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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from marcii
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Well that was an exciting meeting with a few rounds of fisty cuffs, well described.
Could understand why Sara had questions though, quite understandable she doesn't want to end up being the one hit.
Good chapter.
Marcii

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
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Missed this one so just catching up. Spotted a couple of things.

Did Joe find [out any] more information?"

If this is true[,] you deserve a beating."

"I suggest you get this man out of here[] before Joe kills him.

Roberta

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you Roberta for catching those for me. I appreciate it. I hope your living conditions are reasonable.
Comment from jclark
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This was an action packed chapter and answered some important questions. I like that Sara is such a strong female character. She has vulnerability and timidness but also carries a hidden strength to use whenever necessary. I think her missing daughter managed to "wake the sleeping giant" and I loved it!
Judy

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review and insight. I never know if a chapter worked unless I get the insight in the reviews.
Comment from E.P. Thomas
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I must admit you pack a lot of action into each chapter. The blend of narrative and descriptive writing work together well and move the plot along well. Characters are well developed and the dialogue works most of the time.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Allezw2
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Lady bw,

Violence in the sense of a storied encounter for cause always arouses the vigilante spirit.

A curious back story and a little personal history lends an air of authority to the writing.

In the military, I did meet some dangerous men, the UDT at that time.

They were uniformly, supremely self-confident. Some, when intoxicated, became a handful for their friends. Others were quite abstemious.

I often thought the Marines should be sent to a un-boot camp to condition them to civilian life.

I will say that the contemporary Marine seems far less pugnacious. However, there seems to be a growing gang presence that manifests itself off the base.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
    My husband was CID in the Army for 23 years. I understand exactly what you are saying.
reply by Allezw2 on 30-Sep-2010
    An experience quite notable in and of itself.
Comment from ThomasDennisC
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Another excellent chapter. I enjoy reading your work very much.

1. Very engaging from start to finish.

2. I love the fact that the chapter is not drawn - you get right to the matter; setting, conflict, resolution.

3. Excellent dialogue.


Keep up the good work as always.

restlesspen

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
reply by ThomasDennisC on 30-Sep-2010
    You are most welcome.
Comment from Fireshadow
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Barbara, another great chapter with flawless narrative and strong dialogue. The storyline is developing at a nice clip, capturing and maintaining reader interest. Very well done, my friend.

Ama

P.S. All the prayers of your loved ones and our FS family have been answered. So glad that no additional cancer showed in your last biopsies!

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your prayers and support. I appeciate your kind review.
Comment from Ravening
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very frightening and emotional situation. you protrayed it very well wouldnt change a thing at all about it. great story...

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
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barbara:

I'm so pleased to hear your good news
we will continue to pray for you, let
the doctors complain

this is an excellent chapter -- I need
to go back and catch up == keep up the
good work

love,
jan

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your continued prayers. I must admit the idea of chemo scares me. I will find out today when I begin the therapy. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from CKLA
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I finally found the time to sit and catch up on the missed chapters.
The story has moved along really well and I enjoyed the last few chapters.
I'm glad to hear that there was no more cancer. My prayers are still with you.
Collette

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. I am sorry you had to read the chapters and not get the points for them.
reply by CKLA on 30-Sep-2010
    I enjoyed reading them so I didn't mind.:)
    Collette