Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Joan E.
First, congratulations on completing your first phase of chemo and best wishes with phase two when I'll be away.
Your chapters are always compelling and this one is no exception. I thought the picture choice did just what you wanted in conveying the girls' fear. I particularly liked the scene where the sniper surprisingly brought the odds down in Joe's favor. I look forward to your next 80 pages and your essay.
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First, congratulations on completing your first phase of chemo and best wishes with phase two when I'll be away.
Your chapters are always compelling and this one is no exception. I thought the picture choice did just what you wanted in conveying the girls' fear. I particularly liked the scene where the sniper surprisingly brought the odds down in Joe's favor. I look forward to your next 80 pages and your essay.
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Thank you for your review and support.
Comment from x-cheshire-puss-x
This was really tragic. Prostitution is something you see everyday in NYC, but it never fails to affect me. I like how you depict their emotions,fear and sadness alike.
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This was really tragic. Prostitution is something you see everyday in NYC, but it never fails to affect me. I like how you depict their emotions,fear and sadness alike.
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I really enjoyed chapter twenty-eight. The action was intense. I hope Joe and Matt help the girls escape. The evil fat jerk from Czech Republic. I was riveted and read your chapter twice. Excellent action and great dialogue. I saw no nits in this chapter. I look forward to reading the next chapter. I hope you are holding on. I'm praying for you, my friend. The art work you used is perfect.
Melissa.
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Barbara,
I really enjoyed chapter twenty-eight. The action was intense. I hope Joe and Matt help the girls escape. The evil fat jerk from Czech Republic. I was riveted and read your chapter twice. Excellent action and great dialogue. I saw no nits in this chapter. I look forward to reading the next chapter. I hope you are holding on. I'm praying for you, my friend. The art work you used is perfect.
Melissa.
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Thank you girlfriend, I hope you are staying warm. It's cold in TX today.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Excellent chapter, which I enjoyed reading very much. Your writing puts me inside the story with all the good and bad emotions. The dialogue is excellent. Great job.
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Excellent chapter, which I enjoyed reading very much. Your writing puts me inside the story with all the good and bad emotions. The dialogue is excellent. Great job.
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from lola29
Oh my gosh, those monsters holding Cassie and the other girls are pure evil. I hope Joe is able to escape with the girls, but it's not looking promising. Great chapter, Barbara.
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Oh my gosh, those monsters holding Cassie and the other girls are pure evil. I hope Joe is able to escape with the girls, but it's not looking promising. Great chapter, Barbara.
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Thank you for your kind review. I hope Joe can save all three of them.
Comment from c_lucas
An excellent chapter with suspense and action. You have showed how the girls are reacting to their plight. This is very well written with a good flow of words.
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An excellent chapter with suspense and action. You have showed how the girls are reacting to their plight. This is very well written with a good flow of words.
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
aren't released, by the time we've finished painting - drop the comma
Wow, tense and exciting action with Joe, the kidnappers and the girls - excellent dialogue and descriptive detail.
Also good dialogue between Sara and George - you show her impatience and fear well, and you show George's kindness and attempts to shield her from danger effectively. Brooke
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aren't released, by the time we've finished painting - drop the comma
Wow, tense and exciting action with Joe, the kidnappers and the girls - excellent dialogue and descriptive detail.
Also good dialogue between Sara and George - you show her impatience and fear well, and you show George's kindness and attempts to shield her from danger effectively. Brooke
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Comment Written 12-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I will kick out that nasty old comma. I appreciate your support.
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I just hope you find that comma a nice home after kicking it out. LOL
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I swear commas are my down fall. I understand the normal comma rules, but all the others, I always get confused on. In my last post I used the word peek again, I should kick it out of my vocabulary. I thought I used it right, then one of my last reviews said it should have been peaked, I don't they were correct, but it still confused me again.
