Another Pretty Face
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Comment from G. Eleck
I must admit that I had not read any of the chapters leading up to this one so this morning I sat down and read through them all and I must say that the story line so far is fantastic.
Bravo to you for some great writing and thank you to you for a great read...
Thanx G :)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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I must admit that I had not read any of the chapters leading up to this one so this morning I sat down and read through them all and I must say that the story line so far is fantastic.
Bravo to you for some great writing and thank you to you for a great read...
Thanx G :)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Thnak you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Jonez08
Too bad they didn't get any information before killing the guys, but that keeps the tension going. I look forward to the next chapter.
"GEORGE!" She sat on the floor.
--You have an exclamation point, I don't think caps are needed
"This wall will look good in 'Peppermint Vinca'."
(lol..the house will be quite colorful soon)
Cassandra
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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Too bad they didn't get any information before killing the guys, but that keeps the tension going. I look forward to the next chapter.
"GEORGE!" She sat on the floor.
--You have an exclamation point, I don't think caps are needed
"This wall will look good in 'Peppermint Vinca'."
(lol..the house will be quite colorful soon)
Cassandra
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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I have played with GEORGE and wondered how to get the true effect I wanted. I will remove the capitals. Thank you.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Got a chuckle here: "I said some things I shouldn't have, but Joe stayed professional." "It's frustrating when the men do that, isn't it?" LOL!!!
Loved this: My living room's three different colors and I don't know what color I want it to be. ;p
Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Got a chuckle here: "I said some things I shouldn't have, but Joe stayed professional." "It's frustrating when the men do that, isn't it?" LOL!!!
Loved this: My living room's three different colors and I don't know what color I want it to be. ;p
Well done!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Gena_Marie13
This is a very interesting chapter, as it is the first chapter that i have read, I will definitely go back and read from one! Very good so far.
Good luck with your treatments as well i have a cousin going through the same thing right now. I will be praying for you.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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This is a very interesting chapter, as it is the first chapter that i have read, I will definitely go back and read from one! Very good so far.
Good luck with your treatments as well i have a cousin going through the same thing right now. I will be praying for you.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Nicnac
Nice Chapter, Barbara. I like how Sara is so indecisive about the paint color. She has so many things on her mind, so it is understandable that she has trouble concentrating and making decisions.
The ending statement had a bit of a humorous feel, to relieve the reader (and Sara) of the heavy load she is trying to cope with. Good job.
I like George. He is such an understanding friend. He has the patience of Job! LOL
The scene with the bloody shirt was good. Sara can be a brat at times. I never did like it when someone stormed off to avoid conflict or a conversation. Sometimes I want to shake her and make her see that Joe is a good guy who is trying his best. LOL (That's good that you can play with the readers mind like that.)
Suggestions:
When we first discussed painting this room(,) you said you liked blue.
This wall will look good in 'Peppermint Vinca'. (I don't think the single quotes are necessary. They cause the reader to pause somewhat to say the color, and breaks the flow of the sentence.)
Barbara, You know I have been praying for you and will continue to do so. I can only imagine how nervous you must be this first week of treatments. I'll be there in spirit, holding your hand and giving you a shoulder to rest your worries on. You are strong and special and can handle whatever comes your way.
Much love and many prayers, my friend.
Nic
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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Nice Chapter, Barbara. I like how Sara is so indecisive about the paint color. She has so many things on her mind, so it is understandable that she has trouble concentrating and making decisions.
The ending statement had a bit of a humorous feel, to relieve the reader (and Sara) of the heavy load she is trying to cope with. Good job.
I like George. He is such an understanding friend. He has the patience of Job! LOL
The scene with the bloody shirt was good. Sara can be a brat at times. I never did like it when someone stormed off to avoid conflict or a conversation. Sometimes I want to shake her and make her see that Joe is a good guy who is trying his best. LOL (That's good that you can play with the readers mind like that.)
Suggestions:
When we first discussed painting this room(,) you said you liked blue.
This wall will look good in 'Peppermint Vinca'. (I don't think the single quotes are necessary. They cause the reader to pause somewhat to say the color, and breaks the flow of the sentence.)
Barbara, You know I have been praying for you and will continue to do so. I can only imagine how nervous you must be this first week of treatments. I'll be there in spirit, holding your hand and giving you a shoulder to rest your worries on. You are strong and special and can handle whatever comes your way.
Much love and many prayers, my friend.
Nic
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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Nic, thank you for your prayers. I appreciate your eagle eye and will make the corrections.
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You're welcome.
You're on my mind and in my prayers today.
Comment from patmedium
I have made a note of your chemo date, dear ... what time for you, so I can calculate?
This is very sympathetically written, as usual, dear Barbara. Top marks to you for not 'losing the plot'! Pat. xxx
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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I have made a note of your chemo date, dear ... what time for you, so I can calculate?
This is very sympathetically written, as usual, dear Barbara. Top marks to you for not 'losing the plot'! Pat. xxx
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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It will start at 1:00 TX time, which is central. I am doing my best to stay calm. I will need to lean on some of your strength.
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Exactly at the time we say our prayers when opening the group meeting tomorrow night. Good. xxx
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Perfect timeing.
Comment from patwannabe
We're with you, Barbara. Try to remember, this, too, will pass. Take it one day, one step at a time. Serious? Of course. Can we do this? Of course. Our Lord will hold your hand. pat
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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We're with you, Barbara. Try to remember, this, too, will pass. Take it one day, one step at a time. Serious? Of course. Can we do this? Of course. Our Lord will hold your hand. pat
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your encouraging words. I will be leaning on my friends for strength.
Comment from bookishfabler
I am always praying for you. Hang in tight and get some rest. It will knock you on your bum.
Great chapter.nice tension.
Joe walked to the front sidewalk, then came back(-,) and knocked on Sara's bedroom door.
the only nit I saw.
Great job
hugs book
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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I am always praying for you. Hang in tight and get some rest. It will knock you on your bum.
Great chapter.nice tension.
Joe walked to the front sidewalk, then came back(-,) and knocked on Sara's bedroom door.
the only nit I saw.
Great job
hugs book
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and prayers. I appreciate both.
Comment from Ponder
Hi Barabara,
I see you haven't allowed the naysayers to put you off the painting theme Good for you!
I liked this linking chapter, it has a good flow and shows the mood of the characters quite well - especially Sara. I particularly liked the opening scene with the bathroom. Roll on the next one.
Best of luck on Thursday :)
Jules
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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Hi Barabara,
I see you haven't allowed the naysayers to put you off the painting theme Good for you!
I liked this linking chapter, it has a good flow and shows the mood of the characters quite well - especially Sara. I particularly liked the opening scene with the bathroom. Roll on the next one.
Best of luck on Thursday :)
Jules
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your comments, I really appreciate them. A reviewer didn't like the bathroom scene.
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Can't please em all!
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning Barbara,
I think this is the first chapter in your book that I've
read, but I must tell you, I'm hooked. I'm going back
to start at 1 and work my way forward.
The pace of this chapter was fast and focused. I could
feel the tension and mood as the plot unfolded. The writing
is excellent and I found no SPAGS.
Well penned,
Ray
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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Good Morning Barbara,
I think this is the first chapter in your book that I've
read, but I must tell you, I'm hooked. I'm going back
to start at 1 and work my way forward.
The pace of this chapter was fast and focused. I could
feel the tension and mood as the plot unfolded. The writing
is excellent and I found no SPAGS.
Well penned,
Ray
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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I appreciate your kind review.
