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Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Harley in Diamante Form"...musings on the pets I've had
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Comment from Aplgwest
It is apparent to me that you have a good working knowledge of the diamante form. Your poem is really fine as it, but, as an alternative, you might consider: Lover, licker, jumper, greeter, yelper, kisser, which would slightly change the attitude of the poem.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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It is apparent to me that you have a good working knowledge of the diamante form. Your poem is really fine as it, but, as an alternative, you might consider: Lover, licker, jumper, greeter, yelper, kisser, which would slightly change the attitude of the poem.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I appreciate your kind words. ~patty~
Comment from pickthorn
This looks like it would be a little hard to do but you have done well in describing that sweet little pup. Everything seems to adhere to the requirements of the Diamante form. Great job.
pickthorn
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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This looks like it would be a little hard to do but you have done well in describing that sweet little pup. Everything seems to adhere to the requirements of the Diamante form. Great job.
pickthorn
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I appreciate your kind words. ~patty~
Comment from Perp Ihebom
All these adjectives to qualify a puppy? Wow, this must be a very special pet indeed. Nice little piece that shows how passionate the writer is about animals. kudos
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All these adjectives to qualify a puppy? Wow, this must be a very special pet indeed. Nice little piece that shows how passionate the writer is about animals. kudos
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. Harley is INDEED a very special pet, and I'm hoping he will be my companion and friend for as long as God allows him to live. ~patty~
Comment from kintesiegel
i am a dog lover (and animal lovers in general) too so I appreciate the sentiments and also the clever form. The only suggestion I have is to find another word for "attached" because it makes the reader think of a leash or restraint of some kind.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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i am a dog lover (and animal lovers in general) too so I appreciate the sentiments and also the clever form. The only suggestion I have is to find another word for "attached" because it makes the reader think of a leash or restraint of some kind.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. Good point about the word attached, but since he is a JRT, he always HAS to be restrained because he has no idea how little of a dog he is - so it actually applies in the 'leash' sense, although when I wrote it, I was thinking of how attached he is to me; he watches my every move! Thanks for reading! ~patty~
Comment from TKField
This is the cutest, cuddliest, fuzziest, dosh-garn, feel good puppy poem of the day. No fleas on this Diamante. Good boy...who's a good boy? Buddy's a good boy. But please don't crap on the carpet.
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This is the cutest, cuddliest, fuzziest, dosh-garn, feel good puppy poem of the day. No fleas on this Diamante. Good boy...who's a good boy? Buddy's a good boy. But please don't crap on the carpet.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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LOL!!! Exactly! I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for reading and the generous review. ~patty~
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this form about your new dog. i haven't heard of this form before, i'm glad you're enjoying Harley
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this form about your new dog. i haven't heard of this form before, i'm glad you're enjoying Harley
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. This book says these forms are 'classic,' and yet, they seem totally different from what I've seen anywhere else. However, I will write one of each - featuring a pet - and make a collection. Harley and I are having a blast - even if I'm a bit tired!! ~patty~
Comment from Rocksthepoet
I enjoyed this poem and its form, yet another one for the note book...Diamante, learning every day about the stanza's involved in the art of poetry. Thanks for sharing..
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I enjoyed this poem and its form, yet another one for the note book...Diamante, learning every day about the stanza's involved in the art of poetry. Thanks for sharing..
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I, too, am collecting the different forms from other writers here, and I have a book I purchased with 42 forms that I'm attempting one a day -- should be fun. If you have time, please read along! ~patty~
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It would be a pleasure , new to this ste and writing in all the forms...since I have only really written free verses....thanks for allowing me to learn along side you.
Comment from Adama
I'm guessing Diamante is also the shape of the poem? This is a good poem, which you make look really easy particularly given the strict rules and guidelines. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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I'm guessing Diamante is also the shape of the poem? This is a good poem, which you make look really easy particularly given the strict rules and guidelines. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading, the generous review, and your kind remarks. Yes, it Diamante is also the shape of the poem. Merry Christmas to you and yours! ~patty~
Comment from CodyJack
It looks like a complicated poem. I will have to try one myself sometime. This was creative and worded very well for our furry friends are all these things. Great imagery. Your friend, Cody
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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It looks like a complicated poem. I will have to try one myself sometime. This was creative and worded very well for our furry friends are all these things. Great imagery. Your friend, Cody
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you, Cody. It really isn't complicated - it is one of the ways they introduce junior high student to writing. The 'types' of words are key, rather than meter, rhyming scheme, or iambic pentameter. Thanks for reading and the generous review. ~patty~
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for creating and sharing a perfect "Diamante." I enjoyed your words choices and use of alliteration. I am glad you shared a picture of your cute "Pal/Buddy" as well.
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Thank you for creating and sharing a perfect "Diamante." I enjoyed your words choices and use of alliteration. I am glad you shared a picture of your cute "Pal/Buddy" as well.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review - I especially appreciate your praise of this poetic form - learning something new - and doing it well - is always the goal! ~patty~
