Emotions of Love and Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Plane Trip 2010"Love and Life with many emotions
3 total reviews
Comment from TT7Z
Your flow is smooth and consistent. Vision was clearly captured. The only problem I noticed, the green rain and look like trees below. Reference the clouds or actual trees and where did the green rain come from if the clouds are below just a view that doesn't make sense. All in all a good piece, thank you.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2010
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Your flow is smooth and consistent. Vision was clearly captured. The only problem I noticed, the green rain and look like trees below. Reference the clouds or actual trees and where did the green rain come from if the clouds are below just a view that doesn't make sense. All in all a good piece, thank you.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2010
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Thank You for your comments, greatly appreciated.
Comment from Mirandawrites
What a sweet poem, filled with childlike joy and wonder. Just lovely, and the color works for this message too. In my opinion, the poem might flow just a bit more if less words are used, or even by shortening the words somehow.
Keep on writing, I truly enjoy your poem/message.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2010
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What a sweet poem, filled with childlike joy and wonder. Just lovely, and the color works for this message too. In my opinion, the poem might flow just a bit more if less words are used, or even by shortening the words somehow.
Keep on writing, I truly enjoy your poem/message.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2010
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Thank You for your input to this writting it was certainly appreciated.
Comment from adewpearl
I like the steady cadence of your couplets - there was a bouncy, cheery tone to them that showed the sheer delight of the speaker as she looked out the plane window and got a kick out of the clouds around her and trees below. Love the ending, the strong rides - an overall happy poem :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2010
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I like the steady cadence of your couplets - there was a bouncy, cheery tone to them that showed the sheer delight of the speaker as she looked out the plane window and got a kick out of the clouds around her and trees below. Love the ending, the strong rides - an overall happy poem :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2010
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Thank You for your great review, it was kindly taken.
