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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from KayteeF
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Hi Barbara,
I feel the power of emotion really strongly in this chapter. Sara seems really taut with feeling, shown by her distress about choosing something as simple as the color of paint for her lounge.
You have the reader on tenterhooks wondering what is happening, yet some how having the reassurance that it will work out in the end.
Just a wee mistype I believe:
*Dani laughed, It's happens to me often.
Should 'it's just be 'it'?
Does not affect the atmosphere of the story.
My hopes and prayers are with you this Thursday. That the treatment will be effective and not too distressing for you.
Thinking of you and yours.
Cathleen

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Thank you for catching that. As often as I read it, I still make mistakes. I appreciate your thoughts and prayers on Thursday.
Comment from Nanashirley
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It is a good chapter and I like the way you added the painting to ease some of the tension. The characters are growing well and I wish I had a George sometimes.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    I ythink we all wish we had a George. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from L.lora
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You've given us another
excellent addition as only
you can do with your unigue
story writing, wonderful discriptions
and above par dialogues. A most enjoyable
read with no nits or spags. Remember,
all of us will have you in our thoughts
as you undergo your chemo thursday, and
I will keep you close in prayer my friend.
hugs, Lora

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. I am sure the chemo therapy room will be crowded, but I will need all of your support.
Comment from RKagan
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Another great chapter, but more importantly I read your author notes and I am praying for you. I will think about you on Thursday. I know so many people on here care about you and we will all be supporting you. God Bless you.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your thoughts and prayers.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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I am sure that everyone of us will have you in our hearts and minds on the 28th. Chemo has improved so much over the years that some people don't have the side effects that use to happen all the time. Kkeep the faith girl and I am with you in spirit. I can even harass you about more chapters if you think that will make you feel better :)
Shirley

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. I know this chemo room is small, but all I friends will be there to help. Thank you.
Comment from marcellawachtel
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The chemo you are facing is not the chemo you have been reading about, the dreadful bouts of nausea, etc. The reactions are much milder nowadays;and medications to overcome any bad symptoms. You might loose your hair, but the good news is that you will grow it back thicker than it was before.
This chapter was awfully sad- I wish they'd find that little girl. I admire the strength of character that lets painting be a project in the midst of the anxiety.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review and thoughts. My chemo oncologist prescribed a pill to take an hour before chemo for the nausea. Six pills cost $807.99. My portion was only $9.00, not everybody can afford that. That's $134.67 per pill.
reply by marcellawachtel on 24-Oct-2010
    Astonishing! how do people who are not employed or who have low-paying jobs handle this? It is almost criminal that these drugs are not available to each and every chemo patient. When it coms to quality of life remedies, the pharmaceutical companies can afford to give a little back. Surely you have asked if there is a generic version of this medicine. I took something called Paramin or Pramine that helped. I don't think it cost much, but we have a sort of socialized medicine here so I'm not sure. I send you much love and many thought for your quick recovery. Marcella
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    I have been shocked by this. A lady I work with went through the same ordeal three years ago and her insurance isn't as good as mine and couldn't afford the pills, not the same, but still very expensive. Her doctor gave her some of his trial medicine.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
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Another interesting chapter. I like the fact Sarah paints to take her mind off the situation it adds depth to her character. Some people choose to re arrange their furniture, some spring clean, Sarah paints :-)

I noticed a couple of small typo's

[dark gray,] I'm not 100% sure but i think you need a hyphen in there

but he always stays (un) control - in?

I'm sure he can see it in your face or feel it in (you) your? touch.

Good luck with the chemo x

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Someone else had caught the un for in, but nobody had caught the you for the your. I appreciate your help and thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Begin Again
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Barbara,

You know that my thoughts and prayers are always with you and I have faith that all will go okay. When you step into the room for your chemo just remember that so many people who love you are crowding the room by your side.

As for the story...I think the characters are some of your best...You really are drawing their inner most feelings out and expressing them so well. I am definitely enjoying the story. Great job.

Smiles and only good thoughts...Carol

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review and your support. I really appreciate knowing all my FS friends are with me during this.
Comment from lola29
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Sara is holding very well considering the circumstances. I'm glad George is with her and helping her to stay composed by allowing her to paint. This was a very good chapter.
he always stays (in) control

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Thank you for catching that. The u and the i are very close on the keyboard. I appreciat your review and support.
Comment from DionysusDeVille
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very gripping and spellbinding. Makes me really want to get into the previous chapters so i can get the scoop on the whole story. I really enjoyed the read

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.