The Predator
A young woman starts a new life.108 total reviews
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, yet another good storyline. I love how you have such good writing that takes us very comfortably into your characters and their lives. I've had some drooly dogs myself, none quite as bid as Sam though. Do you plan on adding chapters to this story? Could turn out to be interesting. Good job as always.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Barbara, yet another good storyline. I love how you have such good writing that takes us very comfortably into your characters and their lives. I've had some drooly dogs myself, none quite as bid as Sam though. Do you plan on adding chapters to this story? Could turn out to be interesting. Good job as always.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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I orginaly had no plans to extend it, but I have had so many requests I am thinking about it.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
I don't have a "sixer" so I'm awarding you two of my special "twelvers."
Considering what you're going through, this piece must've been a difficult write. For me it was a difficult read.
Any man who can walk away from his wife of lover in such a time of need is not a man at all. He's a selfish cockroach who isn't worth spit.
I'm not looking for praise, but when my Barb fell ill, I was there. Fortunately, I didn't have to trudge off to work every day. Her care was a 24/7 situation, it was no picnic for her or me. Barb's last six months were an agony for her. I have never felt so helpless in my life, but I was there until she took her last breath.
Good work.
Ted
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Hi Barbara :)
I don't have a "sixer" so I'm awarding you two of my special "twelvers."
Considering what you're going through, this piece must've been a difficult write. For me it was a difficult read.
Any man who can walk away from his wife of lover in such a time of need is not a man at all. He's a selfish cockroach who isn't worth spit.
I'm not looking for praise, but when my Barb fell ill, I was there. Fortunately, I didn't have to trudge off to work every day. Her care was a 24/7 situation, it was no picnic for her or me. Barb's last six months were an agony for her. I have never felt so helpless in my life, but I was there until she took her last breath.
Good work.
Ted
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Not all men are willing to do that. I knew you were just grumpy on the outside and a teddy bear on the inside. Thank you for your kind review.
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You're most welcome :)
During Barb's last three months, I had to hide her pain pills because she told me she wanted to end the suffering. I finally hid all her meds and gave them to her as directed. I ached to watch her waste away. I fight those images every day.
Ted
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My prayers are with you. I am sure there is a special place in Heaven for you.
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Thank you. Take care :)
Comment from G. Eleck
This story had my attention from the very first word... Well done... The only mistake I found was "I have a feeling your secretes tearing you up inside. It might help if you talk about it. I'm a great listening" I think it was suppose to be "I'm a great listener" But other then that fantastic... I will admit that I was disappointed that it was a short story it would have made a great novel...
Thanks for the great read.
Thanks G :)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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This story had my attention from the very first word... Well done... The only mistake I found was "I have a feeling your secretes tearing you up inside. It might help if you talk about it. I'm a great listening" I think it was suppose to be "I'm a great listener" But other then that fantastic... I will admit that I was disappointed that it was a short story it would have made a great novel...
Thanks for the great read.
Thanks G :)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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It would be easy to extend if I chose to do so. I must have been correcting that as youwere reading. Or I better check it actually made the change. Thank you.
Comment from Begin Again
Barbara,
Congratulations..on the fantastic story which should be an eye opener for other women and for being so strong and open about the difficulties that face you. I'm proud that you are my friend.
smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Barbara,
Congratulations..on the fantastic story which should be an eye opener for other women and for being so strong and open about the difficulties that face you. I'm proud that you are my friend.
smiles, Carol
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Sefiros
I wasn't sure what the problem was first off. There was little segueway from her pep talk to the bear attack. I didn't even know the story jumped straight to her new life before Eli called her a neighbor. And now that I know its breast cancer, I can see her nervousness is warranted. Again I have to agree with Eli. No husband who is frightened off by a life-saving operation.
And just in case you too sre a cancer survivor, know that the Amazons of Greek mythology willingly cut off their left breasts in order to shoot arrows more effectively. They're the warrior women, so they kick all kinds of ass.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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I wasn't sure what the problem was first off. There was little segueway from her pep talk to the bear attack. I didn't even know the story jumped straight to her new life before Eli called her a neighbor. And now that I know its breast cancer, I can see her nervousness is warranted. Again I have to agree with Eli. No husband who is frightened off by a life-saving operation.
And just in case you too sre a cancer survivor, know that the Amazons of Greek mythology willingly cut off their left breasts in order to shoot arrows more effectively. They're the warrior women, so they kick all kinds of ass.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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HUMMMM, maybe I can be a warrior woman. Thank you for your review.
Comment from carl8447
good job, you had me to the end which is rare. cancer story always a good tear jerker, plus i like the picture of the pyre.
carl
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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good job, you had me to the end which is rare. cancer story always a good tear jerker, plus i like the picture of the pyre.
carl
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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I have fallen in love with this gentle giant. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
This is an excellent romance story, and without any nits that I could see. Jasmine may not realize this yet, but she is far better off without her ex.
I'm glad to hear you aren't doing too badly and hope this continues.
Dave
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Barbara,
This is an excellent romance story, and without any nits that I could see. Jasmine may not realize this yet, but she is far better off without her ex.
I'm glad to hear you aren't doing too badly and hope this continues.
Dave
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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I have my next chemo treatment Thursday. I hope I bounce back as well as I did this time. A few days were rough, but my side effects are liveable right now.
Comment from Realist101
Barbara, this is a super story. You successfully weaved your own experience into a romantic and realistic tale of hope and survival! And your dialogue is great. I read this sort of work and sure wish I could do it! I am so happy to hear you are doing better, and resting...it's no crime to take it easy, even when we don't have health issues! I like this character, Jasmine, I hope you will continue this for at least another chapter? ") Luv, Susan
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Barbara, this is a super story. You successfully weaved your own experience into a romantic and realistic tale of hope and survival! And your dialogue is great. I read this sort of work and sure wish I could do it! I am so happy to hear you are doing better, and resting...it's no crime to take it easy, even when we don't have health issues! I like this character, Jasmine, I hope you will continue this for at least another chapter? ") Luv, Susan
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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I will think about it. I've some reviewers suggest it. Thank you for your kind review.
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") You are welcome! ") Susan
Comment from jmdg1954
Excellent story Barbara. I kept waiting for some type of hammer to fall in a few places. Then when the breast cancer was reveale, I knew. Nicely done with great dialogue and descriptiveness.
Note : my why is a 10 year survivor, cancer, chemo and radiation. She was a trooper through it all and I sense the same from you. God bless...
John
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Excellent story Barbara. I kept waiting for some type of hammer to fall in a few places. Then when the breast cancer was reveale, I knew. Nicely done with great dialogue and descriptiveness.
Note : my why is a 10 year survivor, cancer, chemo and radiation. She was a trooper through it all and I sense the same from you. God bless...
John
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Thank you for the encouragment. I have my second chemo treatment Thursday.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Great story and I loved the dog. I am very much a dog person. Your characters are strong and the dialogue is excellent. Your writing brought out all the appropriate emotional responses. Good job and I'm glad you are feeling better.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Great story and I loved the dog. I am very much a dog person. Your characters are strong and the dialogue is excellent. Your writing brought out all the appropriate emotional responses. Good job and I'm glad you are feeling better.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
