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Comment from JeJo
Thank you for the author notes, to describe both the structure and setting of your cinquain poem. Excellent use of alliteration and rhyme: lives/laid; raise/praise, and the repeated "s" sounds. Respecting and praising those who sacrifice their lives in war for their countries is an excellent topic. Too often we don't think or do much about it, but we should "sing your odes." - JeJo
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2010
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Thank you for the author notes, to describe both the structure and setting of your cinquain poem. Excellent use of alliteration and rhyme: lives/laid; raise/praise, and the repeated "s" sounds. Respecting and praising those who sacrifice their lives in war for their countries is an excellent topic. Too often we don't think or do much about it, but we should "sing your odes." - JeJo
Comment Written 07-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2010
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JeJo, thank you for your thoughtful comments, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
There is a sorrow to the words in this Cinquain. Too many heroes are turned to corpses. Too many fall beneath the crush of war. I liked the picture you chose - A monument to the sorrows and decay that remains hundreds of years after the glory of battle is over. Rose.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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There is a sorrow to the words in this Cinquain. Too many heroes are turned to corpses. Too many fall beneath the crush of war. I liked the picture you chose - A monument to the sorrows and decay that remains hundreds of years after the glory of battle is over. Rose.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Rose, thank you for your perceptive reading of this cinquain :-) Brooke
Comment from Robin Moynihan
A beautiful poem and wonderful author notes.I like that the title is considered the sixth line. Also enjoyed the background information on the Sligo Castle. Nice job, as always.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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A beautiful poem and wonderful author notes.I like that the title is considered the sixth line. Also enjoyed the background information on the Sligo Castle. Nice job, as always.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Robin, you are making my evening - thanks : -) Brooke
Comment from dportwood
Brooke,
Your cinquain speaks loudly of the cruel fact that wars have always been a part of mankind's existence. Have so-called peace talks ever done any good?
Duane
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Brooke,
Your cinquain speaks loudly of the cruel fact that wars have always been a part of mankind's existence. Have so-called peace talks ever done any good?
Duane
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thanks so much, Duane, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from patmedium
Hello, Brooke. I am so pleased to find you have not abandoned your military project. This is very true and tells such a lot in so few words. Pat. xx
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Hello, Brooke. I am so pleased to find you have not abandoned your military project. This is very true and tells such a lot in so few words. Pat. xx
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you, Pat - nope, the anti-war poems are important to me :-) Brooke
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Good. xxx
Comment from Realist101
I didn't know the title was to be included as such?? I have learned something interesting again from you Brooke, my wonderful teacher! I will try to remember this if I try another cinquain! ") This one is great, I really agree with all your feelings about wars...write on my friend! Susan
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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I didn't know the title was to be included as such?? I have learned something interesting again from you Brooke, my wonderful teacher! I will try to remember this if I try another cinquain! ") This one is great, I really agree with all your feelings about wars...write on my friend! Susan
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you, Susan - I appreciate your willingness to learn more about form poetry, and, of course, your lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from spiceydog
You have illustrated the essence of heroism and the obligation we all share to acknowledge the courage and sacrifice of those who have changed our world for the better. spiceydog
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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You have illustrated the essence of heroism and the obligation we all share to acknowledge the courage and sacrifice of those who have changed our world for the better. spiceydog
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you, spiceydog - so good to hear from you - I appreciate your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Amicus
Don't know how I missed this one, Brooke...and I am glad I caught up with it as it is a wonderful way to utilize this lovely little form. The internal rhyming is an asset here and the litany of apt topics for odes in parallel construction is a nice touch.
Good poem.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Don't know how I missed this one, Brooke...and I am glad I caught up with it as it is a wonderful way to utilize this lovely little form. The internal rhyming is an asset here and the litany of apt topics for odes in parallel construction is a nice touch.
Good poem.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you, Amicus - I love writing cinquains, so I'm pleased you like this :-) Brooke
Comment from Winslow
Dear Brooke,
The words you have chosen evoke the Normans. It is true that old ruins have many tales to tell and you have said it well. Excellent job of matching words with theme.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Dear Brooke,
The words you have chosen evoke the Normans. It is true that old ruins have many tales to tell and you have said it well. Excellent job of matching words with theme.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Winslow, thanks so much :-) I appreciate your thoughtful comments. Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Brooke, your cinquain is indeed a moving and memorable poem. You honor the sacrifices made by soldiers throughout history and long for their valor to live on in words.
Excellent.
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Brooke, your cinquain is indeed a moving and memorable poem. You honor the sacrifices made by soldiers throughout history and long for their valor to live on in words.
Excellent.
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you, Karyn. I appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke
