Simba's Dilemma
Simba gets some bad news104 total reviews
Comment from sunny39
I really liked this writing. It's heart warming with muted humor. I love it is the cat's pov. I think some of the best stories I read are from an animal's perspective.
This was a very enjoyable read and congrats on All Time Best. It's well deserved.
Sunny
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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I really liked this writing. It's heart warming with muted humor. I love it is the cat's pov. I think some of the best stories I read are from an animal's perspective.
This was a very enjoyable read and congrats on All Time Best. It's well deserved.
Sunny
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and your generous review. Simba, Leo, and the new puppy will have a lot to say in the next few months via my stories. Thanks for reading! ~patty~
Comment from jaeladarling
I loved reading this! You definitely deserve that All Time Best. :) I can tell you're familiar with cats - you've done well describing what Simba must be thinking and feeling. I really enjoyed this piece. I have a suggestion for one sentence:
"A few years back, when Leo became a part of the family and it just made sense to give him a lion's name too." (This should read, "A few years back, when Leo became a part of the family, it just made sense to give him a lion's name too.")
Thanks so much for sharing this story!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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I loved reading this! You definitely deserve that All Time Best. :) I can tell you're familiar with cats - you've done well describing what Simba must be thinking and feeling. I really enjoyed this piece. I have a suggestion for one sentence:
"A few years back, when Leo became a part of the family and it just made sense to give him a lion's name too." (This should read, "A few years back, when Leo became a part of the family, it just made sense to give him a lion's name too.")
Thanks so much for sharing this story!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I greatly appreciate your help with that sentence; I've already fixed it. I am glad you enjoyed this story about one of my favorite cats. He is a big beautiful boy, and it is fun to imagine what goes through his head. ~patty~
Comment from marcellawachtel
It took me just about a paragraph to get into this story; then I was hooked. Your descriptions of this magnificent big cat, and your version of what he is thinking are most convincing, and I think you have it - just perfect.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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It took me just about a paragraph to get into this story; then I was hooked. Your descriptions of this magnificent big cat, and your version of what he is thinking are most convincing, and I think you have it - just perfect.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I am glad you enjoyed this story about one of my favorite cats. He is a big beautiful boy, and it is fun to imagine what goes through his head. ~patty~
Comment from ejebb1951
Simba is just beautiful MP, she reminds me of a feline I once owned named midnight. Great story. So, Simba has no idea that she will be sharing her home and Mom with a new house guest, huh? She will probably be okay though. Simba seems to be a pretty cool cat.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Simba is just beautiful MP, she reminds me of a feline I once owned named midnight. Great story. So, Simba has no idea that she will be sharing her home and Mom with a new house guest, huh? She will probably be okay though. Simba seems to be a pretty cool cat.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thanks for reading and the generous review. Simba is in for a rude awakening in a few weeks! It will be fine - these things always have a way of working out. ~patty~
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They sure do. Kind of like kids. We thought my grandson would have a hard time accepting when we decided to foster but he surprised us. He is truly a blessing.
Comment from Penpal
I loved this. The cat`s pov was perfect, and the ending delicious. hehehehe. I can tell that you love Simba by your words. You certainly captured a personality within this piece showing you must understand him.
I love cats, and have 10, I also have two dogs. So I can relate.
Pen
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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I loved this. The cat`s pov was perfect, and the ending delicious. hehehehe. I can tell that you love Simba by your words. You certainly captured a personality within this piece showing you must understand him.
I love cats, and have 10, I also have two dogs. So I can relate.
Pen
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thank you, Pen! I appreciate the 'shares' about everyone's pets. It feels more and more like a community of FRIENDS every day! I'm thrilled with your words, and I'm glad I can portray Simba and his kitty ways so well! Thank you - there's more to come as the house is invaded by the new arrival! ~patty~
Comment from Jennifer Medley
I thought you helped the reader enter the mind of an animal. This is a very creative story. I enjoyed reading this and hope to read more from you soon.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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I thought you helped the reader enter the mind of an animal. This is a very creative story. I enjoyed reading this and hope to read more from you soon.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and this generous review. You can count on more cat stories, and one from the new puppy's point of view, too. I'm so glad that they are being widely accepted - I'm hoping to someday publish a book of short stories like these. ~patty~
Comment from The Wood Work
This is a very sweet story. I don't think I have read anything through a cats eyes before. I found no obvious errors and the story runs smoothly. Good luck to you and Cheers.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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This is a very sweet story. I don't think I have read anything through a cats eyes before. I found no obvious errors and the story runs smoothly. Good luck to you and Cheers.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading, and the generous review. I've been making changes here and there - with the help of some generous 'editors,' on the site. I'm so glad you enjoyed it! ~patty~
Comment from MS Writer
Fantastic story. I am an animal lover and have cats so I can appreciate how you humanized them. Great job. Good flow and description. Makes one want to find out more and Simba and family.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Fantastic story. I am an animal lover and have cats so I can appreciate how you humanized them. Great job. Good flow and description. Makes one want to find out more and Simba and family.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I love writing from an animal's point of view. As a child, I was hooked on Albert Payson Terhune's dog stories about his pure bred collies, Lad and Wolf. As an adult, I couldn't get enough of James Herriott, and were it not for the whole yucky blood-thing, I would probably be a veterinarian! Follow along, and Simba's stories will appear quite often in the next few months. Thanks again, ~patty~
Comment from Scornwell
I thought this was well written. I liked the premise and the way you explained what was happening at the end. I was afraid it was going to be a divorce story, and glad it wasn't.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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I thought this was well written. I liked the premise and the way you explained what was happening at the end. I was afraid it was going to be a divorce story, and glad it wasn't.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I love writing from an animal's point of view. As a child, I was hooked on Albert Payson Terhune's dog stories about his pure bred collies, Lad and Wolf. As an adult, I couldn't get enough of James Herriott, and were it not for the whole yucky blood-thing, I would probably be a veterinarian! Thanks again, ~patty~
Comment from Tomoso
Nice One!
Your love of animals shines through in this story. I love animals myself,especially dogs. However, I am not that keen on cats. I don't know why.
Anyway, the story is well written..and from a cat's perspective too. I hope Simba and your new puppy get on well together.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Nice One!
Your love of animals shines through in this story. I love animals myself,especially dogs. However, I am not that keen on cats. I don't know why.
Anyway, the story is well written..and from a cat's perspective too. I hope Simba and your new puppy get on well together.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I love writing from an animal's point of view. As a child, I was hooked on Albert Payson Terhune's dog stories about his pure bred collies, Lad and Wolf. As an adult, I couldn't get enough of James Herriott, and were it not for the whole yucky blood-thing, I would probably be a veterinarian! Thanks again, ~patty~
