Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Chaptet 9; part two"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from FredCollingwood
Joe is such a nice guy. I'm glad he's there for Sara. Another wonderful addition to your book.
How are you feeling? My best thoughts continue for you.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Joe is such a nice guy. I'm glad he's there for Sara. Another wonderful addition to your book.
How are you feeling? My best thoughts continue for you.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from R. K. Alan
Lovely story progression. I liked the way Sara and Joe are working things out together. Child pornography is an awful scourge. That was a bit of a surprise. Now Joe is on the move again and she is alone. Hmm... not sure I like that. Ray aka Krylon
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Lovely story progression. I liked the way Sara and Joe are working things out together. Child pornography is an awful scourge. That was a bit of a surprise. Now Joe is on the move again and she is alone. Hmm... not sure I like that. Ray aka Krylon
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bowls
I'm sending you as much positive energy as I can summon up. I sincerely hope you stay strong in body and spirit. I'm amazed you are posting such wonderful chapters despite your illness. It must be difficult for you to attend to these things. I truly enjoyed this chapter, feeling such sympathy for Sara and concern for Cassie. I look forward to your next post. Hugs, Fausto
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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I'm sending you as much positive energy as I can summon up. I sincerely hope you stay strong in body and spirit. I'm amazed you are posting such wonderful chapters despite your illness. It must be difficult for you to attend to these things. I truly enjoyed this chapter, feeling such sympathy for Sara and concern for Cassie. I look forward to your next post. Hugs, Fausto
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. The novel is finished so all I have to do it edit before I post. I edit about 5 additional times.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
Thanks for the info in your author notes. We're thinking about you, and I'm sure you don't look forward to losing your hair. Just so the treatment works.
Tired or not, you've posted an excellent chapter. Sara is still confused and generally beaten down by being the small-town "example." Add Cassie's abduction to all that, and she would be wrought. I like the way the characters develop.
I enjoyed this read and have several suggestions:
"Is the reason the press hasn't hounded me, because [of] the Task Force's protection?" You could also say, "because the Task Force is shielding me."
"She shut the door after she entered." I think it'd be better to write, "She shut the door behind her."
""A knife was thrown my direction and grazed my arm." This is a bit passive. I'd write, "Somebody threw a knife at me, and it grazed my arm."
"I'm a graduate of West Point, {in the army,} and I'm a member of Task Force 385." I don't think Joe would say the words in braces. Everybody knows what West Point is.
Dave
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Barbara,
Thanks for the info in your author notes. We're thinking about you, and I'm sure you don't look forward to losing your hair. Just so the treatment works.
Tired or not, you've posted an excellent chapter. Sara is still confused and generally beaten down by being the small-town "example." Add Cassie's abduction to all that, and she would be wrought. I like the way the characters develop.
I enjoyed this read and have several suggestions:
"Is the reason the press hasn't hounded me, because [of] the Task Force's protection?" You could also say, "because the Task Force is shielding me."
"She shut the door after she entered." I think it'd be better to write, "She shut the door behind her."
""A knife was thrown my direction and grazed my arm." This is a bit passive. I'd write, "Somebody threw a knife at me, and it grazed my arm."
"I'm a graduate of West Point, {in the army,} and I'm a member of Task Force 385." I don't think Joe would say the words in braces. Everybody knows what West Point is.
Dave
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Thank you for the suggestions. I always appreciate your eagle eye. I will make those changes.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written and another chapter to your book. i hope cassie is rescued before the creeps take any pictures. i pray that you get to feeling better and chemo will go smooth and your hair won't fall out
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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this is very well written and another chapter to your book. i hope cassie is rescued before the creeps take any pictures. i pray that you get to feeling better and chemo will go smooth and your hair won't fall out
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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My doctor words were, "you will lose your hair." I am going to do the scarves and hats. I have already prepared for it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Another good chapter. No typos. Read well. And I am looking forward to the next chapter. If I remember right Joe has never hurt Sara, but in her past another man was violent.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Another good chapter. No typos. Read well. And I am looking forward to the next chapter. If I remember right Joe has never hurt Sara, but in her past another man was violent.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Sara has had some bad experiences with men. Joe is an angel. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Very well written crime and drama. It is always hard to start in the middle of a book, but this one was easy to get into despite that. Good, descriptive language. Enjoyably written. Good luck with the rest of the book and with your health concerns.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Very well written crime and drama. It is always hard to start in the middle of a book, but this one was easy to get into despite that. Good, descriptive language. Enjoyably written. Good luck with the rest of the book and with your health concerns.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from KayteeF
I am totally with Sara and Joe at this time in their relationship. The pace is really hotting up again. I wonder if Joe hinted about the mishmash of colors, as a thought for Sara to work at. Could someone suggest to her that she might like to have it finished for when Cassie get home? Just a thought.
Dearest Barbara, my heart goes out to you. I hope the tiredness is the worst of your suffering. Please God that you are able to be strong through this time. Thank you for keeping us up to date on how you are. I have no doubt that your FS friends are all praying for you.
God Bless and Goodnight for now. Cathleen
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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I am totally with Sara and Joe at this time in their relationship. The pace is really hotting up again. I wonder if Joe hinted about the mishmash of colors, as a thought for Sara to work at. Could someone suggest to her that she might like to have it finished for when Cassie get home? Just a thought.
Dearest Barbara, my heart goes out to you. I hope the tiredness is the worst of your suffering. Please God that you are able to be strong through this time. Thank you for keeping us up to date on how you are. I have no doubt that your FS friends are all praying for you.
God Bless and Goodnight for now. Cathleen
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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I will let you in on a secret. Sara does get her living room painted in the next chapter. Thank you for your kind thoughts.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I think bald women are beautiful. I myself think bald men are sexy. I was a big Telly Savalis fan and let's not forget Sean Connery. Both hot men who are bald. Wear a bandanna and you'll be a cool chick. Your story is moving along. Sara learned the hard way to trust what the bad guys told them. Your dialogue is so natural. I love the name Joe called Sara "Munchkin." There is one line where I'm concerned for Cassie's safety: "I can't tell her the evidence led us to believe Cassie was abducted to use in child pornography videos. Dani's working overtime to find the headquarters of this pornography ring." She was taken by a pornography ring. How terrible. I saw not nits in this chapter. I'm praying for your strength, my friend. I also gave this chapter a pump. I look forward to reading more. I'm sending you a virtual hug. Love and kisses...Melissa!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Barbara,
I think bald women are beautiful. I myself think bald men are sexy. I was a big Telly Savalis fan and let's not forget Sean Connery. Both hot men who are bald. Wear a bandanna and you'll be a cool chick. Your story is moving along. Sara learned the hard way to trust what the bad guys told them. Your dialogue is so natural. I love the name Joe called Sara "Munchkin." There is one line where I'm concerned for Cassie's safety: "I can't tell her the evidence led us to believe Cassie was abducted to use in child pornography videos. Dani's working overtime to find the headquarters of this pornography ring." She was taken by a pornography ring. How terrible. I saw not nits in this chapter. I'm praying for your strength, my friend. I also gave this chapter a pump. I look forward to reading more. I'm sending you a virtual hug. Love and kisses...Melissa!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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I am going to do the scraves. I have them all ready in all colors. Thank you for your review and support.
Comment from adewpearl
Heck, you didn't look all that great in hair anyway. LOL I love you, Barbara. Hang in there. This is an excellent chapter, filled with emotion, action, danger, intrigue. I'm sending you such hugs, my friend :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Heck, you didn't look all that great in hair anyway. LOL I love you, Barbara. Hang in there. This is an excellent chapter, filled with emotion, action, danger, intrigue. I'm sending you such hugs, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your humor. I have heard hair can come back a different color. How do you think I would look as a blonde?
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Blonde could be stunning, but then again, sassy redhead, sultry brunette - the possibilities are endless. And hey, some of those high fashion models rock the bald look!! :-)
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I have a sassy redheaded granddaughter. Maybe we could be twins.
