Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Music Bob
Hi
I would love to be able to produce the consistantly excellent writing that you accomplish.
Everything contained in the chapter is so logical and r=the content holds the interest to the very end.
Thank you and well done.
Music Bob
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Hi
I would love to be able to produce the consistantly excellent writing that you accomplish.
Everything contained in the chapter is so logical and r=the content holds the interest to the very end.
Thank you and well done.
Music Bob
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from lisasolorio1
I want to read more of this so I will definately be following your work. When I got to the end of the story I was disappointed there was no more. Can't wait to read the rest! Happy Holidays to you.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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I want to read more of this so I will definately be following your work. When I got to the end of the story I was disappointed there was no more. Can't wait to read the rest! Happy Holidays to you.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from gerry26
I am on the edge of my seat waiting. Good dialog, edge of your seat drama. Great ebb and flow. You made the one captor come alive for the reader.
I pray for you.
gerry
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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I am on the edge of my seat waiting. Good dialog, edge of your seat drama. Great ebb and flow. You made the one captor come alive for the reader.
I pray for you.
gerry
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Scornwell
This was as well written as I have come to expect. The characters come across well and the dialog sounds realistic and seems appropriate for the characters. I only found one typo:
three girls insideis Cassie
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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This was as well written as I have come to expect. The characters come across well and the dialog sounds realistic and seems appropriate for the characters. I only found one typo:
three girls insideis Cassie
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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I amazes me how many reviews I have received and you are the only one to point that mistake out. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from nora arjuna
hi barb, a suspenseful chapter. but i know joe will be all right. watch sara's dialogues. in this chapter and last, she sounds as if she's more concerned about joe than cassie.
a tiny blue blouse [tied shut] by a single knot under the breasts - i thought that sounds a bit odd. how about 'held together'?
then walked to Joe [grabbing] the front of his shirt. - suggest 'and grabbed'.
Matt's almost positive one of the three girls inside[ ]is Cassie.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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hi barb, a suspenseful chapter. but i know joe will be all right. watch sara's dialogues. in this chapter and last, she sounds as if she's more concerned about joe than cassie.
a tiny blue blouse [tied shut] by a single knot under the breasts - i thought that sounds a bit odd. how about 'held together'?
then walked to Joe [grabbing] the front of his shirt. - suggest 'and grabbed'.
Matt's almost positive one of the three girls inside[ ]is Cassie.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your suggestions and I will get on them.
Comment from Fireshadow
Barbara, this is another very well penned segment in this interesting story. The situation, dialogue and total presentation are absolutely credible, and the artwork you selected is a perfect match to portray the captive girls' fear. I look forward to a positive outcome to this specific event where none of the girls get hurt, nor Matt or Joe and their team. Very well done, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Barbara, this is another very well penned segment in this interesting story. The situation, dialogue and total presentation are absolutely credible, and the artwork you selected is a perfect match to portray the captive girls' fear. I look forward to a positive outcome to this specific event where none of the girls get hurt, nor Matt or Joe and their team. Very well done, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bookishfabler
the three girls insideis (inside is) Cassie. All three are alive and unhurt."
That little nit out of the way, I just have to say. Wow! This was a very quick read. You did a great job in the beginning with Joe being held and the three girls. Kudos.
I'm glad you are getting through this chemo. I know it can be very rough. You are a very strong woman. God Bless you
Hugs
book
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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the three girls insideis (inside is) Cassie. All three are alive and unhurt."
That little nit out of the way, I just have to say. Wow! This was a very quick read. You did a great job in the beginning with Joe being held and the three girls. Kudos.
I'm glad you are getting through this chemo. I know it can be very rough. You are a very strong woman. God Bless you
Hugs
book
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support. I appreciate you.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a very suspenseful chapter. it moved along at a good pace and had me gripped to the screen. I notice one tiny typo [insideis] you missed the space x
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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This is a very suspenseful chapter. it moved along at a good pace and had me gripped to the screen. I notice one tiny typo [insideis] you missed the space x
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Sefiros
Things are heating up. The plot threads have began towards their end. I'm a little surprised that Joe's first thought was about breasts and ass, but that's the male linido for you. The whole shooting the leader at the end does not seem like a good idea. What if the others shoot Joe in response? Nice job.
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Things are heating up. The plot threads have began towards their end. I'm a little surprised that Joe's first thought was about breasts and ass, but that's the male linido for you. The whole shooting the leader at the end does not seem like a good idea. What if the others shoot Joe in response? Nice job.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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I know....there's aways room for improvement, right? I just wish I knew what to change. We shall see if shooting the leader is a good idea or a bad idea.
Comment from RKagan
You have really brought the reader right in to this scene and as I read it I tremble for these little girls. When Cassie said she knew Joe would come it brought a tear to my eye. This is a very suspensful chapter. I hope they all get out safely.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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You have really brought the reader right in to this scene and as I read it I tremble for these little girls. When Cassie said she knew Joe would come it brought a tear to my eye. This is a very suspensful chapter. I hope they all get out safely.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
