Watch Over My Friends
A prayer to keep my friends in His care20 total reviews
Comment from Shirley B
This is a very nice prayer. Written by someone with a truly loving and generous heart. The meter and rhyme are both very good. Good luck to you in the contest, Shirley
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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This is a very nice prayer. Written by someone with a truly loving and generous heart. The meter and rhyme are both very good. Good luck to you in the contest, Shirley
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much! I appreciate you mentioning my rhyme. That's always important to me. I wish I could take credit for my heart, but i gotta thank Mama and Jesus for that. Thank you again!
Comment from Ann Smith
This poem includes just about everything you can think of in the way of a prayer for a friend. It is a poem that asks for blessings and protection and then in the last stanza it shows how thankful you are to have wonderful friends. We are made for relationships and we need to nurture them with our prayers. Good luck with the contest. This is a very good entry. ann
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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This poem includes just about everything you can think of in the way of a prayer for a friend. It is a poem that asks for blessings and protection and then in the last stanza it shows how thankful you are to have wonderful friends. We are made for relationships and we need to nurture them with our prayers. Good luck with the contest. This is a very good entry. ann
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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I'm thanking you with tears in my eyes. This is my first exceptional rating. I cannot tell you how much this means to me. And yes I was blessed with precious friends. God Bless you for this!
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You are welcome. ann
Comment from Alan K Pease
I say my prayers every night. I have written some good but short spiritual poems. I would like to put my efforts in to what you have done with your thoughts and see with your sense of rhyme. I think this the time to give the Sundays sermon. The poem abounds with rhyme and love. It is well laid out. Thank you
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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I say my prayers every night. I have written some good but short spiritual poems. I would like to put my efforts in to what you have done with your thoughts and see with your sense of rhyme. I think this the time to give the Sundays sermon. The poem abounds with rhyme and love. It is well laid out. Thank you
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much! I appreciate your comments especially about sense of rhyme. I wish I could branch out and write without rhyming but I've been rhyming since I was 10 and I can't quit! :) Thanks again
Comment from chita
Your artwork is perfect for this poem and you have good rhythm and rhyme.In your 6th stanza you write(But if their sorrow seem to deep to reach) I believe that this was just a typo but if feel that it should be written as (But if their sorrow seem "too" deep to reach).Your poem is soothing to my soul and you write with a lot of emotion.I love how you deliver such a powerful prayer to protect your friends and family in every way--great job.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Your artwork is perfect for this poem and you have good rhythm and rhyme.In your 6th stanza you write(But if their sorrow seem to deep to reach) I believe that this was just a typo but if feel that it should be written as (But if their sorrow seem "too" deep to reach).Your poem is soothing to my soul and you write with a lot of emotion.I love how you deliver such a powerful prayer to protect your friends and family in every way--great job.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much. I looked through a lot of photos before I found that one. As for the typo, I wonder if I can go back and correct it. Thanks for letting me know and thanks for your comments.
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I would attempt to try to edit because you don't want any typos and we all make those--you did a wonderful job!!!
Comment from gabriowl
Ahhh... What a great and powerful invocation of protection and healing. There is a polished flow to the words too, and it rolls off the reader's mental tongue. My favorite lines were: "If they lose someone they've loved so much
May they feel You holding their hand" - it's always there with us, but sometimes we only feel it when life makes us reach beyond our self. We are truly blessed, indeed.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Ahhh... What a great and powerful invocation of protection and healing. There is a polished flow to the words too, and it rolls off the reader's mental tongue. My favorite lines were: "If they lose someone they've loved so much
May they feel You holding their hand" - it's always there with us, but sometimes we only feel it when life makes us reach beyond our self. We are truly blessed, indeed.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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My Gosh! Your review is beautifully written:) That was one of my favorite lines too. Heaven knows, He's held my hand many a time. Thanks again.
Comment from Bulfornite
i love that picture and every thing you write with it brings meaning to the picture its absulutely beautiful and they way you want to protect your friends inspires me and gives me a great sensation full of emotion :) Love it completely
with love and light
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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i love that picture and every thing you write with it brings meaning to the picture its absulutely beautiful and they way you want to protect your friends inspires me and gives me a great sensation full of emotion :) Love it completely
with love and light
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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God Bless You! I searched hard to find a picture to fit it, Thanks for the thumbs up. Yes, I was blessed with the best friends. Thanks again
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Your welcome i wish i had been blessed with best fiends or a family that cared...
Comment from joyceebarb
I loved your poem about taking care of your friends.
It was really written well. I would just like to change
the sixth verse, I think it could be shorted a bit to make
it flow a little better. For instance:
For If their sorrow seems deep to reach
And their heart knows no end to the aching
comfort them to know you're there
listening to their heart while it's breaking
I hope you don't mind my suggestion. Just a thought.
Well done Poem!
Best Wishes,
Joyce
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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I loved your poem about taking care of your friends.
It was really written well. I would just like to change
the sixth verse, I think it could be shorted a bit to make
it flow a little better. For instance:
For If their sorrow seems deep to reach
And their heart knows no end to the aching
comfort them to know you're there
listening to their heart while it's breaking
I hope you don't mind my suggestion. Just a thought.
Well done Poem!
Best Wishes,
Joyce
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Wow! You nailed it! I was debated on that one forever. Wish I had your phone #. I could've called you before I submitted it :( Ha Ha Yes you're way is much better. Thanks for caring enough to tell me. I have a bad habit of being wordy sometimes. Thanks agfain!
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So glad to be of help, but you really don't
need much help, you write beautifully.
Joyce
Comment from lotsaluvisa
I really like this poem of giving back a prayer to your friends, it is open heartedly meant to be given to your friends deep from your soul to theirs. I could feel the feelings of love pouring out of the words as I read this. I wouldn't change anything on this poem and what a great picture you have located to go right with it.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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I really like this poem of giving back a prayer to your friends, it is open heartedly meant to be given to your friends deep from your soul to theirs. I could feel the feelings of love pouring out of the words as I read this. I wouldn't change anything on this poem and what a great picture you have located to go right with it.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Oh thank you so much. I searched through alot of pictures before I found than one.Thanks for noticing. Glad you could feel what was behind my words. Thanks again..
Comment from Triple P
Beautiful, unselfish prayer - the best kind! Your flow and rhymes are good, and add to your message. Wonderful job. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Beautiful, unselfish prayer - the best kind! Your flow and rhymes are good, and add to your message. Wonderful job. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much! I always worry how my poems flow so thanks for mentioning it. Also, thanks for the good luck wish. I'm sure I'll need it.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is written in smoothly flowing quatrains with strong abcb rhyming, and I love that it is a prayer on behalf of one's friends instead of oneself. There is a generosity of spirit in this that really spoke to me. Brooke :-)
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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Your poem is written in smoothly flowing quatrains with strong abcb rhyming, and I love that it is a prayer on behalf of one's friends instead of oneself. There is a generosity of spirit in this that really spoke to me. Brooke :-)
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you liking my rhyme scheme. I know it's kinda quirky but I can't stop writing that way. Thank you for your comments
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I typed a reply in the detailed reply but I wasn't sure if it went through. Just wanted to make sure you know how much your comments meant. Thanks a 2nd time around. Ha Ha
