Comment from Max Edon

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this chapter even though I haven't read the previous chapters. This was interesting and realistic. How did Shemya become deaf?

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010

The first chapter tells of Shemya getting hit in his dog house by a drunk snow machine driver. Thanks for your comments and review. Marie

reply by Max Edon on 25-Oct-2010

You are welcome!

Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

Hi, Alaskastory.

This looks like an interesting story. I would probably like it even better if I had started to read from the beginning and had read through to this chapter. I like reading stories with animals in them. I felt sorry when I read how these dogs were hurt. It was nice to read that they will heal.

April

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2010

Thanks for your comments and review.

Comment from dragonpoet

Good

This is a story of friendship that will probably grow into love between James and Brooke. Strong character development and images of the race and the moose attack.

I see some possible errors. You don't need "run" in the sentence 'it sends a warm sensation run through...
you can maybe use with his usual athletic way,
His handsome smile makes... and stay for that instead for stay or that.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

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 Comment Written 23-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2010

I love it when a reviewer actually spots my errors. Thanks a million, dragonpoet.

reply by dragonpoet on 24-Oct-2010

You're welcome. I always need editing help, too.

dragonpoet

reply by dragonpoet on 24-Oct-2010

You're welcome. I always need editing help, too.

dragonpoet

Comment from sk42rn

Excellent

This is a great story and you seem to feel a lot of passion in writing it. I wish you the best as you move toward completion and I hope to read more. I have not suggestions for this work. You may have already edited it, but I noticed a couple of sentences where words seemed to be missing to make them complete.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2010

Thanks for your comments and review.

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

Alaskastory,

I find this story to be very interesting and enjoy the interaction of the main characters. What a dog! Very nicley done.

Duane

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2010

Thanks for your comments and review.

Comment from Heidixoxo

Excellent

This is an outstanding chapter to a very good story. I still need to read a few more of the chapters to catch all the way up. So far, I am very interested in your writing about Alaska. I have heard that it's beyond beautiful there and you're special for sharing it with us. Job well done........xoxo

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 Comment Written 23-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2010

Thanks for your comments and review.