Pet Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Puppy Love"...musings on the pets I've had
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Comment from Realist101
Hi Patty, ! WHat fun, but I have been told that the dogs like this one in your photo will kill cats? So beware, and what ever dog you get , be sure it is friendly to your cat. I had a neighbor who got one, and it killed 5 of her grown cats. But this is a very enjoyable poem, I do wish you lots of love and happiness with your new dog!! ") Susan
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Hi Patty, ! WHat fun, but I have been told that the dogs like this one in your photo will kill cats? So beware, and what ever dog you get , be sure it is friendly to your cat. I had a neighbor who got one, and it killed 5 of her grown cats. But this is a very enjoyable poem, I do wish you lots of love and happiness with your new dog!! ") Susan
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and your generous review. I have heard that sometimes JRTs will harrass cats if they are not properly trained or supervised. It is my hopes that by getting a puppy that will grow up with Simba, Leo, and the occasional visit from Mufasa, he will know that they are NOT foxes, but friends! I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem. ~patty~
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Oh good, if you do that, it will be okay, sounds like you have lots of sense, and will be able to train you little pup! Good for you!! HUG! Susan
Comment from minopavlic
The simplicity and definiteness of your short poem, impresses upon the mind more thought and emotion, than could a thousand words.
Mino
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The simplicity and definiteness of your short poem, impresses upon the mind more thought and emotion, than could a thousand words.
Mino
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you enjoyed this little poem. ~patty!
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You are most welcome Patty.
Comment from Jennifer Medley
I love how you convey your excitement in the poem. You get a feel of joy after reading this peice. This is a wonderful choice of words. I think this is a great poem!
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I love how you convey your excitement in the poem. You get a feel of joy after reading this peice. This is a wonderful choice of words. I think this is a great poem!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you enjoyed this little poem. Keep a watch out for more adventures with my cats, Simba and Leo, and the new arrival. ~patty!
Comment from animatqua
This is so sweet. I can fairly feel your delight in your new friend as I read through the poem.
As to poetic license--ok, ok. But those five lines in the second section really yank the reader out of the groove.
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This is so sweet. I can fairly feel your delight in your new friend as I read through the poem.
As to poetic license--ok, ok. But those five lines in the second section really yank the reader out of the groove.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to give me your honest feedback. I'm going to try to put the poem into a quatrain framework, because one of the other writers said I'm pretty close, . . .so look for an edited edition within the next day or so. I appreciate your feedback and assistance. ~patty~
Comment from Connie C
I can so relate to the joy that is pretty evident in your poem. There
is nothing like a cute little puppy to make one's day. Of course, there is
also that puppy training that is not always fun, but we won't think about
that. You do a great job here of defining a puppy and how energetic they
are and how fast they grow. Have fun with him! Connie
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I can so relate to the joy that is pretty evident in your poem. There
is nothing like a cute little puppy to make one's day. Of course, there is
also that puppy training that is not always fun, but we won't think about
that. You do a great job here of defining a puppy and how energetic they
are and how fast they grow. Have fun with him! Connie
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review. I'm not nearly as worried about the puppy training as I am the introduction to my cats, but it will all work out - I hope! ~patty!
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Mustang Pattie,
Well, it looks like you are getting a cute little Jack Russel Terrier. Be prepared for action! I enjoyed reading your poem. It is well written and brings a happy view point to the FanStory pages. Thanks for sharing.
Cheers, W ^-^
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Hi Mustang Pattie,
Well, it looks like you are getting a cute little Jack Russel Terrier. Be prepared for action! I enjoyed reading your poem. It is well written and brings a happy view point to the FanStory pages. Thanks for sharing.
Cheers, W ^-^
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and your generous review. I've done my research on the breed, and I hope I'm prepared for the whirlwind that may be descending upon my house, and the cats!! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. ~patty~
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I have a friend who raises Jack Russells and they love them to pieces. I'm sure your little puppy will be the apple of your eye! Good for you.
Comment from dmxn2k
I've never been a fan of strict rhymes. Near rhymes are fine by me. I did find the additional line in the second stanza somewhat disturbing to the quatrain structure. (I suppose I feel less liberal about structure.)
But it didn't take much away from the spirited joy in getting your new puppy. That's the most important aspect I take away from the piece.
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I've never been a fan of strict rhymes. Near rhymes are fine by me. I did find the additional line in the second stanza somewhat disturbing to the quatrain structure. (I suppose I feel less liberal about structure.)
But it didn't take much away from the spirited joy in getting your new puppy. That's the most important aspect I take away from the piece.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and your generous review -- Did I actually come close to a quatrain??? See, my biggest problem is that I only know a few rhyming schemes for poetry, . . . so I ordered a book on modern poetry writing, . . . but I'm in Germany, . . . and the book is on its way from the states - I hope it gets here before I leave!!! Thanks for reading. ~patty~
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Ha, well, every other stanza fit the quatrain in an ABAB rhyming scheme, and the second stanza just missed the quatrain by a AABB rhyming scheme but not for the fourth line. You seem to write them naturally, so I'm sure you'll recognize them with minimal effort. I hope and I'm sure your book will arrive in time. :) You're very welcome. Thanks for writing.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Puppy Love' is a delightfully written piece. As all animal lovers know, there's nothing better than one of God's creatures, either great or small, to bring joy in to our lives. This talented poet's work will I feel have touched a cord with many readers. It was a pleasure to both read and review a work of this standard.
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'Puppy Love' is a delightfully written piece. As all animal lovers know, there's nothing better than one of God's creatures, either great or small, to bring joy in to our lives. This talented poet's work will I feel have touched a cord with many readers. It was a pleasure to both read and review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I am especially touched by your remarks. ~patty~
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patty, you're more than welcome.
Kindest wishes, the Duchess
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patty, you're more than welcome.
Kindest wishes, the Duchess
Comment from markk
How wonderful! I love this poem. And certainly use as much poetic license as you want - that's my motto! Isn't it for poets to use!! Anyway this is a great and heart warming poem and your excitement and love for your puppy comes through already. Well done.
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How wonderful! I love this poem. And certainly use as much poetic license as you want - that's my motto! Isn't it for poets to use!! Anyway this is a great and heart warming poem and your excitement and love for your puppy comes through already. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you SO much for reading and your kind review. Dec 18th can't get here quick enough - or maybe it can; I have to "puppy proof" my house, . . .and especially my den - where he and I will spend the majority of our "inside time." ~patty~
Comment from the blue pixel
That's one cute little puppy. You have written your poem in quatrain form except for the 2nd stanza which has 5 lines and in this stanza, the rhyme sufferes a little because of the extra line.I see you have mentioned this in your notes but I personally feel your poem would have worked much better if you had opted to be consistent as all the rest is similar and only one stanza differs. However your joy is very very apparent in your poem. You sound as if you are jumping out of your skin. Puppies are indeed a lot of work and just another little kid to care for but they give back so very much. The Blue Pixel
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That's one cute little puppy. You have written your poem in quatrain form except for the 2nd stanza which has 5 lines and in this stanza, the rhyme sufferes a little because of the extra line.I see you have mentioned this in your notes but I personally feel your poem would have worked much better if you had opted to be consistent as all the rest is similar and only one stanza differs. However your joy is very very apparent in your poem. You sound as if you are jumping out of your skin. Puppies are indeed a lot of work and just another little kid to care for but they give back so very much. The Blue Pixel
Comment Written 02-Dec-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I fully intend to go back and rework the poem - when I "stop jumping out of my skin," and I feel clear-headed enough to tackle true poetry. The members of this site have been very kind and encouraging that I CAN make this into a "non free verse," with a little/lot of work. Thank you for your encouragement, too.
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LOL. I totally agree. There is actually far more rhyme in it than there isn't and there is little to do in my humble opinion to make this a lovely smooth read. xx Carol
