Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Chapter 8; part 1"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from bowls
I do hope tings are going well for you, and I'm so glad you were able to post the next bit of the story; I always look forward to reading it. You're doing a great job revealing Sara's feelings and apprehension. I can certainly tell from her actions ad words that she's frantic with worry for her daughter. Of course, who wouldn't be? The point is, you manage to convey this really effectively. I enjoyed the little touch of humour about the paint colour at the end.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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I do hope tings are going well for you, and I'm so glad you were able to post the next bit of the story; I always look forward to reading it. You're doing a great job revealing Sara's feelings and apprehension. I can certainly tell from her actions ad words that she's frantic with worry for her daughter. Of course, who wouldn't be? The point is, you manage to convey this really effectively. I enjoyed the little touch of humour about the paint colour at the end.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from R. K. Alan
LOL on the sunglasses. I always try to have three pairs of reading glasses hanging around, one at work, another at my computer at home and a spare... I get paranoid if I don't have my glasses nearby.
Loved the story progression. I am glad Sara is more accepting of Joe, even though the gun seemed to put her off a bit. I don't know how a mother might react, but most men would be glad to see him with a gun in hopes he'd blow the culprit straight back to hell. Ray aka krylon
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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LOL on the sunglasses. I always try to have three pairs of reading glasses hanging around, one at work, another at my computer at home and a spare... I get paranoid if I don't have my glasses nearby.
Loved the story progression. I am glad Sara is more accepting of Joe, even though the gun seemed to put her off a bit. I don't know how a mother might react, but most men would be glad to see him with a gun in hopes he'd blow the culprit straight back to hell. Ray aka krylon
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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My husband spent 23 years in the Army as a CID agent. He was supposed to have his weapon on him at all times. I hate guns and raised 4 boys who had a curiousity about guns. I never allowed him to bring a gun in the house. As a younger agent, he got permission to leave it at work. As he grew in rank, he didn't need permission. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, I would love to find a man just like Joe. Actually, I had a Joe in my life. He was wonderful (my first husband who passed away). Joe's must be great. LOL.... and I'm glad George will be helping pick the paint!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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Barbara, I would love to find a man just like Joe. Actually, I had a Joe in my life. He was wonderful (my first husband who passed away). Joe's must be great. LOL.... and I'm glad George will be helping pick the paint!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
this is another fine chapter for your book
the dialogue is crisp and believable as are
the actions of your characters
there is one small piece of spag for you below:
Sara watched Joe placed >>> Sara watched Joe place
love,
jan
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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barbara:
this is another fine chapter for your book
the dialogue is crisp and believable as are
the actions of your characters
there is one small piece of spag for you below:
Sara watched Joe placed >>> Sara watched Joe place
love,
jan
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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I will correct that error. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from LadyWave
I could really feel the tension within Joe and Sara as they dealt with their swirling emotions of fear and their feelings toward each other. The only thing I noticed to take a look at was the use of the word "gulped" maybe a few too many times.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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I could really feel the tension within Joe and Sara as they dealt with their swirling emotions of fear and their feelings toward each other. The only thing I noticed to take a look at was the use of the word "gulped" maybe a few too many times.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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I have a habit of using a favorite word over and over again. I guess this time it was gulped. I will watch that. Thank you for your kind review.
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I have that habit, too. I don't even realize I'm doing it!
Comment from fairy77
Are you feeling better?I think your worth 6 stars but I gave them all away.The plot,character detail,dialogue,good vocab,and building suspense.Your excellent punctuation and the way you story just flows.So easy to read.Good character plot.Excellent can't wait for your next chapter.Sorry about your glasses.Beth.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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Are you feeling better?I think your worth 6 stars but I gave them all away.The plot,character detail,dialogue,good vocab,and building suspense.Your excellent punctuation and the way you story just flows.So easy to read.Good character plot.Excellent can't wait for your next chapter.Sorry about your glasses.Beth.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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Thank you for the virtual 6. I means a lot to me.
Comment from Nanashirley
The chapter is great. Even with the stress I feel that things will be okay. I think that the team and their characters set it off well. I saw no editing but I was reading intently.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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The chapter is great. Even with the stress I feel that things will be okay. I think that the team and their characters set it off well. I saw no editing but I was reading intently.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Meshe Nair
Nice. Well written with no spags I could find. I hope it is all going in right direction and they do find Cassie or something to lead to her.
Good read.
Meshe Nair
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Nice. Well written with no spags I could find. I hope it is all going in right direction and they do find Cassie or something to lead to her.
Good read.
Meshe Nair
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for you kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - you know I'm a fan. I really think this is the all time best. It has everything. It has emotion, all sorts of tension, and as all your work, so technically correct. Anybody who would read this and not eagerly await the next post is most likely brain dead! Very warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Hi Barbara - you know I'm a fan. I really think this is the all time best. It has everything. It has emotion, all sorts of tension, and as all your work, so technically correct. Anybody who would read this and not eagerly await the next post is most likely brain dead! Very warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support. You southern gentlemen are such sweet talkers.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara. You have my admiration. Some of the books I followed so far are not as consistent in appearing in FS as yours. Some stop immediately. But you, with your problems (including the sunglasses) are dependable. Though, we will understand if you have a break every now and then. This chapter is as always, interesting and believable. I've come to like the sensitive character of Sara and the gentleman and more daring attitude in Joe.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Hi, Barbara. You have my admiration. Some of the books I followed so far are not as consistent in appearing in FS as yours. Some stop immediately. But you, with your problems (including the sunglasses) are dependable. Though, we will understand if you have a break every now and then. This chapter is as always, interesting and believable. I've come to like the sensitive character of Sara and the gentleman and more daring attitude in Joe.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and your continued support.
