Dear Lexi
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Following Mommy""Let the little children come unto me." ~ Jesus
14 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
your senryu is beautifully written. Your senryu is in great form and syllable count. Lovely art work. I enjoyed all of the lines:
walking, not crawling
following your mommy's lead
genetic footsteps
A senryu is a poem that highlights the foibles of human nature and you managed to do that. Excellent entry in the senryu writing prompt contest. Good luck in the voting booth. It was a delight to read you poem.
Missy.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
Poet,
your senryu is beautifully written. Your senryu is in great form and syllable count. Lovely art work. I enjoyed all of the lines:
walking, not crawling
following your mommy's lead
genetic footsteps
A senryu is a poem that highlights the foibles of human nature and you managed to do that. Excellent entry in the senryu writing prompt contest. Good luck in the voting booth. It was a delight to read you poem.
Missy.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks, missy98writer
Comment from sgalletti
Good use of syllable count in your three line senryu. I like the cyncial/satorical senryu a lot. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
Good use of syllable count in your three line senryu. I like the cyncial/satorical senryu a lot. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks, Sue
Comment from adewpearl
I love the satori of genetic footsteps - I love the way your poem can be about a child literally following her mother as they walk or figuratively following her mom as she takes on her personality and traits :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
I love the satori of genetic footsteps - I love the way your poem can be about a child literally following her mother as they walk or figuratively following her mom as she takes on her personality and traits :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks, Brooke
Comment from anabelle
LOL! Amazing how the energy does seem to be genetic. I like the way you showed her strength and determination by using yourself as a gauge.
Best of luck in the contest. Good entry.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
LOL! Amazing how the energy does seem to be genetic. I like the way you showed her strength and determination by using yourself as a gauge.
Best of luck in the contest. Good entry.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks, anabelle
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You're welcome.
Comment from anabellapongasi
This is a nice senryu about your granddaughter. All my children never crawled much either. They were all in a hurry to walk and run! Best wishes in the contest!
Anabella
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
This is a nice senryu about your granddaughter. All my children never crawled much either. They were all in a hurry to walk and run! Best wishes in the contest!
Anabella
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks, anabella
Comment from azwildrosa
awe, i see my children following me around now when they were babies. great poem for this prompt. what a great image i get from reading it and a smile as well. thank you for sharing and best of wishes to you in the booths :) mommies rule!!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
awe, i see my children following me around now when they were babies. great poem for this prompt. what a great image i get from reading it and a smile as well. thank you for sharing and best of wishes to you in the booths :) mommies rule!!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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yes they do -- thanks, azwildrosa
Comment from keepthefaith
I liked your senryu. In perfect syllable format. Written very well. I liked the message in it. Great job and good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
I liked your senryu. In perfect syllable format. Written very well. I liked the message in it. Great job and good luck.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks, keepthefaith
Comment from regina1956
You followed the senryu poem concept completely. I feel the child following mommy's footsteps. I liked the mother/child subject.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
You followed the senryu poem concept completely. I feel the child following mommy's footsteps. I liked the mother/child subject.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks, regina1956
Comment from FredCollingwood
Finally a well written senryu that adheres to the attributes of the art form. Excellent. I think this one's a winner!
Fred
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
Finally a well written senryu that adheres to the attributes of the art form. Excellent. I think this one's a winner!
Fred
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks, Fred
Comment from Ann Smith
This is precious and brought a smile to my face today. I think it is especially sweet because it connects three generations through your eyes. It's amazing how the apple doesn't fall far from the tree. Good luck with the contest. ann
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
This is precious and brought a smile to my face today. I think it is especially sweet because it connects three generations through your eyes. It's amazing how the apple doesn't fall far from the tree. Good luck with the contest. ann
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks, ann
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You are welcome.