Comment from TT7Z

Excellent

Nice piece. Well done. Very expressive. Clear message. Nice ending twist, clearly shows abuse. Verbal with the name dummy and physical confinement by sitting in a corner. Nice twist to what appears to be a good loving dad actually be an overbearing child abuser. Nicely done. Thank you.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010

Over bearing child abuser??? I'm sorry that is not how this was intended. Thanks anyways.

Comment from billee

Good

I like the basic idea but would have liked to hear a little more about the kids. Are they future Sherpas, Al Capone wannabes, etc? I do identify with this, having been a single parent raising my daughter. Yup, you can't help but care.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2010

Thank you for your kind review.

Comment from Shirley B

Excellent

I loved your poem. I also loved the line 'don't have a cow'. My gosh i haven't heard that one for a while.:-) I liked your poem because it was filled with so much love for your children. I love to see great dads that can write poetry! Shirley

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2010

Sorry but it wasn't a Dad tat wrote this sorry for the disappointment. A Mom did! Thank you for the great comment! It was appreciated.

reply by Shirley B on 30-Aug-2010

I am so sorry, Please forgive me! Shirley

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2010

No problem it happens, I've done that myself. Have a wonderful day!