Pet Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Noises unseen"...musings on the pets I've had
9 total reviews
Comment from richard7
That is neat, puts a smile on my face to see through the cats eyes and wonder what is going on outside the fantasy land door!
Very nice rhyme and beat, If only he had thumbs,
If only he were taller,
He hears soft hums,
and then a holler.
Cats curiosity must be on Haywire!
Hope you reward him/her with a chocolate for not telling!
An enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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That is neat, puts a smile on my face to see through the cats eyes and wonder what is going on outside the fantasy land door!
Very nice rhyme and beat, If only he had thumbs,
If only he were taller,
He hears soft hums,
and then a holler.
Cats curiosity must be on Haywire!
Hope you reward him/her with a chocolate for not telling!
An enjoyable read.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for reading. I'm glad that Simba's dilemma made you smile -- he really is quite the cat!
Comment from songlines
I really love this piece. I have always enjoyed the personality and humanness of cats (if that's the right word?) and you show this very well.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2010
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I really love this piece. I have always enjoyed the personality and humanness of cats (if that's the right word?) and you show this very well.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2010
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Thank you!! I haven't been posting my cat stories as much, because I'm working on the contest stuff, but to be sure, Simba and Leo, along with others from the past, will show up on here. I'm glad you enjoyed it, . . .and could bear with my humanizing the little critters!
Comment from KayteeF
Isn't it just so.
Once again you give me cause to remember.
I think you are good medicine. Love your style.
Tom and Jerry had a double act to open doors.
One would hang from the handle
The other would 'clook' his claws at the side and between them they were in.
In our house shutting the door wasn't enough
We had to bolt the door!!!
Miaow!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Isn't it just so.
Once again you give me cause to remember.
I think you are good medicine. Love your style.
Tom and Jerry had a double act to open doors.
One would hang from the handle
The other would 'clook' his claws at the side and between them they were in.
In our house shutting the door wasn't enough
We had to bolt the door!!!
Miaow!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Hi Kaytee; I'm so honored that you feel I'm good medicine, AND that you are now a fan. More cat stories are coming; with me in Germany, and my buddies in the states, I'm working from memories, rather than observations -- THANK YOU again!
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Sometimes our memories are the best gift in this craft.
Comment from Ruffyan
Delightful little story. Rhymes fairly well in the abab format except in the last stanza the change in rhyme emphasizes the resolution of the dilemma of the previous verses. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Delightful little story. Rhymes fairly well in the abab format except in the last stanza the change in rhyme emphasizes the resolution of the dilemma of the previous verses. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you SO much for your kind review; AND for understanding why the rhyming pattern changed in the last stanza!
Comment from Father Flaps
Dear Mystery Poet
Been there, done that! Out goes the kitty. Door shut! Having a purring cat on your shoulder kind of stifles the mood, so to speak.
My favorite line,
"Deep in his kitty brain, horrible images were forming"
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the voting booths!
Kimbob
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Dear Mystery Poet
Been there, done that! Out goes the kitty. Door shut! Having a purring cat on your shoulder kind of stifles the mood, so to speak.
My favorite line,
"Deep in his kitty brain, horrible images were forming"
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the voting booths!
Kimbob
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Prodigy143
Simplistic and adorable. Unfortunately this goes for children aswell lol. The only thing i'd add would be more description in your piece or future pieces. It draws the reader in and gives them a better picture.
Thank you =]
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Simplistic and adorable. Unfortunately this goes for children aswell lol. The only thing i'd add would be more description in your piece or future pieces. It draws the reader in and gives them a better picture.
Thank you =]
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
that is just so cute. i enjoyed reading your kitty's story and the horror of the closed doors. it is very well written and i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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that is just so cute. i enjoyed reading your kitty's story and the horror of the closed doors. it is very well written and i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from llaliberte
The things we do, well done and well written, I had no idea where you were going with this poem til the end, nice job, got a good laugh and enjoyed it very much.keep writting...good job
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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The things we do, well done and well written, I had no idea where you were going with this poem til the end, nice job, got a good laugh and enjoyed it very much.keep writting...good job
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from CodyJack
This gave me a good laugh. I can only imagine what they must think when a door is finally closed and they can not get inside it. Great imagery and good luck with the contest. Cody
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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This gave me a good laugh. I can only imagine what they must think when a door is finally closed and they can not get inside it. Great imagery and good luck with the contest. Cody
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
