Pet Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Harley meets Simba and Leo"...musings on the pets I've had
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Comment from Paula Andrea Pyle
This author's enthusiasm is so strong it jumps off the page and lands in the middle of the room performing a jig where you sit. Her passionate portrayal and overwhelming love of animals leaves little room for even constructive criticism.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2011
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This author's enthusiasm is so strong it jumps off the page and lands in the middle of the room performing a jig where you sit. Her passionate portrayal and overwhelming love of animals leaves little room for even constructive criticism.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2011
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Awwww, you make me blush! Thank you for reading and the generous review! Your remarks are wonderful, and I'm glad you are enjoying the stories. ~patty~
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great story about harley meeting simba and leo for the first time, does he still want to grab that bushy tail?
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great story about harley meeting simba and leo for the first time, does he still want to grab that bushy tail?
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you SO much for continuing to read Harley's saga. Your generous review and kind remarks made me smile. ~patty~
Comment from Missey
Aw! so cute! I love your little details like Harley arching his back and wagging his stub of a tail. I like your description of him meeting the cats, and the cats reaction. The point of view is fairly effective. Excellent job on this chapter!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Aw! so cute! I love your little details like Harley arching his back and wagging his stub of a tail. I like your description of him meeting the cats, and the cats reaction. The point of view is fairly effective. Excellent job on this chapter!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you SO much for continuing to read Harley's saga. Your generous review and kind remarks made me smile. ~patty~
Comment from mumsyone
Cute, as usual.
Just a couple of "fixes":
in the front seat of the car, and faced the opening towards her. (no comma needed here)
The new face rescued him (I would add 'had', as "The new face had rescued him...)
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Cute, as usual.
Just a couple of "fixes":
in the front seat of the car, and faced the opening towards her. (no comma needed here)
The new face rescued him (I would add 'had', as "The new face had rescued him...)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I appreciate you helping with the spag. ~patty~
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You're quite welcome.
Comment from Adama
I am enjoying reading about Harley's adventures particularly as they are shared from his point of view. I'm sure a leader will emerge and they will all get along just fine.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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I am enjoying reading about Harley's adventures particularly as they are shared from his point of view. I'm sure a leader will emerge and they will all get along just fine.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you SO much for continuing to read the saga of Harley. I'm having way too much fun with this and him. ~patty~
Comment from mermaids
I am owned by six cats and a dachshund so i can relate to this story. It is always fascinating to watch the reactions of a new arrival to the house. Animals usually get along. Thanks for sharing this delightful story.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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I am owned by six cats and a dachshund so i can relate to this story. It is always fascinating to watch the reactions of a new arrival to the house. Animals usually get along. Thanks for sharing this delightful story.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. It seems to be going well; Simba has established his role as ruler, and Harley knows what he can get away with - its poor Leo that is at a loss! ~patty~
Comment from bookishfabler
This is definetly a fun story. I enjoy the little puppy's Point of View.
They entered the house, and Harley could smell all kinds of new smells. There was one that was unfamiliar but tantalizing. He couldn't wait to see what (-that) (it) was! His crate was put down in a corner, and the face was at the mesh door. She told him she would open the door, and he could come out when he wanted to.
( I believe you only need a comma before a conjunction, (and) when there are three or more actions, otherwise I don't think it's necessary.
It too stared and watched every move (-that) Harley made.
Nine times out of ten you don't need (that) in a sentence, we just tend to use it in speech and let it slip in our writing.)
hugs book
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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This is definetly a fun story. I enjoy the little puppy's Point of View.
They entered the house, and Harley could smell all kinds of new smells. There was one that was unfamiliar but tantalizing. He couldn't wait to see what (-that) (it) was! His crate was put down in a corner, and the face was at the mesh door. She told him she would open the door, and he could come out when he wanted to.
( I believe you only need a comma before a conjunction, (and) when there are three or more actions, otherwise I don't think it's necessary.
It too stared and watched every move (-that) Harley made.
Nine times out of ten you don't need (that) in a sentence, we just tend to use it in speech and let it slip in our writing.)
hugs book
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading, the generous review, and your constructive and informative critique. I will work on the suggestions you made and do my best to watch my 'thats' and comma usage. Thank you for your help. ~patty~
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I write 'that' all the time until someone pointed it out to me and I realized it reads smoother without it most of the time, not always. It's not wrong, just not necessary.
hugs Heidi
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is so cute and expressive. Your descriptions are so vivid that I feel like I'm walking right beside your pet. You really capture this well. I enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read. God bless you!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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This is so cute and expressive. Your descriptions are so vivid that I feel like I'm walking right beside your pet. You really capture this well. I enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read. God bless you!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you are enjoying 'watching' Harley get used to his new home. ~patty~
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You're very welcome. I hope you have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from lisasolorio1
What an unusual but very insightful way of expressing a animals feelings and observations. You almost feel as if you are the animal.. Happy new years
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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What an unusual but very insightful way of expressing a animals feelings and observations. You almost feel as if you are the animal.. Happy new years
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you are enjoying 'watching' Harley get used to his new home. ~patty~
Comment from Earthwriter
have really enjoyed reading the ongoing saga you are indeed a wonderful storyteller thank you for continuing the wonderful escapades
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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have really enjoyed reading the ongoing saga you are indeed a wonderful storyteller thank you for continuing the wonderful escapades
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you are enjoying the adventures of my pets. ~patty~
