Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Thesis
It's getting more tense and interesting. I liked the scene where George reached for his gun on the refrigerator. It spole volumes about the threat level to Sara and heightened the tension in the room. - John
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It's getting more tense and interesting. I liked the scene where George reached for his gun on the refrigerator. It spole volumes about the threat level to Sara and heightened the tension in the room. - John
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from patmedium
orders to the porn sights.[sites]
You're doing GREAT, dear Barbara. (With the postings, I mean)
THIS chapter is bang on the mark, as usual. xxxx
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orders to the porn sights.[sites]
You're doing GREAT, dear Barbara. (With the postings, I mean)
THIS chapter is bang on the mark, as usual. xxxx
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your review and encouragement. I fixed that error.
Comment from G. Eleck
Well what can I say other then another awesome chapter by a writer that is truly talented... Well done on another fantastic chapter and thanks for the great read...
Thanks G :)
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Well what can I say other then another awesome chapter by a writer that is truly talented... Well done on another fantastic chapter and thanks for the great read...
Thanks G :)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A lovely story well written with feeling, you describe your charachters well. A good write with good flow and needs no edit. Thanks for sharing with me.Mary
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A lovely story well written with feeling, you describe your charachters well. A good write with good flow and needs no edit. Thanks for sharing with me.Mary
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from pickthorn
Sounds like they may be getting closer to finding Cassie. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I think writing is good therapy for you Barbara.. just like painting the walls is for Sara, but you need your rest too, so please listen to your body and rest when you need to. You are doing a great job on the story.
pickthorn
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Sounds like they may be getting closer to finding Cassie. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I think writing is good therapy for you Barbara.. just like painting the walls is for Sara, but you need your rest too, so please listen to your body and rest when you need to. You are doing a great job on the story.
pickthorn
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from dmjones
Hi Barbara, I enjoyed reading this chapter. It feels like things are heating up. What makes this so good is this unfortunately really happens.
One thing:
orders to the porn sights. (sites)
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Hi Barbara, I enjoyed reading this chapter. It feels like things are heating up. What makes this so good is this unfortunately really happens.
One thing:
orders to the porn sights. (sites)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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I have fixed that error. I hate it when I do things like that. I know better, but it still slips in there. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from lola29
I honestly don't know how Sara manages to hold on. Kudos to the people who are surrounding her and trying so desperately to keep her sane, while at the same time searing for Cassie.
Barbara, my prayers are with you, and I'll be thinking of you Thursday.
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I honestly don't know how Sara manages to hold on. Kudos to the people who are surrounding her and trying so desperately to keep her sane, while at the same time searing for Cassie.
Barbara, my prayers are with you, and I'll be thinking of you Thursday.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
as usual this chapter has excellent dialog, flow, pacing and good balance with narrative and dialog. The relationship deepens, and circumstances intensify.
The porn ring on internet is a disturbing reflection of current realities the world must battle.
Did not notice any nits or spags (but admit I read only once and might have missed any typos).
Good luck with chemo--sending strengthening and healing thoughts.
Love,r d
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as usual this chapter has excellent dialog, flow, pacing and good balance with narrative and dialog. The relationship deepens, and circumstances intensify.
The porn ring on internet is a disturbing reflection of current realities the world must battle.
Did not notice any nits or spags (but admit I read only once and might have missed any typos).
Good luck with chemo--sending strengthening and healing thoughts.
Love,r d
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I missed a big one. I am shocked your didn't catch it. I wrote porn sight, instead of porn site. It is corrected.
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I'm not perfect! ;-) Sorry for oversite--LOL I mean oversight.
Comment from KayteeF
This chapter is great. A good way of pulling things together and seeing her getting the lounge painted. Some reassurance that Joe does care for her from Matt and Dani. A clever bit of retail therapy. The return of Cassie's Computer.
*When Sara decides she wants to 'do the bathroom next'.
*('She stood to answer the door'.)*
This sentence caused me to stop in my tracks. I looked back to see if they had heard a knock or a mention that they were expecting visitors.
It does not detract from the pace of the story, it just disturbs the flow. Maybe I am out of place in my inexperience. Just let me know if I am, please.
Now you continue to get back to the painting. Sara is concerned about George wearing his gun holster. He tells her they might come for her next.
You leave us on a cliffhanger again. Well done.
I hope all's OK for you on Thursday. Are you feeling a bit better after you last treatment?
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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This chapter is great. A good way of pulling things together and seeing her getting the lounge painted. Some reassurance that Joe does care for her from Matt and Dani. A clever bit of retail therapy. The return of Cassie's Computer.
*When Sara decides she wants to 'do the bathroom next'.
*('She stood to answer the door'.)*
This sentence caused me to stop in my tracks. I looked back to see if they had heard a knock or a mention that they were expecting visitors.
It does not detract from the pace of the story, it just disturbs the flow. Maybe I am out of place in my inexperience. Just let me know if I am, please.
Now you continue to get back to the painting. Sara is concerned about George wearing his gun holster. He tells her they might come for her next.
You leave us on a cliffhanger again. Well done.
I hope all's OK for you on Thursday. Are you feeling a bit better after you last treatment?
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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I acutally have good days and bad days. I wonder as I take more chemo, if I will have more bad days. Thank you for your kind reviw. I made a hard copy of your suggestions so I make corrections.
Comment from ejebb1951
This I would buy and encourage my friends to purchase. I had to keep reading. Child pornography is sickening and running wild world wide. These sickos can't please a real woman that's why they get off on kids. I'm feeling this because of some past experiences and I'm getting kind of teary. Love it.
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This I would buy and encourage my friends to purchase. I had to keep reading. Child pornography is sickening and running wild world wide. These sickos can't please a real woman that's why they get off on kids. I'm feeling this because of some past experiences and I'm getting kind of teary. Love it.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
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you're very welcome.
