The Predator
A young woman starts a new life.108 total reviews
Comment from bhogg
What a wonderful story. Since I recently gave you a six, but system won't allow another. There are many things I like about your writing, but two really stand out. The first is pace and the second is your editing. I've learned a lot from your work! Warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
  |
What a wonderful story. Since I recently gave you a six, but system won't allow another. There are many things I like about your writing, but two really stand out. The first is pace and the second is your editing. I've learned a lot from your work! Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a lovely, touching
story. And what an
insensitive coward her husband
is, to leave her at such a time.
But love will find a way....
"It's bad enough it destroyed my marriage."
"It's bad enough. It destroyed my marriage."
So good to hear you are coping - you must respect
the fact that you need to rest, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
|
What a lovely, touching
story. And what an
insensitive coward her husband
is, to leave her at such a time.
But love will find a way....
"It's bad enough it destroyed my marriage."
"It's bad enough. It destroyed my marriage."
So good to hear you are coping - you must respect
the fact that you need to rest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
Thank you for your eagle eye. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Connie P
Wonderful story! I know where it originated, I'm interested to see where it goes. It would take and utter fool to reject someone because of the results of breast surgery, but there are a lot of utter fools out there.
Glad to hear you're doing as well as you are. Rest is a good thing although I have a problem with it myself. The good thing is that the mind can still work while the body recoups.
Connie
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
|
Wonderful story! I know where it originated, I'm interested to see where it goes. It would take and utter fool to reject someone because of the results of breast surgery, but there are a lot of utter fools out there.
Glad to hear you're doing as well as you are. Rest is a good thing although I have a problem with it myself. The good thing is that the mind can still work while the body recoups.
Connie
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
That is true and since I am an ADHD adult my mind never stops. If only my body would follow. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dmjones
Hi Barbara, this is an excellent short story. It's well written right from the beginning. Both human characters are likable as well as the dog. I never had a Great Pyrenees but I've met a few and they are great dogs. I didn't see any spag or anything to change.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
|
Hi Barbara, this is an excellent short story. It's well written right from the beginning. Both human characters are likable as well as the dog. I never had a Great Pyrenees but I've met a few and they are great dogs. I didn't see any spag or anything to change.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
Thank you for your kind review. I love my pyre, he's the biggest most lovable lug you would ever find.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Good story, Barbara. Glad things are going so well for you.
"I think he liked you from the beginning[. T]hat's why he tried to herd you toward his house."
Even after reconstructive surgery[,] my husband couldn't stand looking at my body."
"I can't tell the future, but I'm positive your battle with cancer will not come between us.["]
Roberta
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
|
Good story, Barbara. Glad things are going so well for you.
"I think he liked you from the beginning[. T]hat's why he tried to herd you toward his house."
Even after reconstructive surgery[,] my husband couldn't stand looking at my body."
"I can't tell the future, but I'm positive your battle with cancer will not come between us.["]
Roberta
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
Thank you for your kind review and eagle eye.
Comment from marcii
Wow a quick jump into a relationship but other than that the story is very good.
Not sure I know this type of dog but I will Google it to see what it is like, The biggest dog I ever saw was on a farm it was a old hunting dog, I think they originated in Switzerland or some where like that.
Marcii
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
|
Wow a quick jump into a relationship but other than that the story is very good.
Not sure I know this type of dog but I will Google it to see what it is like, The biggest dog I ever saw was on a farm it was a old hunting dog, I think they originated in Switzerland or some where like that.
Marcii
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
The pyre is from the Alps of France. They were used to herd sheep and goats. Ours just herds our black lab. It's funny to watch.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Thanks a lot Barbara, for let us know about your progress in the treatment, I'm so glad you're feeling much better...
I think this story is great. I loved the dog. Your characters are strong and the dialogue is excellent.
God bless you!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
|
Thanks a lot Barbara, for let us know about your progress in the treatment, I'm so glad you're feeling much better...
I think this story is great. I loved the dog. Your characters are strong and the dialogue is excellent.
God bless you!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
This is a fine story and it has an uplifting ending that I really like. I am so glad you survived your chemo so well...I just know you will do fine. Those aren't scars, they are life line. Trust me I know. You usual skill has an author comes through loud and clear in this piece. I know you will be tired throughout your treatments but that just gives you a reason to sit and write! Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
|
Hi Barbara,
This is a fine story and it has an uplifting ending that I really like. I am so glad you survived your chemo so well...I just know you will do fine. Those aren't scars, they are life line. Trust me I know. You usual skill has an author comes through loud and clear in this piece. I know you will be tired throughout your treatments but that just gives you a reason to sit and write! Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from R. K. Alan
This is a very touching and moving piece. I enjoyed it very much. It has the makings of a good part 2 follow up. I have to admit, dogs are a great way to meet people. Ray aka krylon
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
|
This is a very touching and moving piece. I enjoyed it very much. It has the makings of a good part 2 follow up. I have to admit, dogs are a great way to meet people. Ray aka krylon
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
My boy have used dogs on occasion to meet girls. My oldest was 16 years old when my youngest son was born. Babies are also great snags for girls too. thanks for the great review.
Comment from Fireshadow
Barbara, how wonderful to have you back ... and writing ! This is a wonderful, uplifting story which is very well penned. Easy flowing narrative and clear, sharp dialogue. Found no spag errors. I only wish you would have developed further the dynamics between Eli and Jasmine during their dinner - it seemed somewhat hasty. Nonetheless, it's still a great write, my friend. The pyre's artwork is a perfect match (they are incredibly wonderful pets and companions). Very well done, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
|
Barbara, how wonderful to have you back ... and writing ! This is a wonderful, uplifting story which is very well penned. Easy flowing narrative and clear, sharp dialogue. Found no spag errors. I only wish you would have developed further the dynamics between Eli and Jasmine during their dinner - it seemed somewhat hasty. Nonetheless, it's still a great write, my friend. The pyre's artwork is a perfect match (they are incredibly wonderful pets and companions). Very well done, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
-
Thank you for your kind review. At thend Eli does say he doesn't know what the future holds.
