Barstools and Bethlehem
What would Jesus do?24 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
When I looked at the title, Barstools and Bethlehem, I wondered where you were going with this. I liked where it went. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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When I looked at the title, Barstools and Bethlehem, I wondered where you were going with this. I liked where it went. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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HI Barb! I tried to think outside the box for once...it's fun! I am really happy to hear you liked this odd story! ") Luv, Susan
Comment from adewpearl
Two visitors in Judea, sat drinking - drop the comma
I can't imagine how this would offend - I think Jesus would be appalled by people who are bigoted and violent in his name :-) I love your story, Susan. Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Two visitors in Judea, sat drinking - drop the comma
I can't imagine how this would offend - I think Jesus would be appalled by people who are bigoted and violent in his name :-) I love your story, Susan. Brooke
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Hi Brooke! I fixed the comma! Thank you!! I had fun trying a new approach...and I'm glad you approve! ") Susan
Comment from JW
Interesting scene. It was written quite well. Yet, I could not help but wonder, if the Christian was really a christian, why was he angered so quickly?
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2010
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Interesting scene. It was written quite well. Yet, I could not help but wonder, if the Christian was really a christian, why was he angered so quickly?
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2010
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Hi Jonathon! Well, I have seen many Christians lately, in life and in the news, losing their tempers very quickly and I was thinking Jesus isn't real happy about it. I don't know...good point tho! I personally know people who are false Christians in all senses of the term. It's sad. Thank you Jonathon...I am honored to have you take a minute to express your thoughts!! ") Merry Christmas to you and your loved ones too! Susan
Comment from Mustang Patty
Such realism here! This could happen, and I'm reasonably sure that sometimes He just needs to come to earth and clean this kind of stuff up! Thank you for sharing this story. ~patty~
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2010
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Such realism here! This could happen, and I'm reasonably sure that sometimes He just needs to come to earth and clean this kind of stuff up! Thank you for sharing this story. ~patty~
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2010
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Yes! I agree...I was thinking as I was trying to write this, that He should just, and on Christmas maybe...or Easter? Take over ALL the airways, news and everything and SPEAK TO THE WORLD. I want that so badly...it would change everything. I really believe that. For now tho, we can only wait. Thank YOU, for reading and a kind and welcome review too! Merry Christmas Patty! Luv, Susan
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
your flash fiction gets better every single time I read one. This one has a beautiful message about Jesus. Excellent narrative, great dialogue and very descriptive writing. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. What a fitting story for this Sunday. Have a blessed Holiday.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2010
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Susan,
your flash fiction gets better every single time I read one. This one has a beautiful message about Jesus. Excellent narrative, great dialogue and very descriptive writing. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. What a fitting story for this Sunday. Have a blessed Holiday.
Melissa.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2010
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Hi Melissa!! Thank you so much! I really wish He would come to us and speak. I often think of how neat it would be if He would just take over ALL the television airways, maybe on Christmas day, and talk to the world. I may write a story about it! I thank you again for another wonderful and kind review! HUG! Susan
Comment from Sasha
This is marvelous, short, sweet, and to the point. Flash fiction has always been a challenge to me and short Flash Fiction is still beyond my ability. I did not find this offensive, in fact I found it both delightful and uplifting. I enjoyed this very much and am quite impressed with it.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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This is marvelous, short, sweet, and to the point. Flash fiction has always been a challenge to me and short Flash Fiction is still beyond my ability. I did not find this offensive, in fact I found it both delightful and uplifting. I enjoyed this very much and am quite impressed with it.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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HI Sasha! Thank you!! YOU can do flash, I am still learning, heck, I don't know apostophes yet! Or rather, have forgotten over the years! I sure am happy you enjoyed this little oddity. ") Luv, Suse
Comment from RKagan
This is a beautiful story and quite imaginative too. I found it a pure joy to read. Excellent way to get your message across. great job, my friend.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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This is a beautiful story and quite imaginative too. I found it a pure joy to read. Excellent way to get your message across. great job, my friend.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Hi Roberta! Thank you! I am so happy you enjoyed this! I often wish I could have Jesus come and visit me, I mean in the flesh, and help me somehow. Thanks for this wonderful review! xoxo. Susan
Comment from c_lucas
This is very cute. It is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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This is very cute. It is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Hi Charlie! Thank you so much! I'm happy you enjoyed something different! ") Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
Comment from misscookie
I truly LOVE IT
This is the best I have read today not only do you have a sense of humr to have Jesus in the bar.....
After all He is everywhere right?
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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I truly LOVE IT
This is the best I have read today not only do you have a sense of humr to have Jesus in the bar.....
After all He is everywhere right?
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Hi Cookie! Wow. HUGS! Thank you for such enthusiasm! IT's very encouraging, and I am super happy you were not offended? Thanks again Miss Cookie! Susan
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It will take more than that to offend me. Come on it's a funny. Yopuir welcome.
Comment from sidone
for jesus is brave like a bouncer at a rave why cant religion behave ignorance can but you in a grave,we all have close shaves,jesus spirit a ray, a question change a day adults playing games
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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for jesus is brave like a bouncer at a rave why cant religion behave ignorance can but you in a grave,we all have close shaves,jesus spirit a ray, a question change a day adults playing games
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Hi Sidone! Thank you so much! Sorry for this late reply, I am so far behind! Ahhhh! I really enjoyed this fun review! HUG! Susan
