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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Barbara,

With ever chapter the tension builds. I feel so sorry for Sara and hope Cassie makes it home safe. The internet is a marvelous thing but for young people, like Cassie, it is very dangerous. When they click on a site they never know what they are getting into until it's too late. Another great chapter. Good luck with your next chemo and I hope you will sail through it. Blessings, chey

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010


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    Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from bhogg
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Hi Barbara - I wouldn't have thought it possible, but more tension building in this post than the last. It doesn't seem to matter what you write, I'm hooked! Great pace, good balance between narrative and dialogue, great editing. Regards, Bill

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010


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Comment from M.L. Gardner
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Good chapter. I hope joe and sarah don't crack under the pressure of this crisis. Anxiously awaiting cassie to come home safe. You can feel the chronic tension. Nice job.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010


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Comment from Writeaway...
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Well done once again barbara, although you maybe ill, your writing skills are still strong, bravo. I can find nothing to suggest for improvment and was kept in thralled from the beginning, excellent job, keep writing!! :)

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Comment from eliz100
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This was another great read from beginning to end, as always. Your words continue to build the tension, to keep, me the reader interested.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010


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Comment from jadapenn
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Hi Girlfriend, so nice of you to look after my dog. I'll have you know he's not an easy bugger.
Looks as if we're still trying to pacify Sara in this chapter. I think its time she learnt to trust poor old Joe.
Well done. luv jada

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010


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    Sara is working slowly to trust Joe. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bookishfabler
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Another fun chapter. I can't believe you have me reading romance yet again. I think the task forse and guns do it for me. Oh, and I like your characters. Only one nit.

As Matt answered his cell phone(-,)(and) (-he) stepped into the kitchen.

hugs book

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
    I will take care of that nit. Hey, the Task Force guys do get into a gun fight, does that help?
reply by bookishfabler on 10-Nov-2010
    Oh boy does it. LOL. I just finished up finally a chapter of Deadly Secrets. With the conference and contests I left them for a while. It has some action in it. I just got to review a whole bunch so I can get it posted.
    hugs Heidi
Comment from Mary Faucheux
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Great chapter. Your characters come to life before my eyes. The dialogue is real and the emotions I so very real. One spot:but don't know how it's going (to) play out.
Mary

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    Thank you for catching that nit. I appreciate the eagle eye.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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There's such suspense in this
chapter - and Sara's feelings
are being stretched to a point
she might have a nervous breakdown.

"I'm not worried about me
.................about myself.

I hope you are resting after your chemo, my friend.

Margaret

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010


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    Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from animatqua
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Another good chapter with a hook at both the beginning and end. You have a solid mystery going. The characters are working well within it.

Don't push yourself after the chemo. Your readers understand!

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2010


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    Thank you for your kind review.