. You have written it so well and now I wait for a happy ending - I hope I get it!
Whatever happens - it's a great story -I enjoy it a lot.
Giddy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
Sara is afraid of a relationship with Joe. Dani talked to Sara and made her realize that she loved Joe. Love isn't always easy, but Joe does love her.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Sara is afraid of a relationship with Joe. Dani talked to Sara and made her realize that she loved Joe. Love isn't always easy, but Joe does love her.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter, very much back to romance fiction and a pleasure to read, even for someone like me. Sara has a lot to think about.
I have a pair of minor suggestions:
"He hasn't slept since." Here, the words trail off as George looks at the calendar on his watch. I'd show this by adding an ellipse to the period, like so: "He hasn't slept since...."
"He hasn't had much sleep for what (I'd put a comma in here, OW this is exactly how Dani would've said this sentence) seven or eight nights?"
Dave
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter, very much back to romance fiction and a pleasure to read, even for someone like me. Sara has a lot to think about.
I have a pair of minor suggestions:
"He hasn't slept since." Here, the words trail off as George looks at the calendar on his watch. I'd show this by adding an ellipse to the period, like so: "He hasn't slept since...."
"He hasn't had much sleep for what (I'd put a comma in here, OW this is exactly how Dani would've said this sentence) seven or eight nights?"
Dave
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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I will make those corrections. Thank you for your eagle eye and continued support.
Comment from marym224
The way in which you describe the nuances of scattered thoughts in a person's mind when they are undecided is very good, Barbara. This chapter doesn't have a great deal of action, but a great deal of emotion entwined that allows the reader to go through the experience with Sara. Looking forward to the next episode. Mary xx
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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The way in which you describe the nuances of scattered thoughts in a person's mind when they are undecided is very good, Barbara. This chapter doesn't have a great deal of action, but a great deal of emotion entwined that allows the reader to go through the experience with Sara. Looking forward to the next episode. Mary xx
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Writeaway...
Barbara, your chapter was intriging as the first, excellent job one again. Your writing is developing and imporving with each write, I can find nothing to suggest for improvment, excellent job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Barbara, your chapter was intriging as the first, excellent job one again. Your writing is developing and imporving with each write, I can find nothing to suggest for improvment, excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
I am so glad Dani took the time to talk with Sara, now if Sara will only listen closely to her words. Poor Sara is afraid of being hurt even thought she is in love with a wonderful man. People can get so mixed up sometimes. A wonderful, well written and compelling chapter....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Hi Barbara,
I am so glad Dani took the time to talk with Sara, now if Sara will only listen closely to her words. Poor Sara is afraid of being hurt even thought she is in love with a wonderful man. People can get so mixed up sometimes. A wonderful, well written and compelling chapter....blessings, chey
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I have hopes that Sara will work things out.
Comment from Just2Write
You do a great job with this chapter. I thought the dialogue flowed very naturally, and you were able to cover much ground with the exchanges between Sara and the other characters. You also painted a strong picture of the emotions Sara needs to deal with before she can contemplate feelings toward Joe. Rose.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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You do a great job with this chapter. I thought the dialogue flowed very naturally, and you were able to cover much ground with the exchanges between Sara and the other characters. You also painted a strong picture of the emotions Sara needs to deal with before she can contemplate feelings toward Joe. Rose.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
