Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Nanashirley
Like the way you are building the suspense with every chapter. I think a chapter is only too long if you get bored of reading it and I defiantly did not.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Like the way you are building the suspense with every chapter. I think a chapter is only too long if you get bored of reading it and I defiantly did not.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Poor Sara. The thought that her daughter could be used in a porn movie must be driving her mad.
Once again you use 'onlooker' approach to get an idea of what is happening in realation to finding the kidnappers.
Each new disclosure just serves to increase the tension.
Juliette
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Poor Sara. The thought that her daughter could be used in a porn movie must be driving her mad.
Once again you use 'onlooker' approach to get an idea of what is happening in realation to finding the kidnappers.
Each new disclosure just serves to increase the tension.
Juliette
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from patmedium
Excellent, Barbara ... another powerful read. Lots of palpable emotion and vividly clear images. I like the interplay between the various characters. Nicely done. xxx
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Excellent, Barbara ... another powerful read. Lots of palpable emotion and vividly clear images. I like the interplay between the various characters. Nicely done. xxx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Kiddo, yep the chemo has it's ups and downs. I liked this chapter. Seems like the painting is good therapy. Dani is a real dependable little miss. Sara should trust her more. I'm just sad that they might be using Cassie in pornography material. That would be so devastating.
Well done. luv jada
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Hi Kiddo, yep the chemo has it's ups and downs. I liked this chapter. Seems like the painting is good therapy. Dani is a real dependable little miss. Sara should trust her more. I'm just sad that they might be using Cassie in pornography material. That would be so devastating.
Well done. luv jada
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from gerry26
Great chapter. I loved the real and smooth dialog. The air of mystery willl keep the writer comin back. I enjoy the stark contrast between the two main characters.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Great chapter. I loved the real and smooth dialog. The air of mystery willl keep the writer comin back. I enjoy the stark contrast between the two main characters.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
The way the characters enter, mark their way into the mind of the reader and how greatly the flow is kept with everything going on- action speaks awesome and end is good as well
regards
K
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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The way the characters enter, mark their way into the mind of the reader and how greatly the flow is kept with everything going on- action speaks awesome and end is good as well
regards
K
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bookishfabler
Long is fine if the story is interesting, and it was. I'm glad you are feeling better. I'm impressed how you are writing while feeling under the weather. Good for you.
Joe opened the bathroom door and stared at Sara's naked body as she dried off. "Excuse me. I thought you were still asleep."
Now doesn't this first paragraph draw a reader in, even if they never read another chapter. LOL. Great.
"I love you, Sara." He turned and left. The screen door shut behind him.
Sara watched until the car pulled away from the curb and disappeared out of sight.(Evil Eddie- seperate the lines)
lots of hugs
Book
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Long is fine if the story is interesting, and it was. I'm glad you are feeling better. I'm impressed how you are writing while feeling under the weather. Good for you.
Joe opened the bathroom door and stared at Sara's naked body as she dried off. "Excuse me. I thought you were still asleep."
Now doesn't this first paragraph draw a reader in, even if they never read another chapter. LOL. Great.
"I love you, Sara." He turned and left. The screen door shut behind him.
Sara watched until the car pulled away from the curb and disappeared out of sight.(Evil Eddie- seperate the lines)
lots of hugs
Book
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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I will fix that. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from misscookie
What an interesting chapter it gets better each time. I kinder moved away from writing stories they were driving me crazy. I do have a few I must complete
I love the movement of your story. you give just enough for the reader to what to read more.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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What an interesting chapter it gets better each time. I kinder moved away from writing stories they were driving me crazy. I do have a few I must complete
I love the movement of your story. you give just enough for the reader to what to read more.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Novels can drive you crazy, but I was already crazy, so oh well.
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Your verywelcome, welcome to the club they tell me I'm crazy all the time I say "Thank you very muc".
Comment from Rama Rao
It's always good to see your post even if it is longer by three hundred words. It's also good to note everything is going well with you. Here is wishing you the best of health. As for the chapter, it doesn't need any comment; it is as good as any of your posts.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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It's always good to see your post even if it is longer by three hundred words. It's also good to note everything is going well with you. Here is wishing you the best of health. As for the chapter, it doesn't need any comment; it is as good as any of your posts.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your support. I appreciate it.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, another great chapter and part of the continuing saga. It's such a shame to think that there is really this kind of drama that is going on in our world today. Keep writing about how wonderful George is, the frienship of Dani, and the love and courage of Sara and Joe. (And keep on getting yourself better as well.)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Barbara, another great chapter and part of the continuing saga. It's such a shame to think that there is really this kind of drama that is going on in our world today. Keep writing about how wonderful George is, the frienship of Dani, and the love and courage of Sara and Joe. (And keep on getting yourself better as well.)
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
