The Rape
Dark Sonnet - after reading William Butler Yeats153 total reviews
Comment from Justin Chopin
Wow, Gungalo that was both really sad and really powerful at the same time. It reminded me of what Jack the ripper would do to people just take them out into the streets of London and waste them of their dignity and murder them. The descriptions you used were very vivid and i could actually picture this Beelzebub of a human being grabbing this woman by the breast and deflowering her which in itself is a very scary thing to think about since no human being should ever have the experience of having their very decency violated. Great job with the poetry.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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Wow, Gungalo that was both really sad and really powerful at the same time. It reminded me of what Jack the ripper would do to people just take them out into the streets of London and waste them of their dignity and murder them. The descriptions you used were very vivid and i could actually picture this Beelzebub of a human being grabbing this woman by the breast and deflowering her which in itself is a very scary thing to think about since no human being should ever have the experience of having their very decency violated. Great job with the poetry.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much Boz. Wrote this one to raise awareness of the problem, not that most of us don't know.But, most of us women forget and are not as cautious as we ought to be. Your review of this one is amazing!!! Thank you!!!
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you're welcome.
Comment from CrazyPoet08
Hey, girly! Yes, it sadly does happen wayyyyyy too often, and it's a life-long pain...always re-living it...I know... Well written though. Made me cringe in remembrance.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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Hey, girly! Yes, it sadly does happen wayyyyyy too often, and it's a life-long pain...always re-living it...I know... Well written though. Made me cringe in remembrance.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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Oh baby girl, I so love you!!! Not to worry ever again. I appreciate you reviewing this one and you have floored me with an awesome surprise!!!!
Comment from Sidnitra C. Howard
This piece is evidence of your rank and position as a poet. The emotion of it overwhelms my spirit. I am deeply moved. Very effective!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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This piece is evidence of your rank and position as a poet. The emotion of it overwhelms my spirit. I am deeply moved. Very effective!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Thank you for a wonderful review of this one. The subject is raw but one that needs remembering!!!
Comment from jsantoemmajr
Outstanding! Truly frightening and disturbing. Bothered me to read it, but I suspect, that was the intention. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2011
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Outstanding! Truly frightening and disturbing. Bothered me to read it, but I suspect, that was the intention. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2011
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Thanks you. Partly so for the awareness of the crime. Yes. Thank you for reading it today!!!
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
The sickness of the evil deed, power & control over another, is the worst kind of offense imaginable, short of slavery, kidnapping, and murder which in some sense are all included in rape.
To think that another human being can be so callous and arrogant to see one as beneath them in thought, mind, & spirit is the height of mortal sin.
This poem vividly & brilliantly culminates the above sentiments in the last two lines.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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The sickness of the evil deed, power & control over another, is the worst kind of offense imaginable, short of slavery, kidnapping, and murder which in some sense are all included in rape.
To think that another human being can be so callous and arrogant to see one as beneath them in thought, mind, & spirit is the height of mortal sin.
This poem vividly & brilliantly culminates the above sentiments in the last two lines.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much girl. It was written in awareness to such a heinous crime.
Comment from JoAnna77
This is a stunning and shocking poem - you have captured the horror of this crime with great emotion and accuracy. You deserve to have won this contest.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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This is a stunning and shocking poem - you have captured the horror of this crime with great emotion and accuracy. You deserve to have won this contest.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Thanks so very much JoAnna. Something that just needed to be written!!!
Comment from Nelks
Just read your powerful poem. Don't know if "loved" it is the right word, but it had an effect on me, the phrasing made my blood run cold, which was it's intention and it succeeded admirably. Cannot criticise as the poem is perfect in my eyes.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Just read your powerful poem. Don't know if "loved" it is the right word, but it had an effect on me, the phrasing made my blood run cold, which was it's intention and it succeeded admirably. Cannot criticise as the poem is perfect in my eyes.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Thank you Nelks and that too seems perhaps not the right wording but yes this was done for awareness to the problem. Your words let me know you are aware and we have to always be careful and on guard!!!
Comment from Akarva
I liked this poem since this is a true incident happening in some girl or woman's life. The poet portrays the exact feelings of the victim of rape and the aftermath in her life. A must read....
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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I liked this poem since this is a true incident happening in some girl or woman's life. The poet portrays the exact feelings of the victim of rape and the aftermath in her life. A must read....
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for the awareness of this is important to all of us. So glad you read this one!!!
Comment from joelh605
Should have been six, but I grade harder [grin]. It is a joy in my heart to find that a real poem has made the grade [don't get me started, let's be civil] so my congratulations to you for your win are more than just face value.
CONGRATULATIONS!
I see a refined understanding of the form coupled to great finesse with rhyme and meter.
That said, this pulled away the 6th star: if her breasts are where the rapist has easy access, how is her face in the dirt? Yeah, tawdry and cheap to let mechanics argue with art . . . but you keep doing what you do!!
Joel
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Should have been six, but I grade harder [grin]. It is a joy in my heart to find that a real poem has made the grade [don't get me started, let's be civil] so my congratulations to you for your win are more than just face value.
CONGRATULATIONS!
I see a refined understanding of the form coupled to great finesse with rhyme and meter.
That said, this pulled away the 6th star: if her breasts are where the rapist has easy access, how is her face in the dirt? Yeah, tawdry and cheap to let mechanics argue with art . . . but you keep doing what you do!!
Joel
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Read again sweet poet, she is being raped from behind. Guess that would make her breasts easily accessible to the rapist, eh? LOL. But I do love your review and thank you for reading!!!!
Comment from jamesfrancis
raw! I think that the poem could be made a little longer though around the middle. I mean, I understand the the sheer brutality of it is enough but at the same time surely the ordeal she endures must be dragged out a little to grate on the reader. I have written poems which touch upon this topic and you either go all the way and really get all the grittiness out or you punch it in in passing and it sounds even worse as you are not respecting the seriousness of it.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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raw! I think that the poem could be made a little longer though around the middle. I mean, I understand the the sheer brutality of it is enough but at the same time surely the ordeal she endures must be dragged out a little to grate on the reader. I have written poems which touch upon this topic and you either go all the way and really get all the grittiness out or you punch it in in passing and it sounds even worse as you are not respecting the seriousness of it.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Considering the confining style, a sonnet, this is perfect in my estimation. Thanks for your review and expert opinion in the matter of handling a rape poem!!!!
