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Kyrielle37 total reviews
Comment from Suzie Q
Very well done! I wish I had 6 stars left to give you. You certainly deserve it. There were so many good stanzas, I can't single out just one. I have to say, your repetition of the last line in each stanza " There never was a thing more true" was very effective. Great job!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Very well done! I wish I had 6 stars left to give you. You certainly deserve it. There were so many good stanzas, I can't single out just one. I have to say, your repetition of the last line in each stanza " There never was a thing more true" was very effective. Great job!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi Suzie Q,
thank you so much for reviewing, for your kind and encouraging comments, and for your wish for a six! Cheers - Cally :)))
Comment from missy98writer
fairydancer,
your quatrain poem is sad, poignant and beautifully written. Your words paint a vivid picture in the readers head. Great juxtaposition of art work to poem theme. Excellent rhyme, wonderful narrative and very good descriptive writing. Effective use of metaphors such as vibrant flame, saw the army as a game, he had no clue, taught him well, released his will, precision made for you, consumed by fear, full of tears, battle's brew, forever gone, last breath, banner's hue and evil's scheming tune. You quatrain is an excellent entry in the Quatrain Poetry contest. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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fairydancer,
your quatrain poem is sad, poignant and beautifully written. Your words paint a vivid picture in the readers head. Great juxtaposition of art work to poem theme. Excellent rhyme, wonderful narrative and very good descriptive writing. Effective use of metaphors such as vibrant flame, saw the army as a game, he had no clue, taught him well, released his will, precision made for you, consumed by fear, full of tears, battle's brew, forever gone, last breath, banner's hue and evil's scheming tune. You quatrain is an excellent entry in the Quatrain Poetry contest. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Melissa.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi Melissa,
sincerely thank you, for such a detailed review, and for your very encouraging comments, they are very warmly welcomed - Cally :)))
Comment from BLACKDYKE
I love the rhythm and stacata of this magic poetry fairydancer. What ever the name of the type of poetry, I found it easy to read and understand, which is all in my book.
Great stuff. Eric
PS. Full of truth too.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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I love the rhythm and stacata of this magic poetry fairydancer. What ever the name of the type of poetry, I found it easy to read and understand, which is all in my book.
Great stuff. Eric
PS. Full of truth too.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi Eric,
hey another Brit! (I live in Worcestershire.) Thank you so much for reviewing and for your encouraging comments - Cally :)
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My pleasure, but Worcester !??
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What's wrong with Worcester? LOL :)
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nowt realy, but it surely ain't York. LOL
Comment from lola29
This is truly a very sad read, and really puts war into the right perspective--too many young brave souls are dying too young for other people's greed.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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This is truly a very sad read, and really puts war into the right perspective--too many young brave souls are dying too young for other people's greed.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi lola29,
thank you so much for reviewing, and for your thought-filled comments - Cally :)
Comment from Heynonni
What a good work this is. I have never seen the restrictions imposed by structure (kyrielle) used so well to convey the thoughts and feelings of the author. Very nicely done!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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What a good work this is. I have never seen the restrictions imposed by structure (kyrielle) used so well to convey the thoughts and feelings of the author. Very nicely done!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi Heynonni,
thank you so much for reviewing, and for your great comments! Cally :)
Comment from Paulpl52
You have certainly emphasised the horrors of war so well in this well crafted poem. Great imagery and effect with the refrain throughout. Strong contest entry, Paul.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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You have certainly emphasised the horrors of war so well in this well crafted poem. Great imagery and effect with the refrain throughout. Strong contest entry, Paul.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi Paullp52,
thank you so much for reviewing, and for your very encouraging comments! Cally :)
Comment from Fireshadow
Cally, this is an exceptional entry for the Quatrain Poetry contest, and I'm sure it will be a strong contender in the competition. Certainly deserving six stars, so sorry I have none left. Terrific kyrielle with strong rhyme scheme. Good luck in the contest, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Cally, this is an exceptional entry for the Quatrain Poetry contest, and I'm sure it will be a strong contender in the competition. Certainly deserving six stars, so sorry I have none left. Terrific kyrielle with strong rhyme scheme. Good luck in the contest, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi Ama,
I am very chuffed that you like this! Your wonderfully encouraging comments mean a lot to me, as I think you are an exceptional poet.
Thanks again (for lifting my day!) - Cally :)))
Comment from bowls
Well done! The repetition of the line certainly adds a distinctive touch to the poem. The rhyme scheme seems to hurry the poem along, just as the life of the young boy was hurried off in death. You've managed to tell a story and say quite about the world and its ways in these few short stanzas.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Well done! The repetition of the line certainly adds a distinctive touch to the poem. The rhyme scheme seems to hurry the poem along, just as the life of the young boy was hurried off in death. You've managed to tell a story and say quite about the world and its ways in these few short stanzas.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi bowls,
thank you for your thoughtful review and extremely encouraging comments, much appreciated! - Cally :)
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi fairy. This is a sad but very well written story written in kyrielle style. Very good descriptive imagery throughout this poem. Well done
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi fairy. This is a sad but very well written story written in kyrielle style. Very good descriptive imagery throughout this poem. Well done
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi Wendyanne,
thank you so much for your kind comments and review - Cally :)
Comment from humpwhistle
Oh, there never was a thing more true. Again and again and again. I apologize that I don't have a six to offer.
One day people will listen to the poets. Though I fear it may be too late.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Oh, there never was a thing more true. Again and again and again. I apologize that I don't have a six to offer.
One day people will listen to the poets. Though I fear it may be too late.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2010
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Hi Lee, I fear you are right, it is too easy to get absorbed by and into all the negative. Thank you so much for reviewing, and for the wish for a six! Cheers - Cally :)))
