Emotions of Love and Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 64 "Security"Love and Life with many emotions
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Comment from TT7Z
Your description of a living and loving relationship is very well done. I can almost see the husband gently kissing the wife on the cheek or lips as he leaves for work or a gentle touch on the back or butt to show affection. With a lingering touch to the shoulder with the wife gently squeezing his hand as they reluctantly let go of each other. Very well written and an excellent piece. Thank you.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2010
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Your description of a living and loving relationship is very well done. I can almost see the husband gently kissing the wife on the cheek or lips as he leaves for work or a gentle touch on the back or butt to show affection. With a lingering touch to the shoulder with the wife gently squeezing his hand as they reluctantly let go of each other. Very well written and an excellent piece. Thank you.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2010
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Thank You TTZ7 Loved your remarks, Have a wonderful day!
Comment from misscookie
Love the artwork it says it all
I love the flow of the poem and your words are strong, yet gentle for those who wish to hear the truth.
To make love work remember. You can give without loving but you can't love e without giving.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Love the artwork it says it all
I love the flow of the poem and your words are strong, yet gentle for those who wish to hear the truth.
To make love work remember. You can give without loving but you can't love e without giving.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind words and you are so right!! Thank You
Comment from samandlancelot
I enjoyed your beautiful bio and poem. Serving God first puts everyone and everything else in their proper place. When you receive His love, it's much easier to love others. Patricia
Trying to hard to (too) succeed in life
Whose love is not so quite (quite so) demanding.
Who (delete 'Who') God found him a woman wh
The future is there's (theirs) to come
For there (their) love for God is only
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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I enjoyed your beautiful bio and poem. Serving God first puts everyone and everything else in their proper place. When you receive His love, it's much easier to love others. Patricia
Trying to hard to (too) succeed in life
Whose love is not so quite (quite so) demanding.
Who (delete 'Who') God found him a woman wh
The future is there's (theirs) to come
For there (their) love for God is only
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your help in straightening out my work. I really appreciate it. Thank you again, Can you please review again thank you, Have a nice day
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Oops! I put the 'too' in the wrong place. You'll need to change this again.
Trying to (too) hard too (to) succeed in life
I raised your rating to five stars.
Patricia
Comment from gspeak
This is a very nice poem. It has a nice flow and sweet sentiment. Good recommendation to anyone about to take the big step towards union.
I did notice however in the third stanza that the word to should be "too" where you write "trying 'too' hard ... . And, there's in the 12th stanza I believe should be theirs without the apostrophe. And the next to the last stanza I believe should be their also instead of there, if I'm reading it correctly.
Overall, very sweet and enjoyable to read.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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This is a very nice poem. It has a nice flow and sweet sentiment. Good recommendation to anyone about to take the big step towards union.
I did notice however in the third stanza that the word to should be "too" where you write "trying 'too' hard ... . And, there's in the 12th stanza I believe should be theirs without the apostrophe. And the next to the last stanza I believe should be their also instead of there, if I'm reading it correctly.
Overall, very sweet and enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for the insight on my errors I will fix them. Thank you for your help. Have a wonderful day
Comment from anabelle
This is a very nice poem of security with someone you're in love with and overcoming all the odds against them with the help of God.
A couple of nits:
is there's to
For there love
On both these, there should read their. There is an adverb of place while their is a possessive adjective.
Thanks for the good read.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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This is a very nice poem of security with someone you're in love with and overcoming all the odds against them with the help of God.
A couple of nits:
is there's to
For there love
On both these, there should read their. There is an adverb of place while their is a possessive adjective.
Thanks for the good read.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your concern for my writting I will look into it. Thank you for your help again. Have a wonderful day!
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You too, and you're welcome.
Comment from essence56
I loved reading this poem. The flow was very good and the word connections were on point. Very good photo pick also. I found myself very deeply relating to the words and it's meaning.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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I loved reading this poem. The flow was very good and the word connections were on point. Very good photo pick also. I found myself very deeply relating to the words and it's meaning.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind comments and I'm glad someone relates to my writting I really appreciate it. Thank You
