Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Chapter 8; part two"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
George needs the Medal of Honour painting, repainting and re-organising that room...
Nicely done chapter, the leads are credible and the action pace just right.
Patrick
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Hi Barbara,
George needs the Medal of Honour painting, repainting and re-organising that room...
Nicely done chapter, the leads are credible and the action pace just right.
Patrick
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. It's get's worse for poor George, but he did get broken in with Dani in my first novel.
Comment from R. K. Alan
Nice story progression. I liked the banter about the paint. Smart idea getting her mind off things. Nice hook at then end. Maybe they are on to something/someone. Ray aka Krylon
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Nice story progression. I liked the banter about the paint. Smart idea getting her mind off things. Nice hook at then end. Maybe they are on to something/someone. Ray aka Krylon
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Readywriter52
George is trying to distract Sara by painting. It helps to keep busy in times of stress. Cassie is missing and there don't seem to be many clues as to her where about.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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George is trying to distract Sara by painting. It helps to keep busy in times of stress. Cassie is missing and there don't seem to be many clues as to her where about.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from fairy77
Barbara your an amazing writter.I am sorry about your glasses.Your description inspires, as does your love for words.Very good plot lots happening ,held my attention.Can't wait for the next chapter.Keep writing.Beth.I have to give you 6 stars.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Barbara your an amazing writter.I am sorry about your glasses.Your description inspires, as does your love for words.Very good plot lots happening ,held my attention.Can't wait for the next chapter.Keep writing.Beth.I have to give you 6 stars.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Meshe Nair
Another well written part 2 chapter. I seem to want to read more. Reads and flows well.
A suggestion if you would like to use.
I wondered if Sara will = I think it should be "I wonder if Sara will..."
Good read.
Meshe Nair
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Another well written part 2 chapter. I seem to want to read more. Reads and flows well.
A suggestion if you would like to use.
I wondered if Sara will = I think it should be "I wonder if Sara will..."
Good read.
Meshe Nair
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Nicnac
Poor Sara is trying to stay busy painting, since she feels so helpless to do anything else. :(
Good flow to the chapter. I could picture Joe with his hand on the door knob, thinking about his special moments with Sara and wanting things to return to normal.
I can't wait to find out what is going on. Great hook at the end!
Poor Barbara! It must be frustrating to be without your glasses. I hope you get them, and your computer, SOON.
Nic
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Poor Sara is trying to stay busy painting, since she feels so helpless to do anything else. :(
Good flow to the chapter. I could picture Joe with his hand on the door knob, thinking about his special moments with Sara and wanting things to return to normal.
I can't wait to find out what is going on. Great hook at the end!
Poor Barbara! It must be frustrating to be without your glasses. I hope you get them, and your computer, SOON.
Nic
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Nothing came in today. So I am still the same poor old me as yesterday. I am not happy, but I think there maybe a short story in this somewhere. Thank you for your kind review.
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This is one of those situations where you tell yourself, "One day--I'll laugh about this." :(
I told Galeron and he said he'd see what he could do about it. He hopped on his horse with a bottle of wine and a bottle of body-oil. I wonder how that is going to help? hmm
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I know exactly what to do with those things. Was he wearing a leaf?
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It blew off when the horse started galloping.
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Sounds great!!!!
Comment from M.L. Gardner
Very good dialogue and character placement in the scene. Sara dialogue seems to have relaxed and this flows smoother and smoother with every chapter I read. I didn't see a lot of spag issues and enjoyed this chapter a lot. Good job!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Very good dialogue and character placement in the scene. Sara dialogue seems to have relaxed and this flows smoother and smoother with every chapter I read. I didn't see a lot of spag issues and enjoyed this chapter a lot. Good job!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from essence56
Onece again a very good chapter. I am so into this story and cannot wait for the outcome. I want Joe and Sara to be together with Cassie. Why have they not thought about the young man that Joe checked about Cassie that night? Whew, I am rocking off my chair. smile..Please hurry and finish this good story. Take care
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Onece again a very good chapter. I am so into this story and cannot wait for the outcome. I want Joe and Sara to be together with Cassie. Why have they not thought about the young man that Joe checked about Cassie that night? Whew, I am rocking off my chair. smile..Please hurry and finish this good story. Take care
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your thinking about leads.
Comment from fictionwriter
I enjoyed this chapter. It's sad how those sort of things tear people apart. Another great chapter here and I can't wait to see what happens next. Great job.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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I enjoyed this chapter. It's sad how those sort of things tear people apart. Another great chapter here and I can't wait to see what happens next. Great job.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from djuan
I think this is another well written chapter and a worthy next installment for this story. I love the underlying tension between Joe and Sara, despite everything that's going on. It seems very true to life.
Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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I think this is another well written chapter and a worthy next installment for this story. I love the underlying tension between Joe and Sara, despite everything that's going on. It seems very true to life.
Well done.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
