The War Horse
A young brave wants a war horse33 total reviews
Comment from Fireshadow
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Susan, I LOVE ! this exceptional write and wonderful story ! Found no spag errors at all. Your talent for rich descriptive details really shines through in this work. Stunning imagery and characterization place the reader next to Running Deer during the chase. The storyline is a real beauty. Thank you so much for sharing this superb and highly enjoyable write, my dear friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2011
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Susan, I LOVE ! this exceptional write and wonderful story ! Found no spag errors at all. Your talent for rich descriptive details really shines through in this work. Stunning imagery and characterization place the reader next to Running Deer during the chase. The storyline is a real beauty. Thank you so much for sharing this superb and highly enjoyable write, my dear friend.
Ama
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2011
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HI Ama!! HUGS and a thousand thank you's for this wonderful review...I am so honored by your enthusiasm and kindness. How lucky can I get? Thank you so much! What a thrill...I wasn't sure if this was good, and you and others have been so kind! HUGS and Happy Spring young lady!! LUV! Susan
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is a superb story my friend. You have the cadence and tone perfect, in my mind, for the relating of the Native American life and adventures of the young Brave. A great story told with obvious love and passion leading to the perfect ending. Fantastic read! Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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This is a superb story my friend. You have the cadence and tone perfect, in my mind, for the relating of the Native American life and adventures of the young Brave. A great story told with obvious love and passion leading to the perfect ending. Fantastic read! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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HI Bev!! Thank you!! And I am so sorry for this late reply...I am honored and always so glad you like what I try to do...thank you again my friend...xoxo, susan
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Always a pleasure to read your offerings, susan. I always enjoy your imaginative and well written
stories. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dale95
What a great story of how we use to live and grow. From very early on in age life was all about developing strength, character, empathy for our animal allies, autonomy, visions, responsibility, pride in spirit, and much, much more. Compare that kind of self-identity motivation to what is available to our youth today in this modern age of self-gratification. SAD!!!
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What a great story of how we use to live and grow. From very early on in age life was all about developing strength, character, empathy for our animal allies, autonomy, visions, responsibility, pride in spirit, and much, much more. Compare that kind of self-identity motivation to what is available to our youth today in this modern age of self-gratification. SAD!!!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from Deejharrington
A terrific story told with vivid descriptions! I was cheering the big stallion on, so I was so happy when the new colt was the horse he desired. I adore horse stories, and I really enjoyed this one!
dj
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A terrific story told with vivid descriptions! I was cheering the big stallion on, so I was so happy when the new colt was the horse he desired. I adore horse stories, and I really enjoyed this one!
dj
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from c_lucas
Wild horse herds still roam the American Plains. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery.
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Wild horse herds still roam the American Plains. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from misscookie
This is a very nice story. You should publish as a children book.
You didn't miss a beat it is filled with excitement and, educational. It has love, compassion, and understanding.
This is a good write
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This is a very nice story. You should publish as a children book.
You didn't miss a beat it is filled with excitement and, educational. It has love, compassion, and understanding.
This is a good write
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
So the young lad never caught the stallion but still found what he needed. I enjoyed this story and found one nit:
"Silently, he guarded the mare as she finally laid [lay] down, her belly bulging with new life."
Dave
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Susan,
So the young lad never caught the stallion but still found what he needed. I enjoyed this story and found one nit:
"Silently, he guarded the mare as she finally laid [lay] down, her belly bulging with new life."
Dave
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Hi Dave! Thank you! I corrected the word error...I had it right the first time! LOL! I am happy you liked this! It took me five months to finish it...for some reason, I couldn't get the ending done? Thank you again Dave! Susan
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
it's eyes
it's mother
With its only use an apostrophe when it stands for it is
Very enjoyable story, again shows how much you know about horses and also Native Americans. You have such good story-telling skills.
Hope you are getting packed and getting some rest! Hugs, Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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it's eyes
it's mother
With its only use an apostrophe when it stands for it is
Very enjoyable story, again shows how much you know about horses and also Native Americans. You have such good story-telling skills.
Hope you are getting packed and getting some rest! Hugs, Debbie
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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HI Debbie!! I fixed these and I really appreciate your kind help! I fell asleep a while ago, and woke up to the television too loud...I want you to know how much I appreciate having you read for me, and also as a friend! Luv! Susan
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Have a great day!!! DEbbie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, susan, i loved reading this story about the indian boy who became a man and got the replica of the horse he dreamed about. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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this is very well written, susan, i loved reading this story about the indian boy who became a man and got the replica of the horse he dreamed about. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Hi Sweet! Thank you very very much! I am always proud to have you read my work, and grateful too. SO glad you enjoyed my effort! ") luv, susan
Comment from The Stranger
this is a delightful story concentrating on a young indian who learns the miracle of birth through the horse he tends, very uplifting, I enjoyed this
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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this is a delightful story concentrating on a young indian who learns the miracle of birth through the horse he tends, very uplifting, I enjoyed this
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Hi Stranger! Thank you! What an honor to have you read and rate for me! I am thrilled that you liked this one, it took forever to finally complete! Thank you again!! Susan
