Grandma's Attic
a kitten with angel wings?17 total reviews
Comment from Belinda
Sweet mother as an angel, keeping contact with her Babushka and Peepers the cat. You have written this story so fluently, Author, I think it covers all the requirements of the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
Sweet mother as an angel, keeping contact with her Babushka and Peepers the cat. You have written this story so fluently, Author, I think it covers all the requirements of the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Hi Belinda! Thank you very much! I appreciate your rating and encouragment!!
Comment from adewpearl
settle back in it's own dusty gloom - drop the apostrophe
it's = contraction for it is
play first, Peepers needed - replace comma with a semicolon or period
walked to the water's edge - add apostrophe
walked to the water's edge, sometimes - replace comma with semicolon or period
Where are you, Peepers - add comma for direct address
What is it, child - add comma
Help me find him, Grandmama - add comma
This is a lovely story, Susan - it really tugged at my heart. Great characters and natural-sounding dialogue :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
settle back in it's own dusty gloom - drop the apostrophe
it's = contraction for it is
play first, Peepers needed - replace comma with a semicolon or period
walked to the water's edge - add apostrophe
walked to the water's edge, sometimes - replace comma with semicolon or period
Where are you, Peepers - add comma for direct address
What is it, child - add comma
Help me find him, Grandmama - add comma
This is a lovely story, Susan - it really tugged at my heart. Great characters and natural-sounding dialogue :-) Brooke
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you Brooke, I will fix these right away. Again, thank you for a wonderful and kind review...you're the best!
Comment from gschroer
Great story! I am wondering whether there is any difference between angels and ghosts? In the first sentence of the second paragraph, I believe the word should be "sat" not "sitting" to make for consistency. I can't even think of the rule, I just think it sounds better. There are minor errors in punctuation that should be fixed.
The undercurrent of the story leads me to believe, perhaps the mother drowned in that lake or WAS drowned in the lake. Something sinister gnaws at me. Good writing.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
Great story! I am wondering whether there is any difference between angels and ghosts? In the first sentence of the second paragraph, I believe the word should be "sat" not "sitting" to make for consistency. I can't even think of the rule, I just think it sounds better. There are minor errors in punctuation that should be fixed.
The undercurrent of the story leads me to believe, perhaps the mother drowned in that lake or WAS drowned in the lake. Something sinister gnaws at me. Good writing.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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I will check this, I appreciate this helpful and kind review. You are very perceptive and I am thrilled you liked this. Thank you again!!
Comment from zmacgirl
I did really enjoy this. It was a little sad but was comforting in the end. Very well written. Is this a book chapter or just a contest entry? I could see the story continuing.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
I did really enjoy this. It was a little sad but was comforting in the end. Very well written. Is this a book chapter or just a contest entry? I could see the story continuing.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Hi there, I don't know...for now a contest entry. I want to write a book called "Little Camille"? So, who knows, I will be lucky to do either! Thank you Zmac, for this great review. I am thrilled you liked this!
Comment from Bulfornite
a loverly story i could picture all of it as i read and the child saying grandmama sounded very cute it was upseting that her grandma went missing and i don't like kids crying...
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
a loverly story i could picture all of it as i read and the child saying grandmama sounded very cute it was upseting that her grandma went missing and i don't like kids crying...
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Hi! Thank you so much! ( I love the word loverly)! I am happy you read for me, and am sorry about the crying! Please smile, it's not real! ")
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k :) hope that she find her grandmother in the end :)
Comment from Siddhartha Jatana
Yeah...I truly enjoyed the piece and the artwork too...Lol
Wonderfully crafted with plethora of emotions...
Commendable Imagery...
Powerful ending...
Thanks for sharing...
Well done!
Keep it up!
All the best for the contest...
God bless you!
Love and Regards,
Sid
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
Yeah...I truly enjoyed the piece and the artwork too...Lol
Wonderfully crafted with plethora of emotions...
Commendable Imagery...
Powerful ending...
Thanks for sharing...
Well done!
Keep it up!
All the best for the contest...
God bless you!
Love and Regards,
Sid
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Hi Sid! Thank you very much! I will try to keep at this, I enjoy trying, and hearing from nice people like you!! Thanks again!!
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Most welcome:) All the best!
Warm regards,
Sid
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, a good storyline and a beautiful picture, i loved the story and i wish you the best of luck in the contest. great job
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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
this is very well written with good form, good flow, a good storyline and a beautiful picture, i loved the story and i wish you the best of luck in the contest. great job
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Hi Sweet! Thank you so much. It's good to know you enjoyed this, and thank you for this wonderful review too!! ")