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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from Begin Again
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Barbara,

OMG, I have been away so much that I was not aware of your illness. My thoughts and prayers are with you my dear friend.

The story is moving along quite well and is very emotional and heart warming. I am enjoying it very much.

Take care of yourself and know that you are thought of often.

smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    Thank you Carol for your prayers. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from bowls
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Yes, many people are thinking of you and sending their best wishes your way. I know I am. Another really good chapter. Now, of course, I'm wondering if what happens after the game is for the good or bad. Things are going so well at this point. I guess I'll just have to wait and see.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    Thank you for your thoughts and wishes. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from krdeering
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This is very well written, and I have no suggestions or corrections at all.

Realistically, you have Sara apologizing a lot. Some people have that personality trait, and you have captured it.

One niggly question: Why did she insert a toothpick into the cookie? To test it as one might do with cake? If that's the reason, I think you could drop that detail, since it's not necessary with cookies.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    I still test cookies with a tooth pick. Am I doing it wrong? Is there a better way?
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Barbara,

Your descriptions in this chapter are first rate (don't know why I'm saying that as they are always great!) I'm glad Cassie likes Joe and him her...nothing there for Sara to worry about. I have been praying for you and know your surgery will go well. Surgery isn't a load of fun but it is necessary so don't fret. I will say a special prayer for you tomorrow. Blessings, chey

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    Thank you for your prayers. I have put everything in God's hands. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from rama devi
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Hi dear.
You are in my thoughts and prayers and will especially think of you during your surgery (though I have to figure out the time difference with India!)

Another good chapter with excellent flow and dialog.

the scenes seem authentic and true to life.

joe is such a gentleman!
The jealous ginger is a good touch.

One suggestion-

Besides(,) if you don't hurry, you'll be late for your game."

Blessings and healing light and LOVE,
rd

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    Thank you for your prayers. I have put everything in God's hands. I will take care of the comma. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from bhogg
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I'm sure that turmoil will come to Sara and Joe, but for now, it really sounds blissful. You have a way of pulling your readers in to your stories. You are indeed gifted.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    Thank you for your kind review and continued support. I enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from essence56
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You are such an awesome writer and I love everything you write. You make romance so heartfelt and warm, while showing both the up and doens of love. I truly admire your strength and faith while dealing with illness. It motivates me while I deal with my legal blindness. We will continue to pray together. God bless and love ya. Good chapter.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    Thank you for your prayers. I have put everything in God's capable hands. My prayers are with you, also. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Great Chapter, I enjoyed reading it very much. You have so much feeling and detail written it. It always makes me want more of the story and it is never there. I do look forward to the next chapter. Good job

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
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[You're] reaction was a normal Mom reaction...[your]
That is the only nit I saw in this well written chapter. As usual, I enjoyed every word.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    Thank you for catching that. I changed it. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Thesis
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The story is progressing nicely, Barbara. The relationship that you are building between these two is refreshing. Sara needs a good man. Joe really fits the bill.

The fact that Cassie likes him too, is a big plus. Great Chapter. - John


 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.