Another Pretty Face
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Comment from marcellawachtel
Now we are getting somewhere! As you mentioned in your author notes, the girls are terribly scared, but now they are infused with hope. Joe managed to do something positive, and the confusion caused by the shooting will make it easier for an early capture. I hope.
And I hope that things continue to go well for you, too. So many from so many places are rooting for your speedy recovery, i'm sure you feel vibrations around you! (My wishes come all the way from Jerusalem. I told a friend about you and she wrote a note and squeezed it into a crack between the stones on The Wall- people believe this is sort of God's post office. I am not a believer, but this woman is certain god sees all the messages.) Love, Marcella
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Now we are getting somewhere! As you mentioned in your author notes, the girls are terribly scared, but now they are infused with hope. Joe managed to do something positive, and the confusion caused by the shooting will make it easier for an early capture. I hope.
And I hope that things continue to go well for you, too. So many from so many places are rooting for your speedy recovery, i'm sure you feel vibrations around you! (My wishes come all the way from Jerusalem. I told a friend about you and she wrote a note and squeezed it into a crack between the stones on The Wall- people believe this is sort of God's post office. I am not a believer, but this woman is certain god sees all the messages.) Love, Marcella
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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I believe God sees all. I am honored. Thank you.
Comment from Writeaway...
Barbara, you never fail to impress me with your work, it is always a pleasure to read. I can find no spags whatsoever and was kept in thralled from beginning to end, excellent job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Barbara, you never fail to impress me with your work, it is always a pleasure to read. I can find no spags whatsoever and was kept in thralled from beginning to end, excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for yoru kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Readywriter52
Joe and the three girls are uninjured. That took balls to lead the one man to the door and allow him to be shot. I wonder what will stop these men.
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Joe and the three girls are uninjured. That took balls to lead the one man to the door and allow him to be shot. I wonder what will stop these men.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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I wonder what will stop them too. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Arkine
I think they need to move fast, before these guys decide to kill either Joe, or one of the girls, although, they won't kill all of them because they need the 'insurance.' Anyhow, excellent chapter! Just one thing:
Matt's almost positive one of the three girls inside[]is Cassie. - space needed.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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I think they need to move fast, before these guys decide to kill either Joe, or one of the girls, although, they won't kill all of them because they need the 'insurance.' Anyhow, excellent chapter! Just one thing:
Matt's almost positive one of the three girls inside[]is Cassie. - space needed.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, even though she's not out of danger yet, it seems so nice to see that Cassie is alive. I know these kind of agents have lots of tricks to pull out of their bags. Hope their's isn't empty. Thanks for sharing as always.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Barbara, even though she's not out of danger yet, it seems so nice to see that Cassie is alive. I know these kind of agents have lots of tricks to pull out of their bags. Hope their's isn't empty. Thanks for sharing as always.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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There bag isn't empty, I assure you. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
this is another excellent chapter -- George is
doing an excellent job of keeping Sara away from
Cassie and Joe as she would just add a further
distraction to the chaos already there -- of
course, I understand why she feels the need to
be there -- I look forward to your next chapter
I'm glad you are through phase I of your chemo
Godspeed
love,
jan
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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barbara:
this is another excellent chapter -- George is
doing an excellent job of keeping Sara away from
Cassie and Joe as she would just add a further
distraction to the chaos already there -- of
course, I understand why she feels the need to
be there -- I look forward to your next chapter
I'm glad you are through phase I of your chemo
Godspeed
love,
jan
Comment Written 12-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from L.lora
This was an excellent
posting, one small typo="Matt's almost positive one of the three girls [insideis=need a space between the two words] Cassie."
I know that when you can
you will fix it. Your discriptions
are perfect and the dialogues really
help to carry the storyline. The flow
moves smoothly and the suspense keeps
the reader rivited to the page. Your
choice of picture is also excellent.
Looking forward to your next post of
the storyline and your essay when you
are ready to post that also. Hugs, Lora
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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This was an excellent
posting, one small typo="Matt's almost positive one of the three girls [insideis=need a space between the two words] Cassie."
I know that when you can
you will fix it. Your discriptions
are perfect and the dialogues really
help to carry the storyline. The flow
moves smoothly and the suspense keeps
the reader rivited to the page. Your
choice of picture is also excellent.
Looking forward to your next post of
the storyline and your essay when you
are ready to post that also. Hugs, Lora
Comment Written 12-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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I have already fixed it. Thank you for your kind review and contintued support.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter that leaves the outcome sufficiently in doubt. I enjoyed reading this post and found several small nits.
One nit seems consistent with you. You write things like "You better put that down," when it should be "You'd better put that down." The "You'd" is a contraction of "You had."
"You [You'd, for "You had"] better take me to the front door."
"Matt's almost positive one of the three girls insideis [inside is] Cassie."
"OK, it's a deal, but we [we'd] better hurry." Same comment as before.
Dave
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter that leaves the outcome sufficiently in doubt. I enjoyed reading this post and found several small nits.
One nit seems consistent with you. You write things like "You better put that down," when it should be "You'd better put that down." The "You'd" is a contraction of "You had."
"You [You'd, for "You had"] better take me to the front door."
"Matt's almost positive one of the three girls insideis [inside is] Cassie."
"OK, it's a deal, but we [we'd] better hurry." Same comment as before.
Dave
Comment Written 12-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you Dave, for your eagle eye and continued support.
Comment from fictionwriter
Another wonderful chapter. Joe took a chance that one of them men left would hurt the girls when he had the guy at the door shot. Seems too risky to me. But that's just my opinion. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2010
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Another wonderful chapter. Joe took a chance that one of them men left would hurt the girls when he had the guy at the door shot. Seems too risky to me. But that's just my opinion. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2010
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It was risky, but he took the risk. We will have to wait and see if it pays off. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Rama Rao
If it is Sunday, there will be a post by Barbara.
You have not disappointed us. This chapter, full of action, made engrossing reading. I liked the way you left the action scene with Joe midway to maintain suspense.
I am also happy to note you are progressing well with your treatment.
Wishing you all the best.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2010
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If it is Sunday, there will be a post by Barbara.
You have not disappointed us. This chapter, full of action, made engrossing reading. I liked the way you left the action scene with Joe midway to maintain suspense.
I am also happy to note you are progressing well with your treatment.
Wishing you all the best.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
