Whispers in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Off to Fairbanks --by BROOK ANNE"Brook's best lead dog is struck deaf
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I enjoyed reading this chapter although I haven't read the previous ones. I did get a bit confused with the style of first person from two characters; but I guess if reading the story from the beginning that wouldn't happen. Alaska is a fascinating place for us hot climate dwellers!
Giddy
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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I enjoyed reading this chapter although I haven't read the previous ones. I did get a bit confused with the style of first person from two characters; but I guess if reading the story from the beginning that wouldn't happen. Alaska is a fascinating place for us hot climate dwellers!
Giddy
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thanks, Giddy, for your comments and taking the time to review this chapter.
Comment from MissMerri
This is so good! Things are really getting interesting and I'm always left looking forward to the next chapter with high anticipation.
I didn't find much here to change. The only line that puzzled me was this one: "Surely you can stay or that." (very near the end) I don't know what you meant to say here, but this doesn't seem right. Please help me out. :p
This is a wonderful story, and the budding interest between the two racers is only adding to the intrigue. What a nice gesture on the part of Brooke to offer two dogs to her friend, so he can stay in the race. How could he not love a girl like that? I love your writing, Miss A.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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This is so good! Things are really getting interesting and I'm always left looking forward to the next chapter with high anticipation.
I didn't find much here to change. The only line that puzzled me was this one: "Surely you can stay or that." (very near the end) I don't know what you meant to say here, but this doesn't seem right. Please help me out. :p
This is a wonderful story, and the budding interest between the two racers is only adding to the intrigue. What a nice gesture on the part of Brooke to offer two dogs to her friend, so he can stay in the race. How could he not love a girl like that? I love your writing, Miss A.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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You caught a typo I never saw -- truly, you amaze me. Correct is: "Surely you can stay for that." Thanks a million for spying that!! You are such a great help, MissM.
Comment from RKagan
The bond between James and his dogs is a strong one. I didn't know Moose attacked sled dogs. Are they aggressive? This is a facinating piece, it took me into a world I knew nothing about. Your descriptions made it very realistic. good job.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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The bond between James and his dogs is a strong one. I didn't know Moose attacked sled dogs. Are they aggressive? This is a facinating piece, it took me into a world I knew nothing about. Your descriptions made it very realistic. good job.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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Moose are not usually harmful unless they get harassed or try to protect their young (that was the case this time). Thanks for your comments and review. Marie
Comment from sibhus
This was a very interesting chapter to your book. I was especiallly intrigued by you descriptions of the sled dogs. I enjoyed the easy flow of your writng and you characters who all seem very life-like with dialogue that is also very believable. I read this chapter to my three Siberian Huskies who were laying around on the floor. Unfortunately the couch potatoes didn't seem to impressed with the idea of sledding. Great chapter and I'm going to check out the others as well.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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This was a very interesting chapter to your book. I was especiallly intrigued by you descriptions of the sled dogs. I enjoyed the easy flow of your writng and you characters who all seem very life-like with dialogue that is also very believable. I read this chapter to my three Siberian Huskies who were laying around on the floor. Unfortunately the couch potatoes didn't seem to impressed with the idea of sledding. Great chapter and I'm going to check out the others as well.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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I'm happy you enjoyed this -- even if your huskies didn't. Thanks so much for your fun comments and the review. Marie
Comment from FredCollingwood
Tha Shema is some dog ... saved her from a bear and then a moose. She must have smelled the threatening animals. Very exciting story.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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Tha Shema is some dog ... saved her from a bear and then a moose. She must have smelled the threatening animals. Very exciting story.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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Thanks so much for your comments and review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Very entertaining story. I have gone back and read the chapters from the beginning. You have done a great job and i look forward to reading more. I will be making you a fan. Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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Very entertaining story. I have gone back and read the chapters from the beginning. You have done a great job and i look forward to reading more. I will be making you a fan. Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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I'm so impressed that you've bothered with the past chapters. Thanks for your comments and I'm delighted that you will follow this story. Marie
Comment from c_lucas
Dogs have no conditions relating to their love. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Very good job.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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Dogs have no conditions relating to their love. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Very good job.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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Thanks so much for your comments and for reviewing this chapter. Marie
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You're welcome, Marie. Charlie
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You're welcome, Marie. Charlie
Comment from Gungalo
Sounds like a wonderful story and I came into the middle of it so I'm going to make an effort to go back to catch up on thins. You write with an easy flair and an eye to reality.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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Sounds like a wonderful story and I came into the middle of it so I'm going to make an effort to go back to catch up on thins. You write with an easy flair and an eye to reality.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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I appreciate your interest. Thanks for the comments and review.
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My pleasure!!!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this chapter. thank you for the synopsis of the others since i haven't read them yet.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this chapter. thank you for the synopsis of the others since i haven't read them yet.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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I appreciate your interest. Thanks for the comments and review.
Comment from jadapenn
Wow,to write in first person in present tense seems a difficult task. I loved this Marie. One can feel the vibes between the two characters. I can't remember reading any of you other chapters but I enjoyed this one.
Well told.
My fingers wipe swiftly cheeks and I choke out(I think this sentence is missing a word) See what you think. luv jada
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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Wow,to write in first person in present tense seems a difficult task. I loved this Marie. One can feel the vibes between the two characters. I can't remember reading any of you other chapters but I enjoyed this one.
Well told.
My fingers wipe swiftly cheeks and I choke out(I think this sentence is missing a word) See what you think. luv jada
Comment Written 24-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
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Thanks a million for catching 'swiftly cheeks'. I'll fix that. Your right about present tense/first person -- I constantly make errors to correct. I'm happy to know you enjoyed this a bit, Jada. Marie
