Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Chapter 8; part 1"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Rama Rao
Another excellent chapter from you which had me riveted to it right until the last word.
Don't worry about small things like the breakdown of a computer, your glasses and Windows 7. Just look after urself and post whenever u r in good moods.
Wishing you good health.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Another excellent chapter from you which had me riveted to it right until the last word.
Don't worry about small things like the breakdown of a computer, your glasses and Windows 7. Just look after urself and post whenever u r in good moods.
Wishing you good health.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for the kind review. I am just sitting here wondering what else is going to go wrong.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
This is a good chapter like the calm before the storm. It's always better to slow down the drama occasionally.
You're using a lot of "ing" & "LY" words again and the "ing" words are causing a change from past to present tense.
Ted
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Hi Barbara :)
This is a good chapter like the calm before the storm. It's always better to slow down the drama occasionally.
You're using a lot of "ing" & "LY" words again and the "ing" words are causing a change from past to present tense.
Ted
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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I got on my last post for not using enough of them. I told this person I was trying to not use so many of them. I will check it out.
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Hi Barbara :)
Don't listen to those folks.
"ing" & "LY" words can screw up your story.
Ted
Comment from RazberryBullet
Got some chuckles here: "Time will pass faster if you have a project or something to keep you busy." She looked at the walls. "I was thinking about painting the living room, but have never found time." ... I always thought orange was a pretty color." He called after her, "You're under duress. I better choose the color."
What a great clue!-- Outside the drugstore, on the opposite side of the street, is an ATM. The security camera had a perfect view of the white SUV and the license plate...YES!
Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Got some chuckles here: "Time will pass faster if you have a project or something to keep you busy." She looked at the walls. "I was thinking about painting the living room, but have never found time." ... I always thought orange was a pretty color." He called after her, "You're under duress. I better choose the color."
What a great clue!-- Outside the drugstore, on the opposite side of the street, is an ATM. The security camera had a perfect view of the white SUV and the license plate...YES!
Well done!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Being a military spouse for 23 years, I have met many military spouses. One of my very dear friends painted her walls every time her husband deployed. He would about what color they would be the next time he came home. The longer he was gone the more times they got painted
Comment from Nic42
What a fun story! first chapter I've read and I enjoyed it immensely. Joe, Sara, Cassie, all good characters! thanks so much for sharing!
so sorry for the first rating! am trying to type with a 3 year old on my lap who wants to help :)
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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What a fun story! first chapter I've read and I enjoyed it immensely. Joe, Sara, Cassie, all good characters! thanks so much for sharing!
so sorry for the first rating! am trying to type with a 3 year old on my lap who wants to help :)
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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I am wondering if you enjoyed my chapter so much, why did you give me a four. I don't understand it. Please tell me how I can improve it.
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Not a problem. I fully understand I had 4 boys. Three years can be a handful
Comment from patmedium
Barbara ... I sit here, chuckling at your notes ... so pleased you have got your sense of humor, dear.
I do believe that fanstoryland is 'home' and of course we all stick by each other!
And, as for this section of the tale ... I have enjoyed and you have planted the emotions clearly for us all to pick up on. xxxx
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Barbara ... I sit here, chuckling at your notes ... so pleased you have got your sense of humor, dear.
I do believe that fanstoryland is 'home' and of course we all stick by each other!
And, as for this section of the tale ... I have enjoyed and you have planted the emotions clearly for us all to pick up on. xxxx
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I can't believe how things keep going wrong. It's getting to be a comedy hour around here.
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Well, I am off to bed, dear friend, as it is now one hour into Sunday. xxx
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Sweet dreams
Comment from janeae
Darn you, Barbara, you're giving me just enough to whet my appetite. I am loving your story...and getting excited to hear more...you are a devil!hahaha. Thank you so much for writing. jane
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Darn you, Barbara, you're giving me just enough to whet my appetite. I am loving your story...and getting excited to hear more...you are a devil!hahaha. Thank you so much for writing. jane
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from lola29
This is a great chapter, Barbara. I can get a real sense of Sara and Joe's feelings of helplessness. I'm glad Sara is warming up to Joe, because I believe his intentions are the best. I only hope Cassie is all right.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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This is a great chapter, Barbara. I can get a real sense of Sara and Joe's feelings of helplessness. I'm glad Sara is warming up to Joe, because I believe his intentions are the best. I only hope Cassie is all right.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written and is another good chapter for your book. setting them up to get closer while looking for cassie. i look forward to your next chapter. i am writing a book of spiritual poems now.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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this is very well written and is another good chapter for your book. setting them up to get closer while looking for cassie. i look forward to your next chapter. i am writing a book of spiritual poems now.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Great chapter but I just want more to read. I want to find out what has happened to Cassie. You did a great job as always and kept me hanging.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Great chapter but I just want more to read. I want to find out what has happened to Cassie. You did a great job as always and kept me hanging.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. It will be awhile before we find Cassie.
Comment from RebelRose
Another great chapter. Sounds like they have solid lead on the SUV involved but somehow, that sounds too easy, too soon. I will look forward to seeing if it is indeed that simple. I hope so.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Another great chapter. Sounds like they have solid lead on the SUV involved but somehow, that sounds too easy, too soon. I will look forward to seeing if it is indeed that simple. I hope so.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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It is not that simple. Thank you for your kind review.
