Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Chapter 4 part two"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from afternoonlight
The tension and conflict are building, I've fallen behind a couple of chapters, hope your are well, I thought you were going to be off for awhile, glad to find this fine read here.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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The tension and conflict are building, I've fallen behind a couple of chapters, hope your are well, I thought you were going to be off for awhile, glad to find this fine read here.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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Thank you for going back and reading the beginning. I appreciate it.
Comment from RebelRose
Boy, that Joe sounds too good to be true although I have to admit, when I met my present husband I thought the same about him. After 25 years, I still think the same thing, ha ha. I remember the days when the guys used to steal a touch of my breast and make it look 'accidental'. That's as far as it wnr back then.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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Boy, that Joe sounds too good to be true although I have to admit, when I met my present husband I thought the same about him. After 25 years, I still think the same thing, ha ha. I remember the days when the guys used to steal a touch of my breast and make it look 'accidental'. That's as far as it wnr back then.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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You are right, in today's world anything goes. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from KWM59
Hi barbara.wilkey! I am one who is reading for the first time, and Romance Fiction has never been my 'thing'...but, want you to know, I found this interesting and kept me interested all along the way. I was understanding the situation (plot) sorta as we do on tv show we have never watched before:) So, long and short of it is...I like this alot!! Thanks so much, Best to you, KWM59 aka afreespiritedfriend:)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Hi barbara.wilkey! I am one who is reading for the first time, and Romance Fiction has never been my 'thing'...but, want you to know, I found this interesting and kept me interested all along the way. I was understanding the situation (plot) sorta as we do on tv show we have never watched before:) So, long and short of it is...I like this alot!! Thanks so much, Best to you, KWM59 aka afreespiritedfriend:)
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I am glad you could follow it.
Comment from Triple P
Nice chapter. Good pace to the story, and I'm drawn in by the characters. Wonderful job.
Do you mind if I give a few minor suggestions? I'm not an expert on Romance literature at all, so if you don't want to listen, I'll perfectly understand.
'She nodded, and then they drove to the bluff.' The second half of that sentence is unnecessary and redundant, since Joe had already asked about driving to the bluff in the same paragraph.
'used his fingers to hightlight carressed.' How did he actually do this? This sentence disrupted the flow for me. I did a double take and looked back up to see if I missed something, like a written note or something. Could you either expand on what you mean in this phrase, or clarify it?
Thanks for listening to me and sorry for rambling on like that. Wonderful job.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Nice chapter. Good pace to the story, and I'm drawn in by the characters. Wonderful job.
Do you mind if I give a few minor suggestions? I'm not an expert on Romance literature at all, so if you don't want to listen, I'll perfectly understand.
'She nodded, and then they drove to the bluff.' The second half of that sentence is unnecessary and redundant, since Joe had already asked about driving to the bluff in the same paragraph.
'used his fingers to hightlight carressed.' How did he actually do this? This sentence disrupted the flow for me. I did a double take and looked back up to see if I missed something, like a written note or something. Could you either expand on what you mean in this phrase, or clarify it?
Thanks for listening to me and sorry for rambling on like that. Wonderful job.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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I will recheck those areas. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from nora arjuna
hi bab, another sweet chapter. now i wonder if there's any more man like him lol, and she's so innocent. :)
just one little nit:
"Falling in love[,]" he interrupted.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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hi bab, another sweet chapter. now i wonder if there's any more man like him lol, and she's so innocent. :)
just one little nit:
"Falling in love[,]" he interrupted.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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I can't believe after all my reviews you are the only one to catch that. Wow, thank you I appreciate your eagle eye.
Comment from Realist101
Well, I need more sixes. Barbara, this is so well done. I am very impressed with your use of dialogue. I was RIGHT THERE. It was so smooth and seamless...and real sounding. This is how it is supposed to be. I have much to learn! ") Susan
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Well, I need more sixes. Barbara, this is so well done. I am very impressed with your use of dialogue. I was RIGHT THERE. It was so smooth and seamless...and real sounding. This is how it is supposed to be. I have much to learn! ") Susan
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you very much for your kind review. I appreciate the virtual 6. It workds for me.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
A passionate addition to the book, Barbara. Joe and Sara are quite the pair. I found no errors and the narraitive flowed really well. Nice descriptions.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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A passionate addition to the book, Barbara. Joe and Sara are quite the pair. I found no errors and the narraitive flowed really well. Nice descriptions.
Isaiah
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from marcii
Best way to describe this chapters is that its sweet,romantic and light emotional.
Your descriptions are pretty good and the flow of your story works well.
Getting to see the characters in happy times is interesting.
Marcii
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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Best way to describe this chapters is that its sweet,romantic and light emotional.
Your descriptions are pretty good and the flow of your story works well.
Getting to see the characters in happy times is interesting.
Marcii
Comment Written 06-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hello Barbara. I was starting to work on another story line and noticed that I had several notices of submissions by my favorite writers. I was happy to see this one posted by you. It is wonderfully done and error free. The narrative is active and the dialogue is very well done as usual. This story continues to hold the attention and builds with anticipation with each paragraph. Great work, Barbara. Keep up the great writing...Tim
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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Hello Barbara. I was starting to work on another story line and noticed that I had several notices of submissions by my favorite writers. I was happy to see this one posted by you. It is wonderfully done and error free. The narrative is active and the dialogue is very well done as usual. This story continues to hold the attention and builds with anticipation with each paragraph. Great work, Barbara. Keep up the great writing...Tim
Comment Written 06-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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Thank you for the kind words. I appreciate them and you wonderful support.
Comment from RKagan
You do a wonderful job of writing romance. I have been following this and it is very good. The characters are well rounded and the love affair is very believable.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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You do a wonderful job of writing romance. I have been following this and it is very good. The characters are well rounded and the love affair is very believable.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
