The Rape
Dark Sonnet - after reading William Butler Yeats153 total reviews
Comment from RebelRose
Very dismal and sad subject matter, really kind of trite in this day and time, not very original. However,it does have a good rhyming scheme and flow.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Very dismal and sad subject matter, really kind of trite in this day and time, not very original. However,it does have a good rhyming scheme and flow.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Why thank you. When rape becomes trite, let me know okay?
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I didn't mean that rape was trite but it has been written about so many times in so many ways, that the subject of it is rather trite. Rape is anything but trite.
Comment from christian_b
Hello there. Thank you for a lovely poem. I say it is lovely even though it deals with a horrable subject matter because it is the compersision of the poem that is lovely. Thank you for such a good poem.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Hello there. Thank you for a lovely poem. I say it is lovely even though it deals with a horrable subject matter because it is the compersision of the poem that is lovely. Thank you for such a good poem.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Thanks so much Christian. Have a wonderful day!!!
Comment from songlines
A well written piece on a terrible subject. Yes, sadly this happens a lot and heaven preseve us all. Good luck in the competition
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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A well written piece on a terrible subject. Yes, sadly this happens a lot and heaven preseve us all. Good luck in the competition
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Thanks so very much poet!
Comment from tsvi akiva
sadly
Indeed
though not likely it
be told
so boldly
poetically
nothin
is
beyond
the borderless
range of
your fine
talent
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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sadly
Indeed
though not likely it
be told
so boldly
poetically
nothin
is
beyond
the borderless
range of
your fine
talent
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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my thanks
to a master
in his own
writes
seems
my darkness
your
light
and still
your
words
understand
the
need
to write
it
all
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful poem and so sad about the rape that takes place all over the world, i think this has an excellent chance of winning the poem of the month. good imagery presented in your words--well, not good but you know what i mean. congratulations for your nomination
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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this is a beautiful poem and so sad about the rape that takes place all over the world, i think this has an excellent chance of winning the poem of the month. good imagery presented in your words--well, not good but you know what i mean. congratulations for your nomination
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much. Now tell me, how did I get nominated? I was so surprised and at the poem that was picked!!!
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they just pick some of the well received poems of the month and then the fanstorians vote on them. i've never had one put in the contest of the month. i'm green with envy--just kidding.
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Really? Well now I'm totally surprised then. And hard to believe you haven't for you write some beautiful poetry, girl!!!
Comment from Ntorious
Well writtwn. The picture expresses 1000 words. Very visual, The verbiage used hooks the reader from beginning to end.
The words burst on the page with emotion and you make the reader feel like they are there.
You did and excelent job.
The title definitely grabbed my attention.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Well writtwn. The picture expresses 1000 words. Very visual, The verbiage used hooks the reader from beginning to end.
The words burst on the page with emotion and you make the reader feel like they are there.
You did and excelent job.
The title definitely grabbed my attention.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Thanks you. HOpe it grabs enough to make a difference.
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well right now you have 7 votes and someone has 8 with it's just not right.
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Oh yeah? I better go look and see eh? Thanks you and sleep well. Gnight.
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you too.
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you too.
Comment from owarfield
What a poem! That would have been the perfect alley, without the people. I grew up in the city and there were times when you'd have to go through something like that but thank goodness, never that long, for me. It was scary though. What we'd do is run through as fast as we could. I was lucky. Wouldn't do it today. I don't go anywhere alone. When you're young....Didn't mean to rant. You brought back some memories. Good work. Nice flow too.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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What a poem! That would have been the perfect alley, without the people. I grew up in the city and there were times when you'd have to go through something like that but thank goodness, never that long, for me. It was scary though. What we'd do is run through as fast as we could. I was lucky. Wouldn't do it today. I don't go anywhere alone. When you're young....Didn't mean to rant. You brought back some memories. Good work. Nice flow too.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much, poet. Your review is wonderful and your advice shows great wisdom!!!!
Comment from daymanrayne
This is going to sound disturbing but I actually wanted more detail of the victim. Especially during the rape because if it was more personable then it could be have that much more impact
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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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This is going to sound disturbing but I actually wanted more detail of the victim. Especially during the rape because if it was more personable then it could be have that much more impact
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Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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No, actually what is disturbing is the way you grade poetry on what is not there that you think should be. LOL. Thanks poet for your time spent with this review.
Comment from Maustin
Gungalo, very powerful piece. It is a vivid read of a crime that dates back to the ancient times to today all over the world, as you shared. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Gungalo, very powerful piece. It is a vivid read of a crime that dates back to the ancient times to today all over the world, as you shared. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thank you so very much for your great review, poet!!!!
Comment from amada
Wow! my friend. Well deserved selection for one of the best of the month. I like the easy rhyming of the words, so in opposite to the harsh theme of the work.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Wow! my friend. Well deserved selection for one of the best of the month. I like the easy rhyming of the words, so in opposite to the harsh theme of the work.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Don't think there's a lot of words happening during a rape, nevermind any of consequence. Thank you for a great review!!!
