Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
First things first .... and you certainly have a very courageous approach to your chemo-therapy and the resultant loss of your hair. What a blessing it is that you have your writing to occupy your mind.
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book and there are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Joe watched George exit the front door.
So many writers are talking about people exiting. An exit is a door or passageway through which people leave a place.
I suggest - Joe watched George as he left through the front door.
* You have - At the window she noticed a falling star.
You had Sara sitting on the side of the bed then say ...
At the window... Perhaps you mean ... Through the window ... OR ... it could be - Getting up, she went to the window and almost at once, she noticed a falling star.
Thank you for sharing this story with us and also keeping us informed about your treatment. Bless you.
Love from ....... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Hullo Barbara ....
First things first .... and you certainly have a very courageous approach to your chemo-therapy and the resultant loss of your hair. What a blessing it is that you have your writing to occupy your mind.
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book and there are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Joe watched George exit the front door.
So many writers are talking about people exiting. An exit is a door or passageway through which people leave a place.
I suggest - Joe watched George as he left through the front door.
* You have - At the window she noticed a falling star.
You had Sara sitting on the side of the bed then say ...
At the window... Perhaps you mean ... Through the window ... OR ... it could be - Getting up, she went to the window and almost at once, she noticed a falling star.
Thank you for sharing this story with us and also keeping us informed about your treatment. Bless you.
Love from ....... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your suggestions. I appreciate them.
Comment from Ponder
Hi Barbara,
This is a super chapter. The domestic scenes in which Sara is choosing interiors do a lot to flesh out her character, as does the bit with wishing on a star. Lovely writing through out and flawless.
The only ting to do with that fatigue of yours is to go with it, it is your body telling you to rest and you should obay. It will pass! And, the great thing about hair is, it grows back. Keep calm and carry on.
Jules
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Hi Barbara,
This is a super chapter. The domestic scenes in which Sara is choosing interiors do a lot to flesh out her character, as does the bit with wishing on a star. Lovely writing through out and flawless.
The only ting to do with that fatigue of yours is to go with it, it is your body telling you to rest and you should obay. It will pass! And, the great thing about hair is, it grows back. Keep calm and carry on.
Jules
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and encouragement. I appreciate both.
Comment from bhogg
This was very good. You've built such a complex relationship between Joe and Sara that is inexorably linked to Cassie. I just have to keep coming back to see how it all works out. Warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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This was very good. You've built such a complex relationship between Joe and Sara that is inexorably linked to Cassie. I just have to keep coming back to see how it all works out. Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Dear Barbara:
Thanks for such a wonderful chapter!
I'm among your many friends in FanStory, thinking about you and sending out some prayers for you and your family.
Very soon your hair will be back as pretty and strong like always... Take it easy, donīt pay attention to anything but to get better...
God bless you Barbara,
Alba :)
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Dear Barbara:
Thanks for such a wonderful chapter!
I'm among your many friends in FanStory, thinking about you and sending out some prayers for you and your family.
Very soon your hair will be back as pretty and strong like always... Take it easy, donīt pay attention to anything but to get better...
God bless you Barbara,
Alba :)
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and your encouraging words. I appreciate both. I am need of my friends today.
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We're with you Barbara...
Comment from Writeaway...
I'm still impressed by your writing skills and your ability to stay on track barbara, bravo. I can find nothing to suggest for improvment, excellent job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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I'm still impressed by your writing skills and your ability to stay on track barbara, bravo. I can find nothing to suggest for improvment, excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging thoughts.
Comment from patmedium
Lovely, dear ... very nicely and sympathetically written indeed. You still have me hanging on your every word.
As to the hair falling out ... when it gets a bit thinner, shave it off ... why not get sponsorship at school for the school funds? Have it done in class. Turn it into an event. xxxxxx
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Lovely, dear ... very nicely and sympathetically written indeed. You still have me hanging on your every word.
As to the hair falling out ... when it gets a bit thinner, shave it off ... why not get sponsorship at school for the school funds? Have it done in class. Turn it into an event. xxxxxx
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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When I washed my hair yesterday, it fell out in such large amounts it clogged my drain. I had my husband shave it to within an half an inch. It has continued to fall out since thin. Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from lola29
I can't imagine the anguish Sarah is experiencing, but what I don't understand is why she continually thinks Joe would not be gentle with her. Somehow, this really bothers me. She's been intimte with the man and see how kind he was to Cassie, and how he continues to selflessly search for her.
I read you author notes, and I'm so happy you are doing well. It's time for you to relax and take it easy.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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I can't imagine the anguish Sarah is experiencing, but what I don't understand is why she continually thinks Joe would not be gentle with her. Somehow, this really bothers me. She's been intimte with the man and see how kind he was to Cassie, and how he continues to selflessly search for her.
I read you author notes, and I'm so happy you are doing well. It's time for you to relax and take it easy.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from FredCollingwood
I normally trim my hair short, but today, I'm going to do something different. I'm shaving it all off. If you're going to have a clean head. I am too. (Let me know when it grows back. It's beginning to get cold.) My thoughts are with you.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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I normally trim my hair short, but today, I'm going to do something different. I'm shaving it all off. If you're going to have a clean head. I am too. (Let me know when it grows back. It's beginning to get cold.) My thoughts are with you.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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It's supposed to come two - three months after chemo. My last treatment of phase two should be around March 17th. I then go into phase three. Not sure what that has in store for me. My little brain could only handle up to phase two.
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You won't be entirely alone. I AM shaving my head today.
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You are so sweet.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
For me, you touched on the very point that hits a mother when she cannot get to her child. Why did I, or didn't I, do such and such. It creates agony.
Poor Sara.
This chapter is revealing and tender at the same time.
Juliette
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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For me, you touched on the very point that hits a mother when she cannot get to her child. Why did I, or didn't I, do such and such. It creates agony.
Poor Sara.
This chapter is revealing and tender at the same time.
Juliette
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. My second child, he's 30 now, was a wild teenager. The hardest lesson for me to learn was I couldn't stop him. He had to do it himself. I loved him through it and he turned out to be a great husband and father.
Comment from BethShelby
I like this story very much Barbara. I'm sorry I haven't read it from the beginning and I wish I had time to go back and do that. I assume Cassie has run away from home or is she ill? Speaking of ill, I just learned from you author notes you are having chemo treatments. That has got to be hard. My prayers are with you. I'm glad doctors know how to treat these things so much better now. I'll try to catch more of this story as you post it.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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I like this story very much Barbara. I'm sorry I haven't read it from the beginning and I wish I had time to go back and do that. I assume Cassie has run away from home or is she ill? Speaking of ill, I just learned from you author notes you are having chemo treatments. That has got to be hard. My prayers are with you. I'm glad doctors know how to treat these things so much better now. I'll try to catch more of this story as you post it.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2010
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Cassie was kidnapped. Thank you for for your review and prayers. I appreciate both.
