Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Chapter 7; part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from marcii
This chapter is very good and the scenes are well described that I can see them in my minds eye.
I need to catch up with your story so I'm doing so now.
Also hope the don't find any more cancer and your health continues to improve.
Marcii
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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This chapter is very good and the scenes are well described that I can see them in my minds eye.
I need to catch up with your story so I'm doing so now.
Also hope the don't find any more cancer and your health continues to improve.
Marcii
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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I am so sorry that you aren't getting the bonus points for reviewing. I wish you would. Sorry.
Comment from afternoonlight
This chapter had a lot happening. Having raised two daughters I thought the half an hour and its a Drug Cartel sounded unrealistic. I though much of this sounded unrealistic and over the top, it jumped right to a disaster of kidnapping realted to her use of the text messaging. Seems over the top and drastic...making love and happiness for Sarah to guilt inducing lost my daughter. Just my opinion.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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This chapter had a lot happening. Having raised two daughters I thought the half an hour and its a Drug Cartel sounded unrealistic. I though much of this sounded unrealistic and over the top, it jumped right to a disaster of kidnapping realted to her use of the text messaging. Seems over the top and drastic...making love and happiness for Sarah to guilt inducing lost my daughter. Just my opinion.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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And you have a right to your opinion. Joe had questioned her computer use much earlier. With Joe's job it's not unusual for the cartels to cause problems. Thank you for your review.
Comment from zoocq
Barbara...thank God! for your good news! A great new twist to your story...very suspenseful and full of mystery and a little scary in the day and age. Keep going!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Barbara...thank God! for your good news! A great new twist to your story...very suspenseful and full of mystery and a little scary in the day and age. Keep going!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from animatqua
Ok. Now I'm picking up parts of what I missed. I'm seeing the tension being put together here, also some of Joe's background. I think this was needed to flesh out the story.
You might give some thought to developing this facet of Joe a bit more prior to this chapter. I think it's an important factor the reader would like to explore before the action in the next chapter.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Ok. Now I'm picking up parts of what I missed. I'm seeing the tension being put together here, also some of Joe's background. I think this was needed to flesh out the story.
You might give some thought to developing this facet of Joe a bit more prior to this chapter. I think it's an important factor the reader would like to explore before the action in the next chapter.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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I went into depth in the first few chapters of this novel explaining Joe's job. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
Oh crap, this in not good. Now here comes the part that might tear my heart apart. A great tension filled chapter, and I hope Cassie ends up being all right. Great job.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Oh crap, this in not good. Now here comes the part that might tear my heart apart. A great tension filled chapter, and I hope Cassie ends up being all right. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dave d yes its me
another fine piece of writing. i do hope they manage to find cassie. i'd also want to wish you good luck for the results tomorrow;
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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another fine piece of writing. i do hope they manage to find cassie. i'd also want to wish you good luck for the results tomorrow;
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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My biopsied showed they have gotten all the cancer. Now, I just need to make it through the chemo, radiation, and horome therapies. Thank you for your kind review.
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with the lord on your side you can do it im sure my thoughts are with you
Comment from anabelle
Wow! Congratulations. What wonderful news from the last surgery. Hurrayyy!!!!!
As for this chapter, it's amazing as usual. Loved the interactions and the little blurp about 15 year olds and poems. I laughed out loud at that.
Thanks for the lovely read, and we'll send you more good thoughts until all of it is gone.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Wow! Congratulations. What wonderful news from the last surgery. Hurrayyy!!!!!
As for this chapter, it's amazing as usual. Loved the interactions and the little blurp about 15 year olds and poems. I laughed out loud at that.
Thanks for the lovely read, and we'll send you more good thoughts until all of it is gone.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your good thoughts. I know they helped. I appreciate your kind review.
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You're very welcome. The best to you. :-0
Comment from RazberryBullet
Hm!!! "Cassie spent a lot of time instant messaging her friends. My gut says it's somehow related to her disappearance."
Good thing Joe's around!
Well done!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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Hm!!! "Cassie spent a lot of time instant messaging her friends. My gut says it's somehow related to her disappearance."
Good thing Joe's around!
Well done!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review, and continued support.
Comment from gerry26
interesting, nail biter. Your characters are so strong I am worried about Cassie. You descriptions including the milk shake spot on. You draw your readers into the story and don't let go.
gerry
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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interesting, nail biter. Your characters are so strong I am worried about Cassie. You descriptions including the milk shake spot on. You draw your readers into the story and don't let go.
gerry
Comment Written 25-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
I wondered what the case was going to be, and now we're in it. Good job.
My gut says it's somehow related to her disappear[a]nce."
"When he ordered[,] did he have an accent?"
"Yeah, but his accent was different from the usual Hispanic accent I hear. I don't know what it was. I never heard anything like it[ before]."
I'm tracing Cassie['s] steps." He ran his fingers through his hair, trying to be patient.
Roberta
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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I wondered what the case was going to be, and now we're in it. Good job.
My gut says it's somehow related to her disappear[a]nce."
"When he ordered[,] did he have an accent?"
"Yeah, but his accent was different from the usual Hispanic accent I hear. I don't know what it was. I never heard anything like it[ before]."
I'm tracing Cassie['s] steps." He ran his fingers through his hair, trying to be patient.
Roberta
Comment Written 25-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I will make those corrections.
