Comment from seewhatimwritingnow

Excellent

LOL- I thought this was quite funny, and very well written- However I do not think the second (follow-up by company) letter was necessary- and you should have left that conclusion and suspicions up to the reader (which you made clear in the letter. Really enjoyed this. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2010

Hello, friend,

First - happy holidays! Wishing you the merriest holiday season.

I've chosen to write part two, because it is here that I have the quintessential part of the whole story. Without part two part one would be pale. This was my decision - call it poetic license, but this is how I saw it. So far, my readers did not complain. However, I do appreciate your feedback, because this is the workshop first and foremost, and honest feedback is highly appreciated.

Hugs, Y.

Comment from Keronica

Excellent

Fabulous! You blew me 'RIGHT OUTTA THE WATER' with this one! HA! What a riot! I do have a small suggestion for you though... Where it says "Your truly", it SHOULD be 'yours'< (with an 'S'.) Loved it! Great job and good luck!

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2010

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2010

Thank you so much for the great review. Glad you enjoyed it and found this amusing. Love and hugs, Yelena

Comment from highlander104

Excellent

Great entry for your contest. Employers dig into potential employees' dirty underwear, but heaven forbid if the prospect digs into theirs. It's so hard to investigate a potential employer -- then your're hired -- then it's too late. Good write. Fun twist.

One tiny nit here:

boxing champion for his [tome] town of Upper Saint Ducket. - I bet you meant "home" ...

Jean K.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2010

Thank you so much for your review! I am very much looking forward to your entry. Possibilities are endless here (smile); just have the ammunition of humor and imagery handy.

Comment from Pen&Ink

Excellent

Nice job on this one, yel. Very interesting. I guess it all depends on one's perspective. There are two sides to every issue, and two sides to every coin. Like you implied, "It all depends." Ray

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010

Thank you, Ray, for the great review. I appreciate it very much. Fond regards, Y.

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Evening Yelenta,

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story about corporate
America. You developed the story line well and saved a
wonderful surprise at the end. The last line of the story
is perfect! Loved it.

Thanks for sharing.
Ray

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010

Thank you, Ray, for the great review. This was a reference letter with a twist, for sure! Glad you enjoyed, and yes, I did prepare a surprise in the end (lol). Thanks again, hugs and love, Y.

Comment from Lois Delaney

Excellent

This was so good, Yelena. I thought about it as I read it. In the old days, the reference letter would have been one desired, but today, the rest of your story tells the rest. Corruption and lies to be found everywhere. Where will it end?

Great job! This really flung a jar open with worms. LOL

Hugs, Lois

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010

Thank you very much, Lois. I am glad you've got a kick of my humor here. Why don't you enter the contest? It is a slow pull so far.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Yelena, I like the reaction of the potential employers to this kid with his access to FBI computers and his nose for digging out the dirt - I'm not sure most companies would want that kind of person digging around their files. Makes one wonder if that's why the employer he has now is giving him such a glowing recommendation, because he's tired of having a conscience on the payroll. LOL Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010

Thank you, Brooke, for the great review. This was a reference letter with a twist, for sure! Glad you enjoyed, I needed the humor for this one. Hugs and love, Yelena

Comment from Realist101

Excellent

Hi Yelena! I love it! They all have a guilty conscience about something! HA. And this guy would probably look a bit like Barney Fife? You should continue this too. VERY interesting! Excellent entry too!! ") Love , Susan

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010

Thank you, dear Susan. Would you like to try your pen in this contest? I'd be happy if you did. The room for humor and imagery is boundless. And 1000 word limit. Please, consider - I have a very slow pull on this one.

Comment from winlaw writer

Excellent

This story has very good character description and references that leave the reader well informed about the whole situation and a fantastic ending that I really liked.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010

Thank you so much for the great review.

Comment from melbuy

Excellent

Oh oh, seems like this fine fellow is going to give them more than they bargained for. This reference letter seems to bring more questions for Mr Lynx + Beaver (lol)than answers for their upcoming job interview should they decide to take the chance.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2010

Thank you very much. Since you gave it a "4", I wonder what this piece would needed for a perfect rating. You got a kick out of Mr. Lynx + Beaver, didn't you? And how about Silverfox and Mink? (smiles)

reply by melbuy on 31-Oct-2010

You are right, and I missed Silverfox & Mink, and of course sable.
I really cant find anything wrong I should have given you a 5ver sorry.

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2010

You could still amend the rating if you'd like. If you go back into my poem, you would see you review; you could upgrade the rating then.