Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
What a masterful, first class and superb thrilling-chilling write my friend...
He dropped the sheets as he tried to put his arms around her. When she backed away, he stopped. "I'd never hurt either of you. I wouldn't have killed Roy, either, but I did want to cause the same amount of pain he's caused you that Sunday morning in that church parking lot." He released a deep breath. "Or the prom night when he raped you."
Sara walked silently toward her room. After she shut the door, she leaned against it. I want to believe Joe isn't capable of harming Cassie or me, but can I?[[ What can I say more]
This is awesome and superb read.
K
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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What a masterful, first class and superb thrilling-chilling write my friend...
He dropped the sheets as he tried to put his arms around her. When she backed away, he stopped. "I'd never hurt either of you. I wouldn't have killed Roy, either, but I did want to cause the same amount of pain he's caused you that Sunday morning in that church parking lot." He released a deep breath. "Or the prom night when he raped you."
Sara walked silently toward her room. After she shut the door, she leaned against it. I want to believe Joe isn't capable of harming Cassie or me, but can I?[[ What can I say more]
This is awesome and superb read.
K
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
I hope Sara gets over her current feelings in relation to Joe because she is going to need his love and support now more than ever.
Nice to see the old team back together - I hadn't realised until now that they were part of the same group as in your previous story.
Juliette
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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I hope Sara gets over her current feelings in relation to Joe because she is going to need his love and support now more than ever.
Nice to see the old team back together - I hadn't realised until now that they were part of the same group as in your previous story.
Juliette
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Yes and my previous novel. My first post about the Task Force was about Matt and Dani, then Steven and Leya, and now Joe and Sara. These Task Force men are hunks. I have to get them married off. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi barb. Nicely written chapter though I'm about to lose patience with Sara lol, esp when Joe tried to explain to her. I thought she should have trusted him by now. Anyway, you created her 'damsel in distress' character well. Many characters are involved here, you handled that part well too. No confusion between them - dialogues or actions.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Hi barb. Nicely written chapter though I'm about to lose patience with Sara lol, esp when Joe tried to explain to her. I thought she should have trusted him by now. Anyway, you created her 'damsel in distress' character well. Many characters are involved here, you handled that part well too. No confusion between them - dialogues or actions.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Sara's self-esteem is in the pits. She needs to grow and we will help her. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from marcii
With worrying about her daughter Sara is perhaps thinking too much on whether Joe would hurt her or not at this time she should be worry about if Joe and his team can save her daughter. Guess you cant chose what you think about though you can chose how much attention you pay to those thoughts.
It would have been hard for Cassie to know that the boy she thought she was talking about could be a man instead, that's if that is what has happened, though the story is leaning that way so far.
Marcii
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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With worrying about her daughter Sara is perhaps thinking too much on whether Joe would hurt her or not at this time she should be worry about if Joe and his team can save her daughter. Guess you cant chose what you think about though you can chose how much attention you pay to those thoughts.
It would have been hard for Cassie to know that the boy she thought she was talking about could be a man instead, that's if that is what has happened, though the story is leaning that way so far.
Marcii
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Well, will wait and see. Sara isn't thinking staight right now. I don't think I would either. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from RKagan
I am sure that I read this before, but when I looked back through my reviews it wasn't there. I think I might be going cookoo! Or I might have read it and not had time to review it meaning to go back later. I'm not sure. However, this is another good chapter. I am going to become a fan so I don't miss any more of your work
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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I am sure that I read this before, but when I looked back through my reviews it wasn't there. I think I might be going cookoo! Or I might have read it and not had time to review it meaning to go back later. I'm not sure. However, this is another good chapter. I am going to become a fan so I don't miss any more of your work
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I sometime read something up to three times before I get the the review. I have husband and two boys at home.
Comment from Gungalo
Okay, I'm hooked. Great writing here with a flair for the unusual and making the reader want to jump ahead. LOL. Your scenes are down to earth and real and the story is believable. Awesome done.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Okay, I'm hooked. Great writing here with a flair for the unusual and making the reader want to jump ahead. LOL. Your scenes are down to earth and real and the story is believable. Awesome done.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
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My real pleasure.
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I'm loving it.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Poor Sara, afraid of Joe, afraid for her daughter. Looks like team must some how assure her that they are doing their best to locate Cassie.
Well done!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Poor Sara, afraid of Joe, afraid for her daughter. Looks like team must some how assure her that they are doing their best to locate Cassie.
Well done!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
I think the picture you used is perfect for this chapter. I feel so sorry for both Joe and Sara. Him because she doesn't trust him and her because she can't. I hope that part works itself out as I am very into their romance! Also I hope they find Cassie soon. Sorry about your puter, I hope it is fixed by now. I'm still praying and I know you will be fine with the chemo and back to your own self soon. Excellent chapter....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Hi Barbara,
I think the picture you used is perfect for this chapter. I feel so sorry for both Joe and Sara. Him because she doesn't trust him and her because she can't. I hope that part works itself out as I am very into their romance! Also I hope they find Cassie soon. Sorry about your puter, I hope it is fixed by now. I'm still praying and I know you will be fine with the chemo and back to your own self soon. Excellent chapter....blessings, chey
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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I won't know if my computer can be saved until Thursday. It was getting old but I finally figuring it out. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book as the team, enlisted by Joe, are intent on finding Cassie.
I have given you 5 stars, trusting that you will consider the few changes recommended ...
* In your description above the title, you have - The team in introduced ... which should be - is introduced.
* You have - "I thought." Sara hesitated. "I thought The Task Force .... " This should be - "I thought ..." Sara hesitated. "I thought the Task Force ....
* You have - We better hurry. This should be - We had better hurry.
* You have - Matt took Dani's arm ... and a little bit further on, you have - Dani touched Sara's arm ...
To avoid repetition, I suggest - Dani gave Sara an understanding glance and a gentle hug ....
* You have - Sara watched Matt and Dani exit the front door .... the word 'exit' seems to appear everywhere these days. I sugtgest - Sara watched as Matt and Dani left through the front door ...
* You have - but I did want to cause the same amount of pain he's caused you that Sunday morning in that church parking lot. I suggest - but I did want to cause him the same amount of pain as he caused you on that Sunday morning in the church parking lot.
I look forward to your next chapter.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Hullo Barbara ....
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book as the team, enlisted by Joe, are intent on finding Cassie.
I have given you 5 stars, trusting that you will consider the few changes recommended ...
* In your description above the title, you have - The team in introduced ... which should be - is introduced.
* You have - "I thought." Sara hesitated. "I thought The Task Force .... " This should be - "I thought ..." Sara hesitated. "I thought the Task Force ....
* You have - We better hurry. This should be - We had better hurry.
* You have - Matt took Dani's arm ... and a little bit further on, you have - Dani touched Sara's arm ...
To avoid repetition, I suggest - Dani gave Sara an understanding glance and a gentle hug ....
* You have - Sara watched Matt and Dani exit the front door .... the word 'exit' seems to appear everywhere these days. I sugtgest - Sara watched as Matt and Dani left through the front door ...
* You have - but I did want to cause the same amount of pain he's caused you that Sunday morning in that church parking lot. I suggest - but I did want to cause him the same amount of pain as he caused you on that Sunday morning in the church parking lot.
I look forward to your next chapter.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Thank you for catching those. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sacred Heart
Barbara,
Wow! This is one great chapter! Where do I begin.
This is beautifully written and very intriquing.
You are building up the suspence and I found myself
wanting to keep reading. Poor Sar. Her feeling for
her daughter and her feelings for Joe. Hope everything
works out okay, I love happy endings but know they
don't all end that way. I admire your writing my friend.
Look forward to next chapter!! Blessings sweet, take care, love light Patty
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Barbara,
Wow! This is one great chapter! Where do I begin.
This is beautifully written and very intriquing.
You are building up the suspence and I found myself
wanting to keep reading. Poor Sar. Her feeling for
her daughter and her feelings for Joe. Hope everything
works out okay, I love happy endings but know they
don't all end that way. I admire your writing my friend.
Look forward to next chapter!! Blessings sweet, take care, love light Patty
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
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You are welcome sweet, oh why must we be limited to our stars?! This was a sixer in my heart sweet. Take care, Love Patty
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Thank you for the thought.
