Twenty for Halloween
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Beware When the Vulture Flies"Halloween Poems in Various Forms
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Comment from Just2Write
Oooo... Spooky. Very appropriate and scary for the coming Hallowed Evening. I liked the meter of this poem and the repeating word at the start of the 1st three lines in each verse. Makes a strong impact and triples the chills. Rose.
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Oooo... Spooky. Very appropriate and scary for the coming Hallowed Evening. I liked the meter of this poem and the repeating word at the start of the 1st three lines in each verse. Makes a strong impact and triples the chills. Rose.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
Comment from richard7
Beware when nightmares in disguise
paint black your fairest dreams.
'' MUUUM heelp ghosts! ''
Ah the good old childhood days!
neat halloween piece!
great visions of torment and spooks.
Take heed when the wolf pack calls.
where do you live hope they aint in yer backyard!
A really well done poem.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Beware when nightmares in disguise
paint black your fairest dreams.
'' MUUUM heelp ghosts! ''
Ah the good old childhood days!
neat halloween piece!
great visions of torment and spooks.
Take heed when the wolf pack calls.
where do you live hope they aint in yer backyard!
A really well done poem.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thanks so much, kiwime :-) So glad you enjoy this kind of fun, too :-) Brooke
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you're welcome.
Comment from closetpoetjester
We don't have Halloween here pearl and it is so disappointing my friend. I actually took your poem from two angles ... the first as an outline of the yearly pilgrimage the young ghosts and ghoulies make when they dress up and attempt to scare the crap out of everybody...all while demanding candy! LOL
But also from an eerier perspective which is possibly what you were talking about and the monsters that lurk in the darkness, ready to claim our souls if we let them.
I don't get into spooky stuff so I tried to take a light hearted angle but found myself reading it again with a more sinister twist.
I loved this write, it was quite different from what we normally see content wise and nice to see Brooke enjoys Halloween.
My absolute fave two lines were these cleverly constructed ones:
"Beware when nightmares in disguise
paint black your fairest dreams."
That is such a clever description, I also liked the mention of the banshee wailing and of course the vulture in its flight.
Top job and kudos to you on Halloween my friend.
Don't let the ghoulies get ya! LOL
Cheers closet xoxo
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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We don't have Halloween here pearl and it is so disappointing my friend. I actually took your poem from two angles ... the first as an outline of the yearly pilgrimage the young ghosts and ghoulies make when they dress up and attempt to scare the crap out of everybody...all while demanding candy! LOL
But also from an eerier perspective which is possibly what you were talking about and the monsters that lurk in the darkness, ready to claim our souls if we let them.
I don't get into spooky stuff so I tried to take a light hearted angle but found myself reading it again with a more sinister twist.
I loved this write, it was quite different from what we normally see content wise and nice to see Brooke enjoys Halloween.
My absolute fave two lines were these cleverly constructed ones:
"Beware when nightmares in disguise
paint black your fairest dreams."
That is such a clever description, I also liked the mention of the banshee wailing and of course the vulture in its flight.
Top job and kudos to you on Halloween my friend.
Don't let the ghoulies get ya! LOL
Cheers closet xoxo
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Phillippa, I did not have the little trick or treaters in mind when I wrote this - I was more thinking about those scary "monsters" that lurk in the shadows. I love spooky stuff in poetry and novels and movies and such because it isn't real - I enjoy being scared for a little while, knowing I am actually safe :-) Thanks so much for your review! Brooke :-)
Comment from Lois Delaney
This was most enjoyable, Brooke. I like this part -
Keep watch when you commit foul sins
lest torment should you seek.
This is such a good warning. I appreciate all your poem, but these couple of lines stood out. thanks for sharing your marvellous work. Lois
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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This was most enjoyable, Brooke. I like this part -
Keep watch when you commit foul sins
lest torment should you seek.
This is such a good warning. I appreciate all your poem, but these couple of lines stood out. thanks for sharing your marvellous work. Lois
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Thanks so much, Lois :_) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
Love the sing-song meter (this would wotk besutifully as an intoned reading behind a montage of dark imagery). You've captured both the macabre and the whimsy of modern halloween with this one, Brooke. It made me smile :-)
Mike
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Love the sing-song meter (this would wotk besutifully as an intoned reading behind a montage of dark imagery). You've captured both the macabre and the whimsy of modern halloween with this one, Brooke. It made me smile :-)
Mike
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
Comment from Magics02
Sounds like a good Hallows Eve poem. I like the picture and I think you presented this write very well. Lest when night falls..made me think alot on this one:) good job here magics02
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Sounds like a good Hallows Eve poem. I like the picture and I think you presented this write very well. Lest when night falls..made me think alot on this one:) good job here magics02
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Magics, thank you, my friend - I love the picture, too :-) Brooke
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You are so welcome:)
Comment from Soledadpaz
What a thoroughly spooky poem that sounds just right for this time of year. The vultures feed on carcasses and you never want to get caught as a carcass!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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What a thoroughly spooky poem that sounds just right for this time of year. The vultures feed on carcasses and you never want to get caught as a carcass!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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So glad it came across spooky - thanks, Soledadpaz. Brooke :-)
Comment from Adri7enne
Fun stuff, Brooke. Yep, all the ghosts and goblins are about to come out of the closets again. I think yours is the first one of the season. It's great, Brooke. But I had to check the author again. Didn't really sound like you for a bit. Fun, though. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Fun stuff, Brooke. Yep, all the ghosts and goblins are about to come out of the closets again. I think yours is the first one of the season. It's great, Brooke. But I had to check the author again. Didn't really sound like you for a bit. Fun, though. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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thanks, Adrienne - glad you had fun with my Halloween spookiness :-) Brooke
Comment from Patricia0129
YIKES....LOL!! Great job. I hate scary stuff. I will not watch horror films! LOL. Like the rhyme you have going here to. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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YIKES....LOL!! Great job. I hate scary stuff. I will not watch horror films! LOL. Like the rhyme you have going here to. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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I love haunted houses and horror movies because I am able to suspend my disbelief long enough to feel scared whilst all the while knowing it will soon be over and I'll still be safe :-) Thanks, Patricia :-) Brooke
Comment from Daylok
Is this a halloween poem!! Very nice I like the flow and the rhyme!! nicely done!! Sorry I am so behind in my reviewing. Cheers!!-Daylok
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Is this a halloween poem!! Very nice I like the flow and the rhyme!! nicely done!! Sorry I am so behind in my reviewing. Cheers!!-Daylok
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Yep, Daylok - it's for Halloween. So glad you like the flow and rhyme. Is there a reason for the 4 I can work on? Brooke
