Who's Right(s)?
Conscience and amusing story about elections.8 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
Wow, Mike, those are some author's notes!! LOL
Writing is one way you use to stand up for what you believe in and share your information...I respect the power of your words.
I think shody is spelled shoddy, Mike.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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Wow, Mike, those are some author's notes!! LOL
Writing is one way you use to stand up for what you believe in and share your information...I respect the power of your words.
I think shody is spelled shoddy, Mike.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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Boy, I am glad that I am not a salmon swimming under your eyes. You are correct and now, so is my poem. That's OK, I had an ASCII cut and paste transcription error to where all "'- were replaced with ???. That baby took me 45minutes to go in and fix each of them, still have a few to go.
That has turned into a joy about poetry. I can present ideas in a poem and have then cut across political lines, which opens the reader up to at least consider the idea or the logic behind it. It I just write about he issue, then it is simply considered politics and dismissed. I do regret that there is a lot of considerations with the city's state's attorney office. In part, they also a part that is the problem that Baltimore suffers with. To be honest, while I am fairly strictly adhering to constitional principles, I have paid a very high personal price to speak. My first post here, was about love and what I recieved was a punishing cut in pay. With the step-daughter, being so open as to try to keep the authorities from being a problem, created problems with certian individual officers. But I believe in being afraid of the consequences, there is sort of a God's grace about it. I always weigh which is worse, having a price exacted for something that I did or said, or having to live with myself if I don't. LOL
Thank you so much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Spiritual Echo
I;m having a hard time reconciling your poetry with the quesion marks that at first make me question whether you were asking if you had the right to speak, but mostly demading to be heard.
Yeah its almost brilliant.
But not quite.
I feel as if you dumped on me and wondering if you think I'm so wrapped up in social concience that I can't really comment.
So, despite my confusion, I think I will.
This took me nowhere.
Hope Elizabeth is fine.
Hope you haven't killed each other.
Having said that I'm not sure it matters.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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I;m having a hard time reconciling your poetry with the quesion marks that at first make me question whether you were asking if you had the right to speak, but mostly demading to be heard.
Yeah its almost brilliant.
But not quite.
I feel as if you dumped on me and wondering if you think I'm so wrapped up in social concience that I can't really comment.
So, despite my confusion, I think I will.
This took me nowhere.
Hope Elizabeth is fine.
Hope you haven't killed each other.
Having said that I'm not sure it matters.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Well in reading on, Elizabeth was the sheriffs daughter not my step who it was mentioned straghtened herself out and is on her own. I am now divorced as my wife requested after I settled as she wanted to be paid to leave. You can't please everybody. Mike
Comment from irsajay
If such a nice message comes in a public forum, it excites you to think the rotten system. But, there is a hope that you challenged the might. Well done. A nice poem with a lot of sense.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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If such a nice message comes in a public forum, it excites you to think the rotten system. But, there is a hope that you challenged the might. Well done. A nice poem with a lot of sense.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Yea, but one is willing to stand up, others appluad while running away from you. LOL Thank you reviewing this. Mike
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You are welcome
Comment from Jetco
publically hem and ( hall,) do you mean haw
blame (when)
when her prosecutions gets the criminal released
You got one too many whens.
when herMayor Kurt L. (Schmoke), prosecutions gets the criminal released
You misspelled Schmoke it should be Schmuck
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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publically hem and ( hall,) do you mean haw
blame (when)
when her prosecutions gets the criminal released
You got one too many whens.
when herMayor Kurt L. (Schmoke), prosecutions gets the criminal released
You misspelled Schmoke it should be Schmuck
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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I got a kick out of this review and made the corrections to the poem. It best to spell that mayor's name correctly as I don't want some poor schmuck to get the blame. Have a great week ahead. Mike
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LOL
Comment from marcii
A well written poem about the way crime is dealt with or not.
Their are so many innocent victims that go through these things and get treated like shite.
People up for election in what ever position they are aiming for , say anything to get people to vote.
Next Saturday here in Australia we HAVE, to vote for who we want for prime minister, the candidates all say a lot what they think we wanna hear,but when elected do bugger all.
Marcii
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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A well written poem about the way crime is dealt with or not.
Their are so many innocent victims that go through these things and get treated like shite.
People up for election in what ever position they are aiming for , say anything to get people to vote.
Next Saturday here in Australia we HAVE, to vote for who we want for prime minister, the candidates all say a lot what they think we wanna hear,but when elected do bugger all.
Marcii
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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That's when it becomes our responsibility not to reelect them. That is what recently happened to our country. I thank you for your compliments and review. Mike
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, a poem that shows your emotions about the baltimore police department and judicial system with great detail. your author notes are very detailed and i hope you can get new officials in office. we recently got a new state attorney and she does a bang up job. i am a member of the Sheriff's Advisory Council who are citizens that get details from the sheriff's office in their neighborhood and hears from different city officials each month. when this state attorney was elected, they said people might actually serve jail time now that she is in office. The frist thing she did when she was in office was to tell the drug dealers she wasn't playing around. And prostitutes that were arrested three times would then spend nine months in a state prison, no more local time
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, a poem that shows your emotions about the baltimore police department and judicial system with great detail. your author notes are very detailed and i hope you can get new officials in office. we recently got a new state attorney and she does a bang up job. i am a member of the Sheriff's Advisory Council who are citizens that get details from the sheriff's office in their neighborhood and hears from different city officials each month. when this state attorney was elected, they said people might actually serve jail time now that she is in office. The frist thing she did when she was in office was to tell the drug dealers she wasn't playing around. And prostitutes that were arrested three times would then spend nine months in a state prison, no more local time
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Many states don't tolerate the smaller stuff, as a result the save themselves of the larger more violent crimes and being at the top of the heap when it comes to statistics. I thank you very much for your compliments and comments for the review. Mike
Comment from Jenn Starr
I think that the poem is forced- the rhythm is off and it does not flow- I actually tried to read it outloud to get a better idea of the rhythm and it just didn't flow very well- it's tricky breaking in the middle of a phrase such as the first line- it should end with Attorney- it's just broken up strange-
I can tell
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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I think that the poem is forced- the rhythm is off and it does not flow- I actually tried to read it outloud to get a better idea of the rhythm and it just didn't flow very well- it's tricky breaking in the middle of a phrase such as the first line- it should end with Attorney- it's just broken up strange-
I can tell
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Well, I write in more a freestyle manner with these, To me I try to write it like musical notes, not clock ticks. I do thank you for reading and reviewing this. Mike
Comment from nucciwriter21
In the first line of the third stanza "were" should be we're.
Other than that, this poem was very well done. It has a lot of emotion, especially anger and the voice speaks clearly. Even before I read the background history, I understood what you were angered about. Nice and creative way to vent. Good Job!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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In the first line of the third stanza "were" should be we're.
Other than that, this poem was very well done. It has a lot of emotion, especially anger and the voice speaks clearly. Even before I read the background history, I understood what you were angered about. Nice and creative way to vent. Good Job!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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Not a good way to vent if you have aspirations of being a perfroming poet. LOL But this was too important to me to have those consideration. I guess that becoming a poet lauret is out of the question as well.
My stomach is in knots over this and I really appreciated this as the first review, especially the comments about summing up the contents of the notes within the poem, the compliments and the correction, which was a rare, "quick fix." Have a great week ahead! Mike
